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Darth_Nefarus
Redi Knight
Registered: Jul 2004
Location: United States
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NJO Luke vs. Mace, Nefarus style
Setting: Jedi Temple council room. Just assume this is some crazy parallel dimension where Mace was alive and could meet Luke. Also, pretend that the Mace vs. Dooku duel I created happened. Oh, and just pretend sabers can be set to stun, I mean, there are practice sabers.
"So you are the son of the chosen one?"
Luke turned around to see a bald man with dark skin and eyes. He was wearing Jedi robes and garb, with a lightsaber attached to his belt. His presence was powerful, even though he wasn't that much taller or muscular than Luke.
"Chosen One?" Luke asked, not sure what the Jedi was referring to. "My father was Anakin Skywalker. I'm not familiar with him being a chosen one."
"Yoda must not have told you about the prophecy," the Jedi said, sitting in one of the empty chairs. "I remember sitting in this very chair along side master Yoda when we determined your father would not be trained. That rejection, especially from me, may not have been good for him."
Luke came and began to sit, but then moved over a chair in respect of Master Yoda, to which the Jedi nodded.
"You sat on the council with Yoda? What is your name?"
"I am Mace Windu, I'm sure that there aren't any details on my exploits in the archives anymore."
"No, but when I was first training with Yoda he told me many stories of powerful Jedi, including you. He told me that you used a dangerous and unique form of saber techniques."
Mace stood, leaving the robe behind him, bringing his saber to his hand. "Ahh yes, Vaapad, I invented it when I was only 12. I believed that a Jedi needed to be aggressive enough to win a battle, but with a level head to not slip into the darkside. It is not just a style, but a state of mind that uses both sides of the force to completely channel it's flow and make you more effective, especially against evil."
"Then you were the best?" Luke asked, not sure if Mace was hinting at it, or just waiting for a response.
"No," he replied quickly. "Master Yoda was by far superior to me with a saber, and before his turn to the darkside, Count Dooku defeated me as well. However, once he aligned himself with the darkness, it gave me the edge, despite his incredible skill with form 2."
"Form 2, that is the more saber to saber oriented form is it not?" Luke asked, hungry for the knowledge.
"Yes, form 2 was based on defensive manuevers and carious styles of fencing. While it was less effective against a blaster, it was most effective against a saber."
"Could you show me Vaapad?" Luke asked.
"I can spar with you, if that is what you are asking," Mace said, twisting a knob on his saber. "If you would care for a lesson, in Vaapad that is."
Luke smiled and adjusted his saber as well, and removed the extra clothing he did not need. He bowed when he stood and walked several feet away from Mace, bowing once more and saluting him with the saber. Mace nodded, readying his saber and his mind as the force began to fill him. Not only was he using the force, but the darkside was attempting to call upon him, but he knew how to control his thoughts, and focuses on his task.
Mace sprung at Luke with incredible speed, attacking low then overhead, mixing it up as he went. Luke stayed on the defensive, taking notes on Mace' movements. Although it was certainly aggressive like Luke fought, it left less openings. Mace and Luke locked their sabers, and Mace pushed Luke back with a force push, but Luke merely skidded across the floor as he crossed his arms, protecting himself with the force.
Luke came on the attacks now, adapting his style to more fit Mace and his movements. Luke could already see why his techniques were inferior to Master Windu's. He made his swings less broad and kept constant focus on where his feet where in conjunction to his blade.
Mace was in awe of the power from each attack, yet there was no anger channeling throug Mace from Luke. Luke was calm, relaxed and allowing the force to guide him. Mace realized that his powers were not as mighty as Luke's, but then realized he wasn't thinking clearly. Clearly for him anyway. He started to feel the rush of excitement combat gave a person, the spoils of victory and how good it felt to defeat someone with his saber.
Luke was back on the defensive now, as with each swing they came at stranger angles, with more power each time. Luke was worried, and why should he be? This is sparring, and it is between fellow Jedi, there should be no worry in his mind. That was not only a path to the darkside, but it seemed to make Mace more powerful as he did that.
Luke locked sabers again and used his strength to push it to the ground. Mace broke free and brought his saber under Luke's and forward to Luke's stomach. Luke was in the air immediately, flipping overhead Mace and parrying the swing as he went past the Jedi Master.
Luke landed on one of the empty chairs and was quickly followed by Mace. Mace began to drive Luke backward, as they each skipped from chair to chair during the duel. They completed nearly four revolutions around the circle when Luke started to notice the pattern they were in. He concentrated on the force around the next two chairs in the sequence and skipped to the next, focusing on that one specifically. When Mace made it to the particular chair Luke was focusing on, Luke used the force to let it out from under him.
