Its the way you describe the colours and the things that are happening, so that the person reading the poem cna almost see what you're describing.
You give very clear images in your poems.
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"Give a man a fire and he will be warm for a night. Set a man on fire and he will be warm for the rest of his life"
Gender: Female Location: -im the middle of lostville-
forgotten
today i lost the sun
bring it back to me
the warmth
i sought; had won
bring it back to me
today i lost the trees
bring them back to me
the shelter
of their leaves
bring it back to me
today i lost waves
bring them back to me
life giving
that they gave
bring it back to me
today i lost my soul
give it back to me
two halves
the same whole
give it back to me
today i lost my dream
give it back to me
the sun the waves
my soul the trees
give it back to me
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dirty thoughts can lead to trouble
Last edited by natashia on Jul 20th, 2006 at 05:27 AM
Gender: Female Location: -im the middle of lostville-
it talks about a man
the sun in her eyes that warms her up, that she had fought for and won
how he is the trees, strong, protective sheltering her from well any thing
how he is the waves, -passion, fighter, how he gives and is her life
how he is a part of her the other half of her soul she is not whole or complete without him
how he is her dream- the only thing she wants the only thing she has wanted
he is all of theese and more.
the last line should read:
bring ye back to me
telling no begging him to come back to her.
(wherever he is)
Gender: Female Location: -im the middle of lostville-
breakdown
to be or not to be that is what i am
for which one i cannot see
is that the life of man?
looking in the mirror blank
my eyes watching me
inside my soul will rant and rave
outside i am falling.
to be or not to be that is what i am
to see or not to see
the soul
of a lost
man.
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