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Bardock42
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D-did you rhyme "jacket" with "it".

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Nov 4th, 2007 01:29 AM

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Selphie
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D-did you rhyme "jacket" with "it".

Hmm, yeah I did. I guess I never noticed until now I pronounce jacket, "jack-it".

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Nov 4th, 2007 01:32 AM

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Hmm, yeah I did. I guess I never noticed until now I pronounce jacket, "jack-it".

I pronounce frog, "fireworks", but I wouldn't rhyme it with "sire jerks" no expression

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Nov 4th, 2007 01:34 AM

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Originally posted by Bardock42
I pronounce frog, "fireworks", but I wouldn't rhyme it with "sire jerks"

So, constructive criticism would be nice, rather how you are stating it right now, which is rather confusing.

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Nov 4th, 2007 01:36 AM

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So, constructive criticism would be nice, rather how you are stating it right now, which is rather confusing.

Nah, I refrain from constructive criticism, in fact, I mostly try to keep poetry criticism to myself and a few selected ones as I feel I couldn't write anything reasonable poetry wise myself. Only in the most obnoxious cases I might feel the need to call the poet an idiot.

Well....glad to say yours are not obnoxious enough. To me, they seem to be quite up there by this forums standards actually. But that might just be cause the last three threads I visited hear made burning out my eyes with a couple of rusty needles seem a worthwhile option.

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Nov 4th, 2007 01:39 AM

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Nah, I refrain from constructive criticism, in fact, I mostly try to keep poetry criticism to myself and a few selected ones as I feel I couldn't write anything reasonable poetry wise myself. Only in the most obnoxious cases I might feel the need to call the poet an idiot.

Well....glad to say yours are not obnoxious enough. To me, they seem to be quite up there by this forums standards actually. But that might just be cause the last three threads I visited hear made burning out my eyes with a couple of rusty needles seem a worthwhile option.

Not sure if I should feel good about that or not now......

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Nov 4th, 2007 01:42 AM

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Not sure if I should feel good about that or not now......

Neutral. I would say. I don't think my opinion either way should influence your emotions on this.

I like chatting with you

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Nov 4th, 2007 01:47 AM

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Neutral. I would say. I don't think my opinion either way should influence your emotions on this.

I like chatting with you

Yeah, you are right. If you hate it, you hate it. I'm proud of it, even though art could always use improvement, that's just how it is.

I too enjoy chatting with you. happy

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Nov 4th, 2007 01:48 AM

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Yeah, you are right. If you hate it, you hate it. I'm proud of it, even though art could always use improvement, that's just how it is.

I too enjoy chatting with you.

YOU ARE BEING OFF TOPIC.

Reported.

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Nov 4th, 2007 01:54 AM

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YOU ARE BEING OFF TOPIC.

Reported.

I like a man that takes initiative. Very much so.

But yes, quit the small chat.

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Nov 4th, 2007 01:56 AM

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I like a man that takes initiative. Very much so.

But yes, quit the small chat.

YOU ARE NOT EVEN MY REAL MOTHER!!!

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Nov 4th, 2007 02:00 AM

Selphie
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Just some new poetry I wrote today!

This one's about someone, it's quite obvious who it is if you just look.

God could only explain the way I
love you. Sometimes I feel you are my
everything. You protect me, and
never harm me. I hope you
need me like I need you.

And here's another.

I'm not a little girl,
I don't need you to linger.
I'm not going to be wrapped or curled,
around anybody's finger.

Don't show me those lubricated tears,
you and your love are fake.
I'm not scared of your pouty, dark leers,
touch me, it'll be your biggest mistake.

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Nov 26th, 2007 08:52 PM

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very nice

Nov 27th, 2007 04:22 PM

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Selphie
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Why thank you there Feanor!

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Nov 27th, 2007 09:15 PM

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why....you're absolutely welcome

Dec 3rd, 2007 04:38 PM

Selphie
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Something I wrote last night.

Her name was Lauren.
When she uttered the words,
my heels fell back to the floor, and,
I was opposite of self-assured.

We began as friends,
she truly was kind.
We talked of "to-the-ends",
and she crept into my mind.

We were now full grown,
her beauty suddenly breath-taking.
Her interest in me had shown,
my anxious body was shaking.

But as I drew near,
our relationship seemed slack.
Revealed was my deepest fear,
she didn't care back.

My heart felt the deepest shove,
I gave up on curiousity by then.
She was the only girl I've ever loved,
and her name was Laruen.

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Dec 3rd, 2007 08:37 PM

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wow....its powerful...i know what thats like....and alot of other things

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Selphie
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First chick I've ever liked. Not completely over her yet. Happened about a year ago........but life goes on. I like guys more anyways.

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Dec 4th, 2007 03:35 AM

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Here's one I wrote about a year ago. Found it while flipping through an old notebook. Not my best work, but it still holds a lot of meaning to me. Maybe I'll fix it up a little bit some other time, but I'll post it up as it was.

I do not see a future for me.
And I know you're thinking, how can that be?
Even though I'm not old, I've grown.
I truly think I'll be alone.
I really no longer want to live,
or see what life and people really have to give.
I don't think pain will just disappear,
it aches so bad, and that's my fear.
Could I possibly get over this?
Or maybe the pain will be something I'd miss...
Would anybody answer a plea,
to be there, and help someone like me?

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Dec 5th, 2007 01:58 AM