Mace rolled forward, twisting his body to the right, allowing the chair to fall under him, but when he was on his feet again he quickly met sabers with Luke again.
"Resourceful," Mace complimented. "You use a form like your father, but you also fight like Obi-Wan."
Luke was touched by a comment like that. Obi-Wan was like a second father he had, third counting uncle Owen. Mace noticed Luke's concentration break and used a similar trick. He used the force to tip Luke's chair backward, but Luke went to the side, and srung from his free hand, and thrusted forward with his saber. Mace parried, but barely in time as the green glow of Luke's saber nearly struck the tip of his nose.
Luke was in control again, keeping his pace slow, but fast enough to counter Mace's attacks. When Luke blocked a downward swing, he pushed Mace's arms upward and began another leap, twist flipping like he did before, but using the force to propell him into a quick roll when he landed.
Mace through the saber behind his back, not seeing Luke's attack, but expecting it; although he blocked the swing, Luke's saber poked him in the chest a second later. Luke's strike at Mace's back was not an actual strike, but the saber coming forward as Luke rolled, bouncing off of Mace's saber. When Luke completed his somersault, he stabbed backward, over his left shoulder, surprising Mace and himself.
"Indeed you are the son of the chosen one," Mace replied, letting his grip of Vaapad go, despite the minor notions of jelousy and still wanting to win, but they left once Mace's saber was turned off. "Form of your father, the resourcefulness of Obi-Wan, and you use manuevers similar to Master Yoda, whom would be most proud of your skills."
Luke and Mace shared a nod, then turned their attention to the chairs they had knocked over. Each grabbed a chair and carried it back to it's place, then sat in their original spots.
"Wait," Mace said, just before Luke sat again. "Sit in Yoda's former seat. It was meant for the master."
Luke nodded and obeyed, despite the fact he was being called master. They each began to meditate and fell through the force a familiar precense, one who's wisdom could never leave them, even after his death.
Master Yoda.
"Proud indeed, I am, Luke," Yoda's voice echoed in Luke's mind. "A very powerful Jedi you have become, like your father."
Luke smiled, remembering when he first met Yoda and how hard the old Jedi was on him. He thought back to those days and realized how far he had come, not just as a Jedi, but as a person in general. He remembered how he was afraid to become like his father, afraid of the darkside. But as he proved above Endor's moon, his father still existed in the dark shell of Darth Vader, and Luke was able to return him to the light.
Luke was now glad to be like his father. A good pilot, able to fix things, and above all, the affinity for the power and knowledge to protect the universe from evil.
This pride was unlike other pride; it was something only a Jedi could ever know.
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May 13th, 2005 09:27 AM |
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Fishy
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Registered: Mar 2005
Location: The Netherlands
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Great story, I don't like the way it goes but great story, personally I don't think Luke could have won in a lightsaber duel, when drawing heavily on the force and using force attacks then he could win IMO. But still great story
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May 13th, 2005 01:01 PM |
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Janus Marius
Plo Koon Rulez!
Registered: Feb 2005
Location: Hiding from zombies
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The writing was excellent. By far the best I've seen out of you yet. I think it was fitting for a spar, although I am not so sure Mace would have been so easily bested. Finishing Shatterpoint and watching ROTS will solidify my view of his style.
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May 13th, 2005 02:51 PM |
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Darth_DaNThEMaN
Restricted
Registered: Mar 2005
Location: United StatesAccount Restricted
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You're the maN.
I need to get crackalackin' on the maul vs grievous thing.
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May 13th, 2005 06:44 PM |
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Darth_Nefarus
Redi Knight
Registered: Jul 2004
Location: United States
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Well, it was only sparring, had they been fighting to the death, I would have incorporated more force powers and kicks to the face etc.
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May 13th, 2005 08:41 PM |
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Darth_Glentract
The Truest Sith Lord
Registered: Apr 2005
Location: Korriban
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it was really good.
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May 13th, 2005 09:14 PM |
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SnakeEyes
Connoisseur
Registered: Jul 2004
Location: AMERICA
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Bravo!
BTW: Where is the Maul versus Jango one?
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May 13th, 2005 09:49 PM |
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Stealth
Ranger
Registered: Apr 2005
Location: The Prancing Pony
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That was great one Nefarus just like always... I can't find nothing wrong with your stories... Excellent
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May 13th, 2005 09:53 PM |
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DarkNemesis
Uber Dark Lord
Registered: Feb 2005
Location: The Dark Side of the Force
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NICE!!!!! That was one awesome story.
