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cundiff11
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A story i made up.
Ok here it goes. I will think of chapters later, for now, it just has the title.
THE GUMARI
The gumari: The son of the King and Queen of all five nations, spread out across the Gunya (goon-ya) canyon, which is 9000 miles in diameter. The gunya canyaon is shaped like a square, with one nation on each corner, and one in the middle. Where the nations are located is based on something in the canyon that influences there power. There are five nations, all of one element each. There is water, earth, air, fire, and magic.
The palace that the king and queen live in was created at the beginning of time, and is placed in the clouds. There are no other palaces or anything like this, it was made because the king and queen must be present for the canyon to survive.
The gumari, once he reaches the age of 10 years old, spitirtually, and mentally, changes. He is the son of the king and queen no longer, in blood or relationship. He is dedicated to the canyaon, and is meant to protect the canyon, or do what needs to be done to help the canyon.
The king and queen will always have two sons before they have any other gender. The first one will be the gumari, the second, will hold the throne when the king dies, or when he reaches the age of 25. He then has the two sons, but the cycle goes on for 1000 years, then the son has a gumari, in one of the two sons.
Then there are the evil ogres,which are stationed about 200 miles away from the canyon, in the middle of knowwhere.
who have there own type of magic, which can only be used for evil or trickery.It is said that the gumari never dies unless he fails to protect the canyon, in which another gumari comes. After 1000 years of serving the canyon, he goes to face another challenge in another world, and nobody knows about anything farther because he never returns.
The gumari of the millenium is Zeke, who has just turned 10 and just came out of his change. He was given a nimbus( flying cloud) and told to head down straight to the ground where he would meet the magic nation. Zeke knew all of the elments as well as you could, and was curious about his knewly found powers. Zeke could teleport, travel at 500 miles per minute through earth, fly, had very acute hearing and eyesight, could run at 250 miles per second, and create tornadoes. The gumari also had powers beyond any nation, any elemental thing, like lightning, plants, and other things in that category.
Zeke was getting cold on a cool night, so he decided he would stop and set up camp for the night. He jumped from his nimbus, landed neatly on the ground, and created a tent out of nowhere, and located the magic nation, as in his mind was a map of the whole canyon. He saw that he was on the outskirts on the magic nation, only about 100 miles away. He decided he would fly by himself, and get his nimbus later. He was laying down by the fire he had created, shooting electic balls in the air, and creating himself a mini forest, when he heard a russling noise. He decided it would be fun to spy on something so he became camouflage and jumped in the air, looking for what he had heard. He could tell that it was only about 5 miles away, so he looked, and saw fires.
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Jul 24th, 2006 06:55 PM |
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cundiff11
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If anyone likes it, i will contine, as i know exactly how the story is going to go.
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Jul 24th, 2006 06:56 PM |
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cundiff11
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Location: United States
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please people reply
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Jul 24th, 2006 07:46 PM |
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cundiff11
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Ok, i need to write so here it goes. The fires were HUGE, flames going 15 feet in the air. Coming a little closer, he saw the fire set up in the middle of about 5 tents. Right by the fire, were three boys, about his age, all in a metal cage. They did not look scared, just angry.
Then, something walked out of a tent. It was like an enourmous man, about 7.5''. He said in a deep, voice, you are prisoners, trying to hunt down and kill ogres! You will suffer at the torch TONIGHT, no exceptions. You have 5 mins, then, we shall place you above the fire, and let the metal get hot! He returned to the tent with an evil grin on his face. Zeke knew it was an ogre, from what he had said, and how huge he was. Zeke knew he had to save the boys. He would wait until the ogres came out, then he would attack!
After five minutes, the king ogre came out, gave a howling noise, and waited. Then ogres started emerging from the tent. About four came out of each tent, and there were 17 ogres.They were all wearing heavy armor, with spikes coming out all over. Zeke knew what he had to do. He put his hands together, and made an electric ball about the size of a soccer ball. He conjured all the strenght he could, then threw it at the leader. It hit him dead in the back, and he collapsed, knocked out. Then he waved his arms and earth shot out from under the ogres, sending them straight in the air, enough time to run down to the camp. The ogres looked at him, then snapped there fingers. 16 green bolts shot straight at him. He teleported right by one, and encased him in ice with a wave of his hand. He showed him to the other ogres, then, set the ice ablaze. Then it all vanished, and within 3 seconds, all the ogres were in metal cages, bound. He pointed his finger at the cage, which door shot open. Thanks the first one said. He walked into a tent, and came back with three things in his hand. A wand, a necklace with a saphire in the middle, and a necklace with a stone, clear as ice in the middle. The first necklace he placed around his neck. The wand he threw to the tallest of the three, and the other necklace, to the shortest.
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Jul 25th, 2006 02:23 AM |
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cundiff11
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ok can people please tell me if they don' t like it or if they do?
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Jul 25th, 2006 02:04 PM |
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