At least it's a change from your other stuff. Make sure nobody gets killed at the wedding or anything. Remember the point about rhyming too, that should help you.
Benji, calm down. Mass criticism is experienced by all. They are just noting that your themes seem to repeat themselves. Perhaps a change of scenery/environment/mood/emphasis will do fine. Keep in mind that there are far more ways to write poetry other than rhyming, try to your luck at haikus or songwriting. I understand that your interest lies deep within dark themes, but expanding your horizons and keep an open mind toward anything. Even criticism. Good luck Benji.
All the ways you wish you could be, that's me. I look like you wanna look, I **** like you wanna ****, I am smart, capable, and most importantly, I am free in all the ways that you are not.
I've heard of handfasting, yes - never of a satanic version, though.
Also, you seem to think it's the subject matter that's the problem, when that's only part of it. For the love of God, or Satan or whatever - stop thinking that people are just saying this for no reason; your poetry just isn't good, at all, I've already addressed why loads of times.
Apparently critique does nothing for you, as you still act like a stubborn child, thinking that it's everyone against you rather than your poetry which just actually lacks any substance.
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well if you dont like it, you dont like! thats just you.
whether benji wants to change his work or style is down to him, it is his work after all, nothing you can do about that I'm afraid.
yes, you've made your point and you made it very clear.
But if you really dislike benji's work that much why are you still posting in his thread.
Most people, if they dont like some thing, they dont perserve with it. so why are you still posting here?
BTW: this is me being nice for a change so you know, nice is, nice as.
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Yeah, but if he doesn't and it's still shit I will say that it's shit. Also make fun of him, if he deludes himself into thinking it's good. If he wants to put it in public he'll have to deal with people with taste commenting on it.
Why on earth should I have to abide by your idea of what I should and shouldn't do?
This is a poetry forum, critique is to be expected - the fact that it's critique that you don't like, or don't agree with isn't the point. Perhaps one day you'll be able to counter such critique to such a level to make the poster think twice. So far, you haven't countered anything, but have just repeated the same old "if you don't have anything nice to say, don't say anything".
What's your next plan, to quote more GCSE level poetry? Is that the last time you actually studied poetry in any academic sense, or something?
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Benji, I used to be a satanists, but I stopped, very shortly after, because their beliefs reached my last nerve. I honestly don't think I am intelligent enough to be a respectable Satanist. Most of the religion at least here in the US has been dumbed down to several goth kids in a basement. All the Satanists I know that are taken seriously, are extremely intelligent men and women who put themselves highly and worship the dark lord that man has become, there's more to the religion than the devil and such. With that being said, understand that the mental prowess of a Satanism has to be extremely profound to be taken seriously, keep in consideration that all this work is public and could not possibly gain everyone's approval. Losing your temper will only make things worse. I don't much write much poetry, but the little that I do, I keep it in my songbook along with my sketches, public work is different then work in a book or somewhere else that's private.
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Sep 15th, 2008 11:54 PM
I like your stuff.