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May 13th, 2005 10:23 PM |
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Darth_Nefarus
Redi Knight
Registered: Jul 2004
Location: United States
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The Maul vs. Jango story was postponed so I could research a few specific spots in Coruscant, I want to really nail it
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May 14th, 2005 07:32 AM |
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Wanderer259
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Registered: Apr 2005
Location: United States
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I liked it a lot, actually. And to be honest, I actually enjoyed the non-fighting bits a bit more than the actual fight.
I still don't know what to write, myself; I can't decide.
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May 14th, 2005 07:36 AM |
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Janus Marius
Plo Koon Rulez!
Registered: Feb 2005
Location: Hiding from zombies
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How about Keninja versus somebody more around his level?
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May 14th, 2005 07:43 AM |
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Darth_Nefarus
Redi Knight
Registered: Jul 2004
Location: United States
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Dude, write ANH Obi-Wan vs. ROTS Dooku
it would be classic old men with sabers and arthritis
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May 14th, 2005 07:56 AM |
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Shadow Jedi
Jedi Master is a tittle
Registered: May 2005
Location: Australia
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that was a good one write more bout marka ragnos versus luke skwalker or something like that
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May 14th, 2005 09:33 AM |
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Jack Daniels
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Registered: Apr 2005
Location: I know where I would like to be
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I think if you keep writing in these threads Nefarus ...I will never leave this forum....lol....Damn good man!
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May 14th, 2005 01:40 PM |
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Fishy
Senior Member
Registered: Mar 2005
Location: The Netherlands
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Hope you don't mind Nerafus... But I made one myself it isn't as good as yours of course  But well its more like how I think it would go.
Mace Windu vs. Luke Skywalker
“This is Sith magic Kyle, I am not so sure we should use it.” “The council can be restored, they died before their time something like this can get them back… It would be glorious for us to get them back.” “I am not so sure Kyle… Who would you want to bring back? My two masters have died long ago, naturally… Or close to, they would not live long even if they did return then who?” “I have heard story’s about one Jedi Master, Luke… One Jedi Master named Mace Windu. A very powerful and skilled Master apparently I think he will do fine. Do you want me to try it or not.” “Fine try it but this better work.” “Don’t worry it will work.”
The beaches near the forests on Yavin IV were a perfect place to meditate. Kyle always said that and he would always keep on saying that. This was the perfect place to try and get the members from the Council before Emperor Palpatine his reign back. He started meditating, his mind focussed on nothing but Mace Windu. The proud and powerful Jedi Master that died to quickly. He reached out threw the force and tried to sense the spirit of the man. Reaching out further and further until he eventually found something. It was a spirit, a ghost long past but it was still there. Kyle reached out to it and drew it closer to him. Closer and closer. It started to storm as Kyle came closer to finishing. Luke stepped away from Kyle and went to hide from the storm under a rock hanging over the beach.
He looked as lighting struck behind Kyle in the sand. Kyle his lightsaber was hit and destroyed. Luke did not like the signs of it, but he could not stop it anymore. Suddenly the winds raced faster and the lighting followed each other quicker, the strange was that it wasn’t raining. Luke had never seen anything like it and with each passing lightning he became more and more scared of the consequences of these actions. Then another lighting came, it barely missed Kyle Katarn by only two maybe three feet, Luke couldn’t tell.
He raced over to Kyle to see if he was alright, but when he came near he realised that the lighting had not been lightning. Instead of destruction there stood a man. A lightsaber in his right hand and confusion in his eyes. He looked around as the storm past. Katarn turned around to grab his lightsaber but it was destroyed he turned his attention to the man in front of him again, he wanted to ask a question but the man did not give them time. Mace ignited his lightsaber and a purple beam appeared. “You brought me back to live? Why? Why?” “Are you Mace Windu.” “I am dead, I was supposed to be dead, kill me.” “What?” Luke was surprised he did not except this to happen Kyle was even more so but he stayed silent. “We will not kill you.” Luke answered.
Mace did not reply to Luke instead he turned his attention to Katarn. “You are the one that has brought me back, it is your job to kill me.” “With what? I don’t have the power I don’t have a light…” “Kill me Katarn.” “I can’t.” Mace reacted by choking Kyle. He raised him into the air and then threw him away. Luke had seen such displays of the force before and he did not intercept realising full well that Katarn could have beaten Mace back with the force would the situation have required it.
