-nodnod- Exactly. I just like... I dunno.... saw the poem in my mind.... and I just had to put it down on paper.... I didn't do the whole thing at one sitting, so to speak, but the idea never wavered in my head. I'm gonna try and work on one that is a lot happier.....
Hey coldfire I read your poems and I like Betrayal the best. It reminds me of the heart ache you didn't see coming because the moment was so new and different. The second one sounds like it could be a cool introduction to interesting story. If I could carry my thoughts through that much focus for that long I would be a better writer. I think you should or probably do write some interesting short stories. I want to see what happens to coldfire in the poem. Keep going.
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hahahhaaha. Coldfire, you write with style and you have wonderful work. don't allow anyone to persuade you differently. I know. I have been writing since about 9, and I am 22 now, still writing. KMC Poets Represent!!!!
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beyond that, write what is in your head, your heart, hell, even a ditty you hummed once. It is all you. Your soul placed upon paper. Write it down. Save it. Read it. You may learn about the woman in you more from these parchments than any psych can ever hope to tell you.
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Yeah, I've been doing that actually; even the stuff that I don't necessarily like all that much, cuz you never know if you'll be able to find a way to improve it, or if you'll come to like it or what.
Lol, Tassie that's longer than I have been! I've only been writing for a couple months
Well we're not 22, I'll tell you that! I'm 16 (well, darn near anyways), and I only got into poetry a couple months ago becuz I had to do some school projects and I decided it was really fun to do
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**ROTFLMAO* no really. that made me laugh like a maniac. hahahahahahah.
Well we're not 22, I'll tell you that!
christ... throw me in the grave why dont ya.... hahahhahaha!!!!!
get a move on gramps! yer 22 and yer OLD!!! hahahhaha.
thanks for the laugh. unintended or not. *shakes head and still laughs.*
always keep that spitfire attitude. dont let life cool your flames.
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I didn't mean it like that, but I have to say that is WAS funny! And yeah, ain't that old at all.... at least you're not like 80 or something!! ROFLMAO
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hahhahahhahahaa! they dont have a smiley for my grin... (think of a dude grinning with just his right side of his face) ahhh humor, the nectar of the saints...
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My feelings for you are so strong,
And I cannot even begin,
To adequately express them in mere words.
My hearts beats a little faster,
When I just think about you.
And when I actually talk to you,
I swear that my heart may just stop,
In mid-beat, for the joy it brings me.
There have been trials in our path,
A little fear, and some pain too,
But it just goes to show,
That if you work hard enough,
And feel strongly enough,
Anything and everything is possible.
You are the sun in my sky,
Lighting the path I travel upon.
I don’t know how I managed before,
Without you to help me through,
The potholes and obstacles I have faced.
You just make me completely happy,
For absolutely no reason at all,
Other than that I am talking to you.
It seems like only yesterday,
That we had first met.
And looking back on that day,
I am very glad of the choice I made,
For if I hadn’t,
I would never have gotten to know,
A very truly special person.
I cannot say you stole my heart,
For I gave it to you freely.
And nothing more can I really say,
Except, I love you.
Hate.
Some say that is too strong of a word,
But I think it fits what I feel for you perfectly.
I hate what you did to me,
I hate the emotions you wrung from me,
I hate how you made me look the fool,
I hate all the time you stole from me,
I hate you.
Love?
Don’t make me laugh,
That was never one of the things I felt for you.
Infatuation? Possibly,
Obsession? Maybe
Desire? Yes, that most of all,
But never, ever did I feel,
That I was in love with you.
You tore down my shields,
Putting up your own to try and control me,
Even I was no puppet,
Moving to the strings you pulled.
I can’t believe I was so stupid,
To think that you might stay with me,
Even though you had no reason to,
I didn’t mean enough for you to even bother.
And are you happy now?
Happy with that nymphomaniac you found,
Who gives you the most profound pleasure
You have ever felt in your entire life,
Wherever and whenever you want it?
Well I hope you’re happy,
But wouldn’t it just seem ironic,
That she gave you something special back,
In the form of a cancer or disease.
Considering all the places she’s been,
And all the people she’s been with,
It would only serve her right,
And serve you right too.
You thought I was weak,
That I was useless,
Mistaking fear for cowardice,
And I won’t take it anymore,
I just can’t be ignored like this.
I am stronger than you,
You heartless, soulless, poor excuse for a human
And I know I can find someone much better,
Who will treat me with the respect I deserve,
Someone who knows the meaning of love,
And treats people like people and not objects.
You’re through, you know that?
Everyone’s going to know what you did,
And what exactly you do to your partners,
So I hope it was worth it,
Because never again will you, ever,
Do that to some other poor, misguided girl,
You can count on me watching you,
Seeing your every move from now on,
I promise you that.
If you thought your life was hell before,
Just wait for a bit,
That was only the icing on the cake;
The worst is still yet to come.
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I'm gonna try and work on one that is a lot happier.....
Apr 19th, 2005 11:38 PM
Well, I do like writing stories and stuff! 
Add some more to that? Yeah, I could prolly do that... 
So that's not very long lol.
I didn't mean it like that, but I have to say that is WAS funny! 
