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Hmm, I hope you feel better, but I don't really want to take over your thing. You're doing such a great job with it. Really steamy. I don't know about anyone else, but I've always thought it would be cool to have Liz and Jack dance. It would be at night and the Pearl is docked and Jack is alone on the deck and he hears a high-society orchestra playing some classical piece. He knows he can never be a part of that kind of thing. We see Liz come up behind him and ask him to dance, and they would just dance on the deck, the moonlight reflected in the water. He wouldn't say anything, just give her a little dip at the end and kiss her.
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okay, since this thread was sinking, I decided I would write a dance scene I really hope you guys like it...I haven't written in sooo long, so theres prolly a lotta things that suck in it, but hey, I'd forgotten how much fun it was to write j/l scenes!
here it is...enjoy
There’s a full moon in the sky, and the Pearl is docked at a little known port near Singapore. Faint music can be heard from what Jack could only presume was a party of sorts. After making his way around about half of the ship, he stopped and leaned against the railing, closing his eyes and listening to the music. He heard footsteps coming nearer, and knew it could only be one person at this hour. He smirked as he heard a groan against the railing next to him, but didn’t open his eyes. It was quiet for a moment, and then:
Liz: Beautiful, isn’t it?
Jack (looking down at her) : What?
Liz: The moon. It’s full tonight.
Jack (still looking at her) : Yes, luv. Beautiful.
Liz looks up at him and smiles as she realizes he wasn’t talking just about the moon. Suddenly shy, she looks over her shoulder at the lights reflected on the water from the building where the music is playing, the swirling figures making the shadows dance.
Liz: Lovely music, too. Reminds me of when I was younger, and they would throw parties, with ladies in gorgeous gowns, and men wearing their finest jackets....
Jack: Mmm. Takes me back to when I was just a lad meself.
Liz (raising her eyebrows) : You dance?
Jack (fakes being insulted) : Don’t act so surprised. I wasn’t always the notorious pirate I am today.
A new melody strikes up, a little louder now. It’s a tune Liz recognizes a few steps of, from when she used to be instructed back in Port Royale. She holds her hand out to Jack.
Liz (grinning) : May I have this dance?
Jack (bows and takes her hand) : Of course, milady.
He pulls her in closer, and wraps his hand around her waist. She giggles, and puts both her arms around his neck. They sway back and forth silently, in rhythm with the music. Liz begins to get more comfortable, and leans her head against Jack’s chest, listening to his heart beat. Before they know it, the music is over, and Liz begins to pull back, slowly...uncertainly.
Jack (barely above a whisper) : Wait....please, stay.
Liz’s eyes dart from Jack to the cabin where she sleeps. This was the most contact they’d had since they’d rescued him at world’s end, and she definitely didn’t want this night to end. Turning back to him, she finds herself unable to pull away.
Liz: Alright....
Another song strikes up behind them, faster than then the last.
Jack: What d’ya say, one more?
Liz smiles again and moves closer to him. She barely knows the steps, but he seems quite familiar with it as he twirls her expertly across the deck. Dipping her down, then pulling her back up, immediately sending her spinning away from him once again, just to be pulled back in. Finally, unable to keep up with the steps, Liz trips and lunges into Jack, who, surprised, falls.
Liz makes no attempt to pull herself off of him, but instead smiles at how close they are. Arranging herself so they’re face to face, she works her fingers into the spaces between his, and pins them down on the ground. Their faces are now barely an inch apart. Her smile widens as she realizes the last time they were this close, she had sentenced him to his death. Apparently he was thinking the same thing.
Jack (breathing heavily) : In control once again, I see.
Liz : Mmm.... Makes me wonder.
Jack: What?
She leans in closer, so her lips will brush against his when she talks.
Liz: If maybe Captain Sparrow doesn’t just like being take advantage of.
Jack : Now how would you get a crazy idea like that?
Liz: Oh, I can think of a few ways.
Slowly closing the few centimeters between them, she presses her lips lightly against his. Though she let her guard down for mere seconds, she suddenly found herself flat on the deck of the Pearl, Jack pinning her down.
Jack : Sorry, darling, but not even you can best Captain Jack Sparrow.
Liz (pauses for a moment) : I already have.
Saying nothing more, he lowers himself upon her, pressing his mouth hard on hers. As he pulls away, almost painingly slow, she catches his bottom lip in her teeth, before slowly releasing it, her eyes pleading for him to stay and finish what he started. Though he’s never one to turn away from a girl in need, he forces himself to pull away from her. He walks, almost struts, back to his cabin, leaving her lying, still gasping, on the deck of the pearl to watch him go.
okay...sorry it's so long....i kinda got carried away.............a little...hehe
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haha aw its cute. good job. =]
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WOW!!!! that was steamy! I'm feeling all tingly now. Please write more soon. Oh and I just read the last page as well. WHOA! is all I gotta say. hope to read more REALLY soon.
