I Just Wanna Break Even

I don't want your heaven
I don't wanna go to your hell
You can keep your Jesus
Keep the one who fell

I Just Wanna Break Even
Like a good weekend in Vegas
Stay dead when I'm dead
Not be reincarnated

I don't need religion
Preachers, ministers or pastors
I sleep in on Sunday
Safeguard my money

I Just Wanna Break Even
Like a good weekend in Vegas
Stay dead when I'm dead
Not be reincarnated

Bridge:
Of course, someone will say
That I have no choice
But he's mired in mythology
I almost hear his voice

Solo

I Just Wanna Break Even
Like a good weekend in Vegas
Stay dead when I'm dead
Not be reincarnated

Rap:
Billy Graham
Oral Roberts
Jimmy Swaggart
Jerry Falwell
Jim Bakker
Pat Robertson
Benny Hinn
Joel Osteen
Jack Van Impe
Rexella too
Eugene Scott
Melissa too
Liars all
Leeches all
Crooks all
Charlatans all

Jim Colyer ascap

Gay.

keep trying, I guess...

Wut.

as like, legit constructive criticism, your verses and chorus shouldn't be of equal length. like, assuming each line is a bar (4 beats), you want either 2 or 4 times as many lyrics per verse. it's obviously a style thing, but the way you have it set up, you are repeating yourself as much as you are presenting the substance of the song.

also, "rap"? I don't think saying names over a beat qualifies... you'd probably be better served treating it as spoken word.

Originally posted by Jim Colyer

I Just Wanna Break Even
Like a good weekend in Vegas

Doesn't rhyme: Not art.

Originally posted by Symmetric Chaos
Doesn't rhyme: Not art.

Originally posted by Lord Lucien
Gay.