James & Devon.. (Sons of Harry and Draco)

I don't really got a title..

Plot:

It's like 20 year later since book 6. Harry has a son, James, who's 16. Draco also has a son, Devon, also 16. James is in love with Devon, and Devon doesn't know he's in love too :'😉

Rating: I have no ****ing clue, but it's boy on boy, so I think R?

Chapter 1 - "I love you"

Chapter 2

I think its really good! 😄 My only constructive criticism is that its going a bit swiftly, its a bit confusing. Maybe slow it down a little, cut big sentences into shorter sentences, have some internal monologues going on...

Thanks Phoe.. finally some criticism 😄 .. I already noticed that I have too little talking going on.. I'll try to change that in the next chapter.. but I'll go to Berlin first, get some new ideas and stuff, because I really do not have a clue how to go on after what Devon said.. is he going to be a daddy or not? I don't know.. depends on Felicia.

Hey, why not just copy and paste onto here?

Originally posted by DarkCanadian
Hey, why not just copy and paste onto here?

This looks better 😄

No one else wants to read it? 🙁

I can't please put it on this site....

oh I read it and who is pregnant?

its great! even though i was bit disgusted about james being Gay

its abit disturbing but yeah it quite good

when are u gonna post more

took the words out of my mouth............

OH FELECIA!! I did nto know who was preganant........damn starting off early.

Originally posted by misslilsweetie
its great! even though i was bit disgusted about james being Gay

Did you read it well? he isn't gay, he's bisexual.. 🙂

Originally posted by DarkDethbringer
OH FELECIA!! I did nto know who was preganant........damn starting off early.

Yeah Felicia 🙂

Originally posted by misslilsweetie
when are u gonna post more

I'll try to post more this week 😉 .. still don't know how to go on.. 😮

Ok, chapter 3 is done now! 😄

Chapter 3 - Not ready

Oh, it's rated M, because there is a little bit detailed stuff in it..

DAYMN!dude alittle graphic there....

I'm a girl.. 😉 and if you don't like it, just don't read 😉

I didn't say I didn't like it dude I just said it was a little well.....(and i call everyone dude)