the fire burns and burns
reflecting life as it turns
like broken glass it shatters
deeper into the battle
running with the wolves
and sliding thru dreams
charging down the behemoth
facing our fears
cold hands surround you
knee deep in the dirt
chilling you to the bone
dragging you down
dig your way out
into the sun
for the time has come to step back
AND TAKE WHAT YOU ROBBED FROM ME!!!
__________________ "SPLIT YOUR LUNGS WITH BLOOD AND THUNDER!!!"
Gender: Female Location: Some where in the Poison Ivy
Thats cool, but I think you need to add some punctuation, its a very quick tempo kinda makes it rather irratic to read as your too involved in the pace rather than the subject.
other than that I like it. its good to see some one new in here.
__________________ Full fathom five thy father lies;
Of his bones are coral made;
Those are pearls that were his eyes:
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange.
KMC Community Forums
Jan 21st, 2009 03:31 PM
its good to see some one new in here.