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Great job...savvy...I've dreamed up a few more scenes..some real tear jerkers.....but I don't have the time to write them yet...maybe this weekend....I'm trying to come up with a more light and flirty scene..like the ones from DMC with Persuade Me and Curiosity....
I just love the scenes...where you think somethings going to happen and then one pulls away....especially when Lizzie is left gaping after Jack...her just reward for always trying to deny her feelings...LOL
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ahh those are my favorite kinds of stories to read...the ones that would've taken place on the pearl while they were looking for william..and like i get all excited when i see that i new one has been posted on fanfiction haha..because they're so fun and exciting and they could've so easily been inserted into the movie
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Okay..let me try again....here is the scenario...based on things I've read on other threads lately.....and the interview with Johnny....Will, Elizabeth, Gibbs and the gang and Barbossa have sailed to World's End to rescue Witty Jack from Davy Jones' Locker....and it's the first time Liz and Jack are reunited since the kiss of death...Jack has shot his good side (theoretically speaking).....he knows that he is in love with Elizabeth, but thinks that she is still in love with Will. Jack also knows that his weakness is Elizabeth and that he must avoid her at all cost if he is to stay sane and of right mind. Elizabeth is toxic for Jack.
They have already passed the scene where Jack trades Will, Barbossa, Pintel and Ragetti over to Beckett.....Jack and the others are aboard the Pearl headed to shipwreck cove.....Elizabeth is aboard the Pearl. It's nightime and most everyone has settled down for the night, except Jack who is peering out to sea....
Elizabeth approaches Jack...(she is a little downhearted by Jack's coldness)...
"Captain Sparrow" Elizabeth calls Jack's name as she approaches.
"Ah, Miss Swann. What are you doing up and about. Please return to your quarters." Jack doesn't even look at her.
"Captain, ah, hell, Jack...what is the matter. Why are you being so cold? I've already apologized to you about everything."
"Miss Swann, I really don't have much to discuss with you other than what is to take place tomorrow at Shipwreck's cove. If we're square on that, then would you be so kind as to vacate yourself from my presensce."
"Jack.."
"that's Captain Sparrow, to you."
"You are being so....ornery and downright nasty. What is wrong with you Jack."
Suddenly Jack whips around to face her and grabs her by the shoulders, "I've asked you to please leave me alone. You are making me sorely regret that I did not turn you over to Beckett, also. Now LEAVE."
"But, Jack...'
"I said leave."
Elizabeth turns and runs back toward the cabin. Jack is left standing there looking back out to sea.
"You were a might harsh with her Jack." Mr. Gibbs comes to stand beside Jack at the rails.
"It's how it must be Mr. Gibbs. It's the only way. To let go even a little can mean nothing but pain and perhaps, death, for me where that lady is concerned. I must watch my back with that one."
"And your heart, too, I gather." Mr. Gibbs doesn't look at Jack as he says this.
Jack stands very erect suddenly and looks sideways as Gibbs.
"yeah, that too." Jack turns and leaves Gibbs to ponder.
Mr. Gibbs is concerned for Jack. He knows his captain has a weakness for Miss Elizabeth, and this weakness could cause his Captain to not think clearly and make a bad decision. Mr. Gibbs always knew women were bad, bad luck to be on board a ship. Best women were left at home to tend to more domestic matters... He'd have to keep an eye on Miss Elizabeth. Can't let her mess up things for Jack....
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the next day on their way to shipwreck cove..they anchor and must take longboats to get closer to the sacred part of the ocean.....Elizabeth starts to climb into the boat that Jack is in....and he stops her..
"Miss Swann. Sorry this boat is full."
"What. You have plenty of room."
"No, I do not. You will be riding with Mr. Cotton and his parrot in the other boat. Now if you would be so kind as to remove yourself so we can carry on."...Elizabeth is staring dumbfounded at Jack..then turns and looks toward the other boat..which is more occupied than this one....then back to jack..Jack looks irratated..
"Oh, alright. I just didn't want to be bothered with you. Sit in the far end, as far away from me as possible."
Elizabeth is confused. Why is Jack treating her as if she has the plague or something.
"Jack is acting very strange. Don't you think, Mr. Gibbs". Elizabeth whispers to Mr. Gibbs as the row away from the Pearl and toward Shipwreck Cove.
"REally? I have not notice. He just seems to be a little edgy, that's all. But that's to be expected for a man who has been swallowed by the Kracken, spat back out and brought back to life, eh?
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Elizabeth does not respond to Mr. Gibbs. She tries not to look at JaCK, but can't help herself. She keeps glancing toward Jack. Jack can feel her eyes on him and it's making him uncomfortable. He keeps squirming around. Suddenly he stands up and turns himself around to face the other way. Elizabeth gets a little smile on her face, she realizes she is making Jack uncomfortable...she has hope restored. Maybe Jack is no so indifferent to her afterall.
Finally, they reach Shipwreck Cove. It is foggy, dark and very spooky. As they unload from the longboat and make their way throught he bevy of sunken ships, Elizabeth gets right up close behind Jack's Back...she is holding a latern...
