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I'm not sure the exact lines, but I'd love for Jack and Elizabeth to talk about their last parting... =]
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Lol! That would be a great double take, Captain's Wench.
This is a tough one. We all know what scenes we want them to do, but actual dialogue is a little rough. I just really want to hear Jack beg her to sail away with him.
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Not exactly beg. I personally wouldn't want to see Jack beg. More like..persuade.
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I see your point. I would love the tables to be turned and he seduce her because you know he could easily, but there would be something very intimate and loving for him to just pull her close to him and look into her eyes and simply ask, "Please come away with me." It would be a very intense, very passionate scene.
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Yes, actual dialogue is very hard to come up with....I have gone over this a million times in my head...but to write them down on a peice of paper..or internet..if you will...is very hard....
You are right Willo...to come up with scenes is very easy....
Yes, I would like to see Jack really come on to Elizabeth...like make her squirm....entice her into an intimate moment...and then just at the moment we think he will kiss her...
and you can tell she is dying to be kissed...he pulls away and says "just playing with ya, luv."
and then he turns and walks away with that little Jack smile on his face...
and we see a frustrated Liz pick up something and throw it at his back
..and he ducks to miss it....she stomps her feet and yells.."you are the most dispicable man I've ever met!"...
and Jack turns around and says "oh really, keep telling yourself that, luv, and maybe one day we'll believe it."...
she is so angry and he walks off whistling.....
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Or...how about a scene where its dark..its' nightime on the Pearl and Will and Liz are standing and they are discussing their relationship and Jack...and let's say Liz is still trying to get Will to seduce her before her marriage, but Will being the honorable man that he is, still refuses...(kind of like the fanfiction story..but this takes place in AWE, not right after COTBP)......
"Goodnight Elizabeth"
"Goodnight Will."...a very frustrated Liz responds. What is wrong with Will, why won't he take from me what I am willing to give, Elizabeth thinks to herself. She pulls out Jack's compass and looks at it, and it doesn't point in the way Will just walked...it seems to point toward Jack's cabin..and she starts to haul it overboard but then a hand grabs her arm to stop her....she starts to scream, but a hand clasps over her mouth...Jack is right up behind her...holding one of her arms and and a hand over her mouth..
"ah-ah-ah, luv, that is not your's to throw away." he removes his hand from her mouth. LIz is breathing hard.
"Captain Sparrow, what are you doing out here...and it's not nice to scare someone like that."
"That's just it, Luv, i'm not a nice guy, remember?"
"You are too, and stop calling me that, I told you that once before, Captain."
"oh, yes, pardon me, I forgot.MISS SWANN. And oh by the way, that was an interesting little scene between you and Will. WHen are you going to accept that Will is never going to compromise you, Miss Swann."
Liz is fuming.."HOw dare you listen to mine and Will's private conversation."
"Miss Swann, you would be sursprised at what I would dare." Once again Jack has moved close enough that when he speaks she can feel his breath on her neck and it sends shivers down her. Nervous at her body's reaction, liz moves away and gets a disgusted little laugh.
"Well, it wouldn't surprise me...because I know who you are and what you are...I even know what you are thinking at time."
"Really, then if you know me so well, what am i thinking right now."
"I...I..." (Liz can't speak Jack's closeness has her squirming)
"I'm thinking how lovely you look out here in the moonlight. I'm thinking what it would be like to move in closer....softly touch my lips to yours...kiss you, touch you....to feel yours hands....I would love to feel yours hands touch me, Lizzie"...Jack is moving in..their mouths only inches apart...so close their noses are touching...
Jack is speaking into her mouth..."If I were Will, I would never be able to resist you, Miss Swann....you're more temptation than a man can handle...so unless you want ME to compromise your honor, it will be in your best interest to vacate yourself from my presence before I have a mind to sweep you off your feet and take you to my cabin, savvy"...
