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Starwars Sample. The passing to the darkside.
I wrote this on an RP site, it's basically showing how my character (Once Jedi Knight Rayden Shiong) loses his mind and goes to the dark side. It's probably one of the best short stories I've ever written. Check it out. Also don't worry if you don't know who any of the people are. The settings like, a hundred years after the Vong war.
Rayden had felt the Hutt's death. And he was angry about it. It wasn't fair that he did got get to kill him. That Hutt deserved more than just a swift death, he deserved pain, suffering, torture. No, death was much too merciful.
Rayden had flown to Haruun Kal to get away from the res of the Galaxy. Haruun Kal was primitive, and mostly uninhabitable, making it a nice place to lay low, or be isolated, yet there were people, and a spaceport with modern technology, so if he needed to be medical attention ro something he would be able to get it. But their was another reason he chose this planet to go to.
The Dark side was strong here.
Haruun Kal was filled hate. Their has been a massive civil war going on in Haruun Kal for hundreds of years, between the Balawai, and the Korunnai. It was put to a stop by the Jedi Master Mace Windu during the clone wars a long time ago, when the Old Republic was still strong, when their WAS a Republic. But Haruun kal was mostly ignored by the New Republic, and was not even noticed at all during the Vong war.
It was only a matter of time before the war had started up again.
Rayden was walking around the great Jungle that took up most of the space of the planet. Here, he could feel the dark side the strongest. Their had been so much death here, that it was almost overwhelming. But Rayden didn't mind. He would not be able to go back to the Jedi now, they would never accept him. They knew, as well as he did, that the dark side had a strong grasp on him. He could be neutral, but he knew that it was only a matter of time before he was fully ensnared by the Darkness. No one can ever hope to live in it, among it, without being consumed by it. So,
Maybe he should embrace it.
Why prolong it? Why spend countless nights tossing and turning, battling an undefeatable foe? He could instead LET himself be consumed by it. He could be a part of it. He could...control it. Yes, he could control it.
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No.
You can never control the Dark side. You may think you are wielding it. But is the exact opposite. Oh yes, quiet the opposite. It is actually wielding you. Wielding you for it's own purposes. It's dark purposes. The Sith are nothing more than tools. A slave to their own emotions. They are fueled only by their anger. Their passion. It would be folly to go down the dark path.
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)) Rayden's mind is producing a split personality of itself. The Darkside of his thoughts will be in red. The regular side will be in blue. ((
Rayden sat on a rock, in a small clearing surrounded by dank jungle. His head was in his hands. He was slowly losing it, and he knew it. That's when the...other thoughts came.
You are speaking out of ignorance. You have no experience of the darkside. One who knows nothing, can understand, nothing.
I have seen enough of it to understand how it works. I have seen what it can do to people. What it has done to people. I think I have an understanding of how the darkside works.
Ah, but do you? You have seen what it does to people from the outside. But do you know the thought process?
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Well? Do you?
No.
You do not. But you can learn. The darkside is much more simpler than the Jedi percieve it to be, claim it to be. It is much safer as well. The Jedi fear the darkside because they do not understand it.
The Jedi fear the darkside because it is to powerful. It consumes anyoen who harnesses its power. it-
But not you.
What?
Why should you fear to use it? You have the power, Rayden. You can control it. You do not need to b consumed by it. You alone can be the most powerful Sith lord ever.
... I can?
Yes. All you must do is to tap into your anger. Than, we will be unstoppable. let your feelings guide you. You must believe in yourself. Believe in the darkside, in your anger. A common ideal the Jedi and the Sith share. You will continue to see that us and the Jedi are not so different.
... ... You speak the truth.
Yes, I do. I care only for our well being, Rayden. WouldI really try to decieve you? In doing so, I would be decieving us both, would it not?
You have a point.
Yes. So, what will be your choice.
I... I am ready to give in to the darkside. But, what about master Pablo? I cannot just turn ob him like this. He is like my father.
You cannot trust him. He has been decieving you Rayden, he does not want you to reach your full potential. They all fear you. They will all try to stop you. You must trust only yourself, and me.
You are right. I will not kill him, if he does not try to stop us. But if he does, than I shall have to destroy him.
Yes, that is right desision. Now, let us go construct your new light saber. I shall think of a new name for you to go by.
Rayden, you shall become the greatest Sith in history. I guarantee it.
