it's good.
but do you think you can watch for spelling mistakes. it is kind of hard to read. and also if you could separate the paragraphs a little it would be eaiser to read.
While they were walking up to the castle, Hermione pulled Harry away from the rest of the students. "What's wrong, Hermione?" asked Harry "You won't believe who was snogging Jesse!" she said "Why do you even care?" he said annoyingly. "I don't care what Jesse does. I'm trying to tell you that I saw Ginny snogging him." she yelled "Why are you yelling at me? It's not my fault Ginny's snogging him." he yelled back. "Look, I'm sorry. I just couldn't believe that Ginny would do something like that to Dean." she cried. Harry pulled her close to him, and hugged her. He stroked her hair, while asking her to stop crying.
"Would it make you feel better if I talked to Ginny?" asked Harry hopefully. "Oh, Harry! You're the best boyfriend a girl could ever have." He gave her a kiss, and the walked back up to the castle. They decided to stay in the comoon room, in front of the fire. Luna and Ron weren't there. As a matter of fact, they had the whole common room to themselves. "Harry? Do you think I'm a horrible person?" she asked as laid her head on his chest. "Of course not. Why would you think that?" he said stroking her hair again. "I don't know, but I can tell you that I have the best boyfriend ever." she said smiling at him. He bent and kissed her. It got hotter by the minute, until they were interrupted by Dean yelling at Ginny. "You've never cared about me. I don't understand you, Ginny. All I know is that you've changed this year, and I don't wanna have anything to do with you.
"Please, Dean. It was an accident. I told you what happened. I was walking towards him because my friend was behind him, and I tripped." "You expect me to believe that you tripped right into his mouth, and then stay about 5 minutes snogging him. Wow, Ginny. You're a horrible liar." yelled Dean "I'm sincere Dean. I'm not lying." she cried "Then why didn't you tell me this as soon as it happened? I had to hear about it from a bunch of Ravenclaws after class. Do you know how humilating it is to have my girlfriend, the one I dated for three years and stayed faithful to, kissing another guy in front of half of the 7th years?" he yelled "I'm sorry, Dean." she said falling to the floor.
"First it was Harry. Last year, I watched you snogg him in front of all the Gryfindors, and this year you snogged Jesse Carter, who's related to Draco Malfoy. That guy has been hurting you ever since you came here, and you go ahead and snogg his cousin? Just stay away from me you two timer. It's over." he yelled and stomped his way to the boys dorm.
Ginny stayed on the floor crying her eyes out.
um.. excuse me?
when did i ever say up there that i was perfect?
all i said was that it would be easier to read with the paragrahs separated a little bit and to watch your spelling. nothing to get all pissed about.
Yeah.
But I just have one itty bitty problem.
I have writers block.
I don't know if I should make Ginny go out with Jesse.
I don't know when Harry and Victor Krum are going to fight.
I don't know if Hermione should end up pregnant or not.
And I don't know when Draco comes back to help fight against Voldemort.
And I don't know when Harry is finally gonna defeat Voldemort.
So that's what happened.
okay so when you said I don't know if Hermione should end up pregnant or not. that just made me laugh.
i dont know if you've heard of epic movie,
but i saw it on saturday.
and they show hermione at like age 40 or so and she's pregnant and says "hope you're on the pill, harry likes to show off his sorcers[ehh bad spelling] stones." holy crap.
it made me laugh so hard.
i know irrelavant
but i had to say it.
your hermione pregnant thing kind of sparked it.
Hermione and Harry helped her onto the couch. "Ginny. Why'd you go and do something like that." said Hermione wiping Ginny's tears
"It was a dare. A stupid dare that I shouldn't have done." said Ginny
"Why'd you do it?" said Harry
"Because I shared a secret with them that I regret telling them?"
"What was the secret?" said Hermione
"I would ruin our friendship if I ever told you that. I thought they were my real friends. So I told them the secret, and they used it against me." she said crying on Hermione's lap. "So they dared me to kiss him and walk with him back to the castle. But I guess the Ravnclaws saw and they told Dean."
"Why didn't you just tell him that." said Hermione
"You saw how he reacted when he thought I did it by accident. Imagine how he would react if it was because of a dare." she said
She cried and cried until she fell asleep.
The next day, Ginny tried to talk to Dean, but he refused. One day after Potions, she finally caught a hold of him. "Dean. I-I-I need to talk to you. Please it won't take long. I promise." "Fine." he said angerily
They went into an empty classroom. "Dean. I want to tell you the truth. I didn't kiss Jesse because I tripped. I kissed him because I was dared to." "Why would you take the dare unless you wanted to?" said Dean
"Dean. You don't understand. I told them the secret." "Why did you do a stupid thing like that? You know those girls are blabber mouths." "I didn't know they were gonna use it against me Dean. Please Dean. I beg of you, please forgive me." "I'll have to think about it, Ginny. This is all so sudden. I can't make a choice right away. I'll think about it." he said and he walked out of the room and left Ginny there by herself.
KMC Community Forums
Dec 19th, 2006 04:25 PM
More plz! 
Thank you! 
Keep it up!!
Now I want to see it even more!! 