Mace turned his attention back to Luke. “Kill me son of the chosen one.” “Son of the what?” “Master Yoda and Kenobi did not tell you? I am surprised, but then again your heritage was never something that you should have known about.” “What do you know about me?” “I know you are the son of Anakin Skywalker a great talent and a gift for the Jedi, would he not have turned to the Dark Side… Surely he would have managed to surpass all Jedi that lived if he continued his training… You are his son if you have his same skill you are going to be very powerful. You will kill me.” “I will not.” Mace turned around and threw his lightsaber towards Katarn.
Kyle screamed of pain as his right hand was cut off. Luke surprised by the sudden anger in himself and the hatred against the Jedi before him ignited his own Lightsaber and told Kyle to stay out of the battle, without a hand Kyle saw no real choice and he hid under the same rock Luke had hidden for the storm from. Luke stood still and waited for Mace to make a move. Mace was smart and powerful and when he attacked he did so with fury and speed. Luke was immediately pushed on the defensive. The beach made fighting hard as sand came in their shoes and it slowed down their movements. Mace was especially bothered by it and he manoeuvred Luke away form the Sand and onto the nearby grass.
As powerful as Luke was he could not hold on to the lightsaber technique of Mace who was at that time just moving around him like an insane maniac. Mace had not yet seen a chance to kill Luke who still managed to block every one of Mace his attacks. His speed was greater then Mace his speed, and the power with which he blocked surprised Mace. But he lacked technique his blocks were a hit against the lightsaber trying to push it away. It worked but barely. The lack of training was causing Luke to have some real difficulties.
Mace increased the speed of his attacks and with every block Luke made he could feel his own power rising and the weakness in Luke. He realised the strength of the Master in front of him but he knew that the training he had received wasn’t good enough. Instead of killing Luke he calmed down. He let Luke learn from him and his technique and found Luke to be an incredibly fast learner. Mace watched in awe as he saw that Luke was started to block his attacks faster and faster, but he kept making mistakes.
Mace suddenly turned around Luke leaving him alone staring at the beach and the ocean, Luke had his lightsaber over his head to block the next attack but it did not come from the front. Mace was behind him and stabbed forward, Luke knowing full well that he was about to die if he would have stayed up let himself drop to the ground hoping it would save him. Mace went in for the kill with his lightsaber but Luke rolled around and placed his own against Mace his lightsaber. Mace could see that the untrained Master was still a powerful Master.
He decided to end this once and for all and started attacking Luke faster, Luke could no longer hold on to the speed and power of Mace and started slipping, eventually Mace saw a bullet proof opening and he took it. While Luke had moved his lightsaber away from his body to block Mace, Mace used his lightsaber hilt to hit Luke in the face, Luke fell on the ground in pain, blood dripping from his nose.
With all his strength Luke used the force to Push mace away, who was ready to finish Luke off. Luke his force attack had been successful and Mace flew threw the air until he hit a thin three. The three collapsed by the punch, and a coconut fell from it on Mace his head. Before Mace could stand up Luke was already in front of him.
Luke had run to Mace and instead of raising his lightsaber used to force to freeze Mace and restrict his movement. With one final cut he killed the Jedi who was still sitting on the ground, now smiling. He coul hear Mace his voice in his head saying “Thank You” as the Jedi Master his body faded for the second and last time.
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Last edited by Fishy on May 14th, 2005 at 01:44 PM
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May 14th, 2005 01:42 PM |
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Jack Daniels
WOW!
Registered: Apr 2005
Location: I know where I would like to be
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That was okay....I really liked the coconut hitting Mace on the head......  classic....and even though Kyle is sithspit good to see him in another story...you need an editor though...lol..jus messin first of your stories Ive read not bad...I couldnt have done as well...Im a reader not a writer...lol
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May 14th, 2005 01:57 PM |
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exanda kane
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Registered: May 2005
Location: Norwich, England
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im sorry but nefarus's story was worse than mine, and mine was a twenty minute job!
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May 14th, 2005 03:17 PM |
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Fishy
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Registered: Mar 2005
Location: The Netherlands
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No it wasn't, his story was great...
And thx Sith but i'm not a writer either, i just didn't like the way Mace lost so I decided to make my own story of how I thought it would go.
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May 14th, 2005 05:05 PM |
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Darth_Nefarus
Redi Knight
Registered: Jul 2004
Location: United States
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Kane, was my story worse than your piece of crap called Jango's Clone vs. Darth Maul?
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