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Rayden raised his head ip. it was jow dark. That little discusiion in his head had taken almost six hours. No matter, time was of no importance. Rayden got up from the rock he was sitting on. Hsi eyes were completely yellow, except for the black pupil, which was almost cat shaped. He walked otu of the clearning and headed toward the Town. He had a new light saber to build.
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Several hundred light years away. Pablo Inora was sleeping in his starfighter. Tears started to flow down his cheeks...
I apologize for any grammar mistakes. i am sure their are alot of them.
Oh and comments would be GREATLY appreciated.
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It sucked! 
Nah, it good, neat, and very great.
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Final Blaxican
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**Takes Place on Bespin.**
"Get ready, he approaches."
I am ready.
Scorn watched as the small figure in the distance walked toward him. Today, Master Inora would die. Die here, on this desolate gas planet, such a shame for a great Jedi Master such as him.
The small figure eventually gained the shape of Pablo Inora himself. Soon he was only twenty meters, than fifteen. He stopped at ten.
So the old man is cautious as well. Good, it will be that much more interesting.
*****
Pablo's face was sunken, sad. He had no idea how much the dark side had consumed him. Still, he must try.
"Rayden, at last I have found you. I have been so worried about you, my young Padawan."
"I am no longer your Padawan, Master Inora. Now, after all these years, let us find out who has always been the better."
Rayden ignited his wrist blades, releasing the crimson red and gold blades. He held his hands at hi sides.
Pablo shook his head and smiled sadly.
"You always were so competitive. It is not too late, you know. You can come back to the light, you do not have to let the dark side consume you."
Rayden's eyes blazed with such an intensity that Pablo was taken aback, yet, past the inferno he could still see a trace of the happiness and innocence of his old Padawan.
Pablo held his hands out from his sides.
"I will not kill you, Padawan, I will only defend."
Rayden grinned and put his wrists together so that the blades intersected each other, making an "x" sign.
"You will learn today that those who do not use their blade can still die upon them! Now, you die!" And with a beast like battle cry, Scorn charged at his former Master.
Quick as a flash, the old Jedi activated his light saber and parried the blow aimed at his leg’s he then raised his blade to guard his chest, than twirled and delivered a faint at Scorn's chest, than delivered a horizontal swipe, which was promptly blocked and countered with a vertical swipe meant to cleave Pablo from head to toe.
The two warriors battle ferociously, their blades a blur of blue, red, and gold. Pablo gave ground repeatedly, backing both of them into one of the old, ruined structures of Cloud city.
*****
Scorn swiped with his duel blades indiscriminately, moving so fast that even his mind could not comprehend what he was doing; all he knew was that his hands were moving, attacking and defending, though he did more attacking. The Soresu style was a defensive style, and Scorn wouldn't have to worry about his defense until much later.
Though, he had to admit, he was having trouble parrying some of his former Masters strokes. He was already tiring, and they had only been battling for 6 minutes!
Scorn took a split second to survey their new surroundings. They had moved from the metal clearing outside into a worn old wooden structure, it was in ruins, and there was nothing in it, save a staircase.
Scorn twirled, his arms outstretched doing a sort of windmill with his light sabers, Pablo blocked each one in turn then force jumped over him, landing behind him. Scorn twirled around in time to block a stab aimed at his lower back. In doing so he managed to elbow Pablo in the face, he grabbed the stunned Jedi Master by the face than hurled him with all his strength. Pablo flew through the air, bouncing off of a wall and landing on an overhanging ledge at the top of the staircase. Scorn force jumped to the top of the staircase, than stabbed down, hoping to pin Pablo to the ground with his light saber. Pablo rolled out of the way than did a ground sweep with his legs, knocking Scorn off his feet. Pablo did a handspring, than kicked Scorn in the ribs. Scorn doubled over, than used the force to slam Pablo into a wall. He slammed him into the walls two more times, than got up and DDT'd him off the ledge.
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Pablo was seeing spots, his neck was also stiff. Was it broken? He twitched his neck, sending a wave of pain through him. No, not broken just hurtling like hell. Pablo heard the sound a light saber being activated and raised his light saber up in front of his face to deflect a downward strike aimed at his neck. He blocked two more similar strikes, than slashed outward with his light saber. Rayden jumped over the slash, than struck downwards again. Pablo rolled than got up to his feet, after getting his footing back he again entered the ready stance of Soresu. Pablo backed up until his back was against up the support pillar of the structure, than waited for his former padawan to make the first move.
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Scorn looked at his Master with pure hatred, he was really hoping that DDT would have done more damage, it seemed that the old fool had more durability than anticipated.
