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jess-la
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harry / ginny / ron / hermione
hey guys ... i'm new on here and i aint good at writing storys so give me your opinions .. i dont really care if they are good or bad i want the truth because it will really help me xx thanks so here goes
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Harry had finished his 6th year at hogwarts and was now staying at the
burrow with the Weasley’s and hermione for the summer holidays. Harry was in Ron’s bedroom with Ron and hermione and they were talking about the horcruxes.
" You guys cant come with me, I'm putting your lives in danger" Harry said.
"Harry there’s no acceptions, we are coming with you" Hermione said
Ron got up and slapped Harry on the back
"Yeah mate we no what we're up against and we are there 2 support you"
Then Ron walked out of the room and hermione went and sat next to Harry.
"Umm...Harry...Can i ask...Is everything ok between you and Ginny at the moment"
"What...Oh yeah... i mean we're fine i guess"
Last edited by jess-la on Apr 25th, 2009 at 12:58 PM
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Apr 25th, 2009 12:56 PM |
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jess-la
Junior Member
Gender: Female Location: United Kingdom |
Meanwhile Ginny was sitting in her room by her window looking outside.She had tears running down her face.Just then someone came through the door.
"Ginny do u want to ... Ginny whats wrong?" Hermione asked
"Nothing... Whats that you wanted to ask me?" Ginny replied as she was whipping her tears and hiding her face in her long red hair.
"Ginny you have been crying"
"No ... just thinking...can we plz go down stairs now i am hungry"
As Ginny got up Hermione ran to the door and blocked it so Ginny couldn't get through.
Hermione whispered in Ginny's ear before opening the door
"Just try and talk to Harry, OK Gin"
When the girls went down stairs they already saw Ron and harry there.
Bill and Fleur just came in the door and Fleur went over to Harry.
"How are you 'arry ?" Fleur said and kissed him on both cheeks.As she did this Ginny gave her a disgusted look and then she looked away . Hermione hit her on the arm.
"I'm fine thanks" Harry said
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siriuswriter
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Gender: Female Location: When in Doubt, Go to the Library. |
First, this isn't really the place for fanfiction.
Second, you need need to make sure that your grammar is correct.
Third, for god's sake, no chatspeak. ever. plz is please and u is actually you. r... are.
Four : I have no idea what this story is about.
Five : learn how to format fanfiction. see what real fanfiction looks like. if you want to be a fanfiction writer, get the basics down before you start to write.
I could go on and on and on, [and on] but if you really want to learn about fanfiction, pm me. siriusly.
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Last edited by siriuswriter on Apr 25th, 2009 at 05:28 PM
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jess-la
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ok thanks anall ... i'l take tha in mind
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Paola
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Nice job sirius!
moving...
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