Liz's eyes fly open..."What? Oh....oh...." She still can't seem to find her voice..."NOW!" Jack grinds through his teeth...And Elizabeth drops the compass and runs to Jack's cabin (which he has graciously given up for her comfort)....Jack makes that little noise again and bends down to retrieve the compass...we see a very serious Jack staring out to sea....back in the cabin...Elizabeth is leaning against the doors breathing hard, looking a mess and very distraught...she realizes she can no longer be around Jack and not give in to what she is feeling...what is she going to do about Will...how did she get into the mess...to be continued....
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OMG OMG OMG....I Love it....the funny thing is yesterday i was wirting those exact lines here....seriously those exact words but i couldnt find actions for the dialog so i erased it....and now here u are.....so i absolutely love it!!! Much better than what i had in mind!
i love it toooo.... i wrote a scene which is pretty similar because i'd LOVE the way jack and liz come forbiddenly close so that you can nearly feel their breaths and their desire for each other. but then SHE breaks up because she canīt handle her feelings, she feels scared and confused, but at the same time she canīt wait for only ONE more moment like that, only one or two....
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Elizabeth awakes from another night of endless dreams. What will this day have in store. Here she is on this ship caught between two men and nowhere to escape. On one hand there is Will. Sweet, honorable, dependable Will. She has known Will since they came upon him at sea. Had that really been ten years ago? They were so young. They grew up together. Elizabeth remembered after they arrived in Port Royal, a local family took him in and raised him until he was 18. He went to work for the local blacksmith. Will had a talent for making the finest swords in all the Caribbean. Although the owner took all the credit, Will had done all the work. Most people knew that Will Turner was actually the master of the art. Elizabeth and Will would have chance meetings around town. Will was tutored at the local school for orphaned children, while Elizabeth was tutored at home in the Governor's Mansion. Will had grown into the most handsome boy she had ever known. As they grew older and had reached their later teenage years, she and Will would see each other at local gatherings. Once there was a big festival in Port Royal and she and Will had played some of the games together. Will even helped carry her prizes she had won. She couldn't remember how many times she had asked Will to call her Elizabeth, but he refused. Saying that it wasn't proper, and he insisted on calling her Miss Swann. Eizabeth had grown aware that Will cared for her more than just an acquaintance. She noticed the way Will would glance her way in the crowd. There were many times she would catch him staring at her, and he would catch her staring at him. Then there was that fateful day. The day Captain Jack Sparrow had sailed into their lives. The day James Norrington had proposed to her. The day Jack Sparrow rescued her from the bottom of the bay and saved her life for the first time. Elizabeth would never forget the moment she first saw Jack's face and looked into his eyes. She was mesmerized by him. He knew something about her no one else had known. He saw the medallion. He asked her where had she got it. He knew of it, she could tell. She saved his life that day, too. Norrington was bent on seeing Jack face the gallows, but she wouldn't allow it since jack had saved her life. Then Jack was captured just as she was taken by Barbossa's skeleton crew and taken to the Pearl. Elizabeth would never forget the first time she saw the Pearl. Little did she know at that time how much the Black Pearl and Jack Sparrow would become inbedded into her life. Will had gone to great lengths to find her. He was willing to use Jack, a pirate. Will had never trusted Pirates. It was ironic at the time, since Elizabeth knew that Will was wearing the Pirate medallion when they found him at sea.
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After she and Will were reunited she could tell they shared a special bond. Will was finally calling her Elizabeth. He had risked everything to come and save her. At the time, she thought Jack was using them and was willing to trade Will's life for the Pearl. Now she knew how wrong she was. Elizabeth thought back to the Island. Barbossa had thrown her and Jack off the Pearl. She and Jack were marooned at that Island. It was there that she saw a side of Jack that very few people knew existed. Jack had shared some of his deepest, darkest secrets with her. He had showed her his scars. He basically had bared his soul to her.