Scorn yelled, than jumped at Pablo, making a wide, and very wild horizontal strike. Pablo dodged the swipe, and instead Scorn ended up slicing the support pillar in half. Wait.... oh damn.
The structure started to shake, than the entire roof collapsed. Scorn used the force to hold up three rather large slabs of wood, then turned around to see a large piece of the roof come flying toward him. Pablo had force pushed it at him. Rayden grunted in pain as the wooden slab hit him in the chest, forcing all the air out of his lungs, than it kept going, and Scorn and the wood together flew through the wall of the building.
Scorn was seeing stars, and knew that his time was pretty much up. Sure enough his Master jumped through large hole had created in the wall, than ran towards him, light saber ignited.
Scorn jumped to his feet, than ignited his own light sabers, parrying and delivering blows. It was getting increasingly hard to block when his own blood started to ooze into his eyes, he could feel every muscle in body screaming at him to rest, but he could not, for rest meant death. Instead, he focused on his anger. It was unfair that things were going the way they were. He was the stronger of the two, why was he using? It was unfair that the Galaxy was against him, unfair that the Jedi were against him, unfair that even his own body was against him.
Sure enough he felt new energy course through him, and as the adrenaline spiked in his veins, he gained a new level of bloodlust, of power.
Scorn force jumped into the air, than fired several force lightning storms at his former master. Pablo force jumped into the air, dodging the first two blasts, than using his light saber to act as a lightning rod, absorbing the last two force storms. Still, some of the energy made it past his light saber, and his robes burst into flames. Pablo quickly discarded the robes, than landed in a crouch.
Scorn's hands balled into his fists, and then they started to glow with energy, a buildup of lightning itself. Scorn held his hands out from his body, then unleashed the biggest force storm seen in the last fifty years. As the lightning traveled across the ground at supersonic speeds, it left a blazing trail of fire in its wake. Pablo tried to sidestep it, but was unable to completely evade it, and was sent flying several meters away.
Scorn was on him instantly, slashing and slicing any ware and everywhere. Pablo managed to block all of them while lying on the ground, his clothes completely black, and several third degree burns across his body.
Pablo force pushed the sith off of him, than jumped too his feet, entering the SOresu stance.
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Scorn couldn't believe it. His master has survived the blast, and was still able to defend himself! Scorn fell to his knees and yelled in frustration.
"CURSE YOU! CURSE YOU! YOU AND ALL THE OTHER JEDI!"
Scorn got up, than pressed a button on gauntlet. He stood straight, unmoving, and smirking. Pablo wondered wearily what new devilry the Sith was setting into motion, than sighed in dismay when he heard the steady whine of repulsorlifts. Sure enough, a large Corvette came into view, and a few seconds later, it landed behind him. Pablo backed away from the Corvette, though still keeping an eye on Scorn.
The entry hatch of the Corvette popped open, and several-dark skinned, grim looking men jumped out of the ship. They activated buttons on their wrists, and twin vibro-shields materialized out of seemingly no were. The warriors surrounded him, and Pablo counted twenty. His heart sank; he wouldn't be able to defeat all of them.
Scorn grinned evilly.
"These are my Koruunai warriors! They will be your ends, my old Master. Now, we will see whether the force is really with you or not. Koruun, kill him."
Pablo sighed, than entered his Soresu stance once again, his bones ached, his body was burnt, but he would die fighting, die in the service of the force.
The Koruun closed in, making a tighter circle. Than, suddenly, one of the Koruun's heads exploded in a shower of blood, bone, and brain matter. The Korrun next to that one fell victim to the blast a second later. Scorn whirled around to were he sensed the death was coming from. Their. At least a thousand meters away, at the top of one of the old buildings, was his young protégé to be, Chi Hokan. And in her hand, no, that could not be right. No, impossible, yet it was right their. She was sniping his men with a pistol! Virtually impossible, yet here she was. She must be using the force...
"You two!" He pointed to the two nearest Korrunai Soldiers, he then pointed in her direction.
"Go, kill her!"
The two soldiers saluted, than sprinted off. A second later another two of the ones still in his circle collapsed to the ground, bullet holes in their craniums.
"Korrun, kill the Jedi master!" He said, than stepped back as the remaining fourteen Koruun lashed out at Pablo Inora...
