Cammii
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quote: (post ) Originally posted by kava_kava
i write alot of poetry that people can't understand but that's because i write it for me. If you want your poetry to touch other people you have to develop the images and lines. for example its okay to talk about splinters and fireflies, i love that line, but if you want me to enjoy it, just develop it more. if not, then its a poem that only touches you, which is great.
Agreed.^-^
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May 15th, 2010 02:08 PM
calvinNhobbes
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Thanks for your suggestions, both of you. I appreciate the input and can understand your points. I may go back and reinterpret this poem into a new one. It will be interesting to see how it turns out.
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May 20th, 2010 03:14 AM
calvinNhobbes
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3 am
Late night thoughts
Lead to random places
Guided by short attention spans.
My need to bleed
Ontop of white paper
Makes it hard to rhyme
the next line
But as I stumble I catch my footing
And get back in time
Late night thoughts
No conclusion
Just a momentary artful intrusion.
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Nov 27th, 2010 07:56 AM
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