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She discovered that the great Jack Sparrow was vunerable, that he had weaknesses. She used that to her advantage. Jack wasn't going to do anything to get off that island, but she was. She had purposely got Jack drunk on his god-forsaken rum. He actually thought he was going to get lucky that night. The thought of it made her giggle and then turn sad. Ironic how the table can turn when you least expect it. After being rescued from the island and defeating Barbossa's crew, they finally returned to Port Royal safe and sound. It was the day of Jack's hanging when Will had finally professed his love to her and in front of Norrington and her father. At that point in time, she had never loved Will more than at that moment. And then there was Jack. She knew it wasn't right that he hang. He was a good man. She had heard so many stories and legends about Jack Sparrow. There he was facing his hanging. She and Will helped Jack escape that day. Just before Jack left to return to his precious Pearl he had some very discomforting words he said to her. "Elizabeth, it never would have worked between us, Darling, I'm sorry."....and then he was gone. Funny how those words kept coming into her mind over and over. She and Will grew closer and Will proposed to her only a month later. They had planned their wedding. Will had spent countless hours teaching her to sword fight. It had become a passion with her. That's how she and Will had spent their time together. Elizabeth wanted more, but Will insisted they wait until their wedding night. He said that that would make their wedding night all the more special. It would be the first time for both of them. Elizabeth remembered how hard it had been to wait. There was something that had bothered her more than that. It was a secret that only she knew about and no one could else could ever know. It disturbed her that she would awake at night full of sweat and realized she had just a very erotic dream. What scared her the most; her mystery lover's face was not Will's, it was Jack. She remembered how angry it make her that she would have these fantasies about Jack. It made her want to make Will claim her all the more. To erase these unwanted dreams about Jack. Why was she thinking about him. She loved Will, so why was she having these erotic dreams about Jack.
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Then came her wedding day. The day had finally arrived. She was going to become Mrs. William Turner. But the day had not gone as planned. Her wedding was interrupted by the EITC and that dastardly Lord Cutler Beckett. She had been robbed of her wedding night. Beckett told them they were under arrest for aiding in the escape of a known criminal guilty of crimes agaisnt the Crown. That man was Captain Jack Sparrow. So, was it as Beckett had teased her about...was her wedding interrupted, or had fate, indeed, intervened. She was beginning to wonder. Was Will Turner the man for her? What worried her most was that she never had these erotic fantasies about Will. In fact, more and more lately she rarely thought of Will in a romantic fashion a'tall. All her thoughts were occupied by one man. Captain Jack Sparrow.
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Elizabeth continued to go through the years past events in her head. Will had made a deal with Lord Beckett. He would go and find Jack and return him andhis compass to Lord BEckett.
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Elizabeth had found her opportunity to escape. Her father insisted she leave for England. AS his back was turned, she had slipped out the carriage into the darkness. She paid a visit to Beckett and retrieved those letters of Marque for Jack. She stowed away on a trading ship and then disguised herself as a member of the crew. She had made her way to Tortuga where she had run into a down and out James Norrington. Then she found Jack and the Pearl, but no Will. Those days on the Pearl are like a blur in her mind now. Jack and she spent many hours together. The more time she had spent with Jack, the more she grew to understand him. The more her nights were filled with endless dreams. But who could blame a girl, right? Here she was out of sea...in the company of a very charming and handsome Pirate. This same Pirate was making outlandish passes at her. There was no doubt in her mind that Jack wanted her. He had made that very clear. But at the same time, there was Will. She had pledged to spend her life with Will. She and Will were planning to be married and have children. jack Sparrow was just a passing fancy. Jack was Jack. She could never settle down with jack and have children. There was no future with jack. She couldn't mess up her future with Will by acting on her impulse to taste what it would be like to be with Jack. Jack had been right. She and he were alike. They are both pirates at heart, but at the same time a good person.
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Elizabeth now remembered that fateful day aboard the Pearl. They were being attacked by the Kracken. She saw him. There he was rowing away in a longboat headed toward land. Deserting the pearl, his crew her. She couldn't beleive. She had had such faith in Jack. Then suddenly when she needed him most his was there. He picked up the rifle and fired the shot that allowed them to escape. Why had he come back. He was free. he could have made it to land, but he came back. He had proved he was a good man. At that moment Jack was everything she had ever dreamed of. He had become a brave, courageous good hearted Pirate....a man she could love. but a man she shouldn't love. So she had made a choice. She decided to stay and convince Jack to stay behind and let them escape. The others were loading onto the longboat and it was just she and Jack left on board the Pearl. Jack was saying his silent goodbye to the Pearl. That was the moment that had shocked her the most. The moment when jack told Gibbs that the Pearl was only a ship. The Pearl no longer represented freedom for Jack. This was a very momentous moment for Jack. Her heart was breaking for Jack. She couldn't resist, she kissed him. She backed him up to the mast. The kiss had been amazing. It was a kiss for the ages. It was kiss that had been building since the day she had met jack. Then the idea popped into her head. She would chain Jack and leave him to face the Kracken and accept his fate. He would die a hero in everyone's eyes. She would be the only one to know the truth. She had done it. He smiled at her. What an infuriating man. He had actaully smiled and her and called her "pirate."