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Chi Hokan steadied her pistol and, using the fourth, aimed at the next Koruunai in line. She fired, watching the bullet stay true to the mark until it impacted on the Koruun’s head three seconds later. As she watched the specks of warriors all scramble around, obviously fighting Master Inora, she noticed two specks break from the pack and sprint toward her. Obviously her location was found out. She decided to wait until they got in better range before firing, and instead decided to take out more of the group fighting Master Inora.
As she steadied her blaster pistol and took aim she noticed that Rayden, the sith was staring almost right at her. Maybe a slug bullet in between the eyes would break the grin he had on his face. She took aim, and fired, she watched the bullet speed toward her target, than it came to a sudden stop. Rayden’s hand was clenched in a fist a centimeter in front of his face, and when he unclenched his hand the slug fell out of his open palm. She clenched her teeth in disbelief. He had caught the bullet…
She was brought of her thoughts by the hollow banging sound of someone running up metal stairs. She whirled around and put her pistol back in its holster. Standing in font of her, were two Koruun Ack Gaurds. Vibro-shields humming they stepped toward her menacingly.
Quicker then even her Master could ignite his light saber, she had both of her slug thrower pistols out and firing and twirling them at the same time. Round after round bounced off the Guard’s Vibro-shields as they came closer, now only ten or twenty yards away from there. They smiled and their steps increased to a jog. She fired more franticly, than actually started aiming with her guns. Soon she was firing maybe ten or twenty slugs a second, and the Ack Guards to move faster and more erratically in order to block her shots. They increased their tempo from a jog to a sprint, and were at her in less than two seconds.
Chi twirled her slug throwers one more time then put them away and drew out her two light sabers, she ignited both and took a Djem So stance. She didn’t know much in the way of light saber fighting, but hopefully it wasn’t much different from fighting with a vibro-sword.
The two Ack Guards yelled and swiped with their vibro-shields. Chi backed away, parrying and striking and as she went. She backed up closer and closer to the edge, than, when she was close to it, she simply flicked her wrist, force throwing a screaming Ack Guard over her and off the edge of the roof, were he fifty feet onto the hard metal floor below.
The remaining Ack Guard’s face contorted with rage, and he yelled once more and charged at her. Chi force jumped over his head than tried to force push off the ledge, He countered with a force push of his own, sending her instead flying in the air until she landed in the middle of the roof. She got up and went again into Djem So stance. The Ack Guard jumped at her, striking, spinning, and throwing punches. Chi gritted her teeth and tried to keep up with the Koruun’s movements. She spun and parried, than struck with both of her light sabers. She feinted with her right and instead went all the way with her right. The Ack Guard went for the bait and swung both his shields to his left, leaving his right open.
Chi grimaced at the man’s screams, and the smell of burnt flesh as her light saber went right through the man’s shoulder like a hot knife through butter.
The man gazed down at his severed stump of an arm, than pimp smacked a dumbstruck Chi in the face. As she lay on the ground, momentarily stunned, the Ack Guard walked around her in circles, observing her before reaching down to pick her up and throw her over the ledge.
Unbeknownst to the Guard, Chi was actually playing possum. As the man reached down to grab her she reacted instantly, grabbing his hand and twisting it roughly so that he had to stumble to keep from falling over. Chi did a handspring to launch herself to the ground, than pulled a sticky thermal detonator out from her Jedi Robe. She threw the grenade at the Guards chest, watching it stick to his tunic, than force pushed the doomed man off the ledge of the building. The ensuing explosion of the detonator rocked the very foundations of the building she was on, also blowing a whole in one of the walls of the lower levels. The building shook once more, than fractured into pieces as it caved in on itself.
Chi struggled to keep herself upright as the entire roof shuddered, than started to fragment. She gulped, looked over the edge of the roof, gulped again, than jumped off the roof. As she free fell, she reactivated one of her light sabers and shoved it into the shaking wall. Though it did not stop her descent, it did slow down her decent drastically, when she was ten feet away from the ground she deactivated her light saber then fell the reaming few feet, hitting the ground and rolling, letting the roll absorb most of the impact. She sprinted away from the building and stopped and turned around once she was a safe distance away. The building finally completely fell in on itself, and a loud roaring sound filled the air as tons of rubble piled on itself. Once the debris cloud cleared what was once a fifty-foot building was now a ten-foot mound of duracrete.
Chi sighed, and, using the sleeves of her robes, wiped the sweat and dirt off of her brow. She turned to were the battle was still raging between her Master and the sith and his Ack Guards. She sighed again and began running in their direction. Today was a long day…
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