Suddenly Jack stops and Elizabeth runs into him, she is following that close. Jack rolls his eyes. "Miss Swann, would you please not follow so closely."
"I'm sorry, Captain." She grins.
Jack turns toward the crew. "It has been a long day and night. I say we make camp here tonight and begin again in the morning in search for the brethren."
"Sounds like a plan" Mr. Gibbs responds...he begins to bark out orders to the crew...as the settle about the broken down ship they are in. Jack settles down in a spot to keep watch. "I'll keep watch..I can't sleep." He announces to Mr. Gibbs "a'ight captain." Mr. Gibbs looks suspiciously at Elizabeth as she rises from her pallot and starts to approach the area where jack was last seen. "Miss Elizabeth, where go you?" "I can't get to sleep, Just going to check on Jack"...."Best if you leave him be, Miss Elizabeth"....Elizabeth gives Gibbs a strange look but continues on....Gibbs mumble to himself "that woman is as stubborn as Jack..."
Elizabeth approaches Jack. Jack looks up at her.
He gives an exasperated sigh..."Miss Swann. To what do I owe the honor of your company." Jack is drinking rum....
"I can't sleep, either. I thought I'd join you. Can I have some?" she eyes the rum...
"Well, I guess...here."
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"Have you notice, Captain, that neither one of us seems to be getting much sleep lately, why is that, do you suppose?"
Jack wrinkles his brow, "I have no idea, Miss Swann."
"I think you do, I know I do."
Jack takes another swig of rum and swallows hard....nervously he looks sideways at Elizabeth...who is edging in closer to him....
" I think you can't sleep because of me."
"You flatter yourself, Miss Swann."
"Really, so you are not bothered at all by this"...she touches Jack's arm...He jumps.
"It's highly inappropriate, Miss Swann. What would William think. He's already convinced that I'm after you. Please, Miss Swann, If you know what's good for you, return to your sleep pad and leave me be."
"I can't....I keep thinking about you...every time I close my eyes...I see you...I feel your lips on mine."
Jack is really squirming now.
"Miss Swann, you really shouldn't say these things to me...it's..."
"Oh, alright Jack. I'll stop."
She notices Jack rubbing something shiny with his thumb.
"Is that your infamous peice of eight you have there?"
"What? Oh yes."
"What are you thinking, Jack."
"I was just thinking how I have failed. Failed the legend. See I'm suppose to pass this down, but alas, it appears I'll not have an heir to carry on my name or pass this peice to."
"Oh. I see." Elizabeth feels uncomfortable now.
Jack ponders for a moment.
"Tomorrow, there is a good chance I will see my father. I have not seen him in years. He'll be wanting to know if I've fulfilled by promise..to give him an heir. I just never found the right woman, or so it would seem." Jack looks intently at Elizabeth.
She glances away from it....then back to Jack.
"I'm sorry jack"
"Why, it's not your fault, is it?"
"No."
"Then you have no worries."
It is quiet for a moment....just the sound of nightimes noises...
"Here, catch" Elizabeth reacts quickly and catches the coin...
"I want you to have it."
"What?"
"I want you to have it. You're young...you'll have children after you and William are married...in holy matrimony...forever bound together...husband, wife...take it and pass it down to your first born...name him after me...."
Elizabeth stares in horror at the coin...then back up to jack...
"Jack, I...I...I can't....Why? Why Me?"
"Let's just say...I can't think of anyone else who pass down my legacy other than you...and since it appears I won't be having a child of my own...then the first born of your's and William's is the next best thing."
"I...I don't know what to say" Elizabeth feels a lump in her throat...
"I thought you hated me Jack..the way you've treated me lately....and now this...this honor you are bestowing upon me...why..."...a tear slowly falls down Elizabeth's dirty streaked cheek...
Jack has not looked at her directly, he is staring at his boots...or the ground..anything but her...
"I don't hate you Elizabeth. In fact, it's quite the opposite. But I know it can never be...you belong to William. I can't have you. So it's best I stay clear of you, agreed."
"oh."
"It's painful, you know. To be around you. To not be able to act how I truly want to...to ..whenever I'm around you....I want to touch you...it takes everything inside me....to keep my hands by my side...not to reach out ...like this...." Jack lifts his hands and wipes the tear from her cheek. They are staring intently into each other's eyes....their faces are only inches apart....Jack breaks the tension...He drops his hand as if he has touched fire and stands up, shoves his hands in his pockets and paces....
"Captain....I hear a disturbance".....Mr. Gibbs rushes in and interrupts the initimate setting.....
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Oh, what a cruel but good stopping point. This is getting really emotional. Continue! I love how Jack ESSENTIALLY reveals his feelings here, but it's still left up in the air.
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Feb 13th, 2007 01:52 AM
i've been dying for a dance scene between Jack and Liz....omg someone please write one!! I would, but i suck at writing!!! Pleeeeeaaase!!!!
I really hope you guys like it...I haven't written in sooo long, so theres prolly a lotta things that suck in it, but hey, I'd forgotten how much fun it was to write j/l scenes!
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