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Elizabeth walked over to the oval window and looked out at the sea. What was she going to do? Last night under the moonlight and being so close to Jack had really got to her. She now knew that he wanted her and she wanted him. Was that why she tried so desperately to get Will to make love to her? How could she hurt Will? Elizabeth knew she could never bring herself to hurt Will. Will loved her. Will worshipped her. Will had risked everything to save her, and how did she re-pay him? By constantly daydreaming and fantazing about another man. And not just any man. Captain Jack Sparrow. Will had witnessed that kiss. Will had beleived she loved Jack, but she had finally convinced him otherwise. It was now time to venture outside the cabin. She couldn't stay locked in here all day. She was afraid to face Will knowing that in her mind and in her heart she had betrayed him. But she was more afraid to face jack. She knew that when she saw jack her heart would be aching and her body would be longing to be close to him. And that was the greatest torture and punishment of all.
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The sun was bright this day. Elizabeth had to shade her eyes to look around the deck of the battered Pearl.
"Good morning, Elizabeth"..Elizabeth's heart skipped a beat, it was Will. Of the two, she was more confident about facing Will this morning than Jack.
"Good morning, Will"
"I trust you slept well. You look beautiful this morning." Will complemented her. He always was telling her she was beautiful.
"Thank you Will. Is anyone else up and about"..Elizabeth glanced nervously about.
"Well, Cotton, of course is at the helm. Pintel and Ragettie are overseeing the deckhands...as you can see, they are tyring to revive the Pearl back to her original beauty, quite a task. Gibbs and Jack are in the crew's hole going over our plans to confront Beckett, Norrington and Barbossa. I don't entirely trust them, so I was on my way to join them. Would you care to come along?"
"ah, sure why not?"
Elizabeth and Will go down below and join Gibbs and Jack. As they walk in Jack fixes his gaze on Elizabeth. She can't seem to meet his eye. Gibbs takes notice, as he always does.
"William, come here son, I want to show you our latest and up to date plan." Gibbs puts his arm around Will's shoulder and takes Will over to the table holding a map and well elaborate plans....
Jack walks over to Elizabeth
"you look a little black under the eye, luv. What's wrong? Did you not sleep well last night?"
"I slept just fine, thank you. Will informed me that I looked beautiful this morning."
"He did? Well, he's right ya know. Despite the dark cirlces under your eyes, you look ravishing. In fact, I think the dark circle make you even more appealing....especially since I know I am the cause of those dark marks."
"you sir, are no gentleman...and you are quite persumptious to assume these dark circles belong to you...becasue they don't"
"They don't" Jack teased. He glanced over his shoulder to see that Will was engrossed in what Gibbs was telling him. He'd have to remember to thank him for distracting Will.
"no, they don't. I couldnt' sleep because the ship was very unstable last night. The waves rocked the ship all night."
"You do wound me Elizabeth. here I was thinking it was my intoxicating presense that kept you from sleeping...and perhaps thinking about what would be going on in that cabin if I had carried out my threat to carry you there myself." jack whispered this last part into her ear and it sent tingles throughout her body.
"Stop, Jack. Will is right there."
"so."
"You are truly unscrupulous, aren't you?"
"No, luv, I just know what I want. I'm a Pirate. A Pirate always goes after treasure. And you my dear have become the treasure I seek to open and plunder and conquer."
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I absolutely LOVE IT!!! U Have to continue it!! Please!! 
