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cole2005
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i absolutely loved writing that last bit, had huge smile on my face as i wrote it!
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WOW, Dumbledorez back, good.I'm just wondering what happened to Ron in this scene??...
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Jan 23rd, 2006 08:52 PM |
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Kacey736
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Wow that was really good, I think you deserve a much time as you want to write the next part.
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Jan 23rd, 2006 09:18 PM |
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man u really good....brilliant idea...the best among all
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Jan 24th, 2006 01:39 PM |
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"Dumbledore" Voldemort and Harry said at the same time, Ron finally managed to have undone the binds holding him. He rushed over to Voldemort and helped him up. Out of the shadows came the tall figure Harry had been hoping to see for so long now. "What are you doing here?" there was definate suprise and fear in Voldemorts usually unwavering voice. Dumbledore stood next to Harry who had just about recovered from Voldemorts attack, "I am back Tom and I believe the tide of this war has just turned. I suggest you leave this place immediately in a matter of seconds this area will be full of Order members and even you wouldn't be able to escape them all." Dumbledore spoke with so much confidence it was so different to when Harry had last been with him. Voldemort stood for a while weighing up his options, "Come Ron we shall go, you have not seen the last of me Dumbledore!" With that the two wizards turned and disappeared. "We will see each other again soon." Dumbledore whispered under his breath. In an instant the whole orchard lit up as several dozen witches and wizards appeared in the surrounding vicinity. Several inaudible shouts were heard as Harrys eyes scanned the ground around him. There were far more casualties then previously expected, lying only feet away from Harry was the twisted body of Fred, several death eaters lay scattered around. "He is dead Harry." a small voice in Harrys ear brought him back to reality as he noticed the Order gathering around both himself and Dumbledore. "Wha.. what happened?" from behind Harry he heard the groggy voice of George Weasley, he gently sat up adjusting to the now bright light tha surrounded him. He looked directly across from him and saw his brother lying there. "Fred, Fred are you ok?" Scampering to his feet George knocked several people out of the way in an attempt to reach his brother. "Fred please say something, please?" his voice slowly died away as tears streamed down his face as he held his brothers body tightly against his own. The Order members shifted uncomfortably as George held his brother, soflty crying. Harry looked around and the Weasleys that had been held in captivity by Voldemort had gone, it was almost as if they had disappeared. "He took them with him, he has taken the whole Weasley family tonight, except for George here and Charlie who is away, the rest are gone." Dumbledore gently placed a hand on Harrys shoulder, "Come Harry lets go, the Order can clear this up. I believ you and I need to talk." With that Dumbledore disappeared in a low crack, turning on the spot Harry disappeared also.
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Hundreds of miles from where he had previously been standing Voldemort reappeared in a dark room. He immediately went into a fit of rage blasting several bits of furniture and walls into oblivion. Ron cowered behind him, "AVERY!" the Dark Lord screamed at the top of his voice, seconds later the man named Avery appeared, "Yes my Lord." there was so much fear in his voice Ron thought he'd collapse then and there, "You told me Dumbledore was dead!You told me that Snape had killed him. You lied to me. He is not dead he lives!You are one of my most loyal supporters you will only survive this because of that now leave me before I change my mind!" Avery didnt need telling twice he scarpered from the room so quickly Ron could have sworn he flew out of there. "My Lord he may be back but he is obviously not up to full power, if he was he would have fought you tonight. Use this master, attack the school now!" Rons voice raised at the last statement, Voldemort turned on his young apprentice, his red eyes stared muderously at him, "Are you stupid!He knows he is not at full power, he will expect an attack. That place will be crawling with all sorts of guards and magical enchantments!Foolish boy!Crucio!" As if rather bored Voldemort struck Ron with the torture curse. Ron screamed so loud it hurt so much, slowly it subsided leaving Ron gasping for breath. At the end of the room hanging in the air were the remaining Weasleys, Bill, Molly, Ginny and Fleur were hanging from the air like puppets. Voldemort turned and walked to the end of the room, gently running a long bone like finger across Ginnys unconcious face, he smiled an evil smile. "At least it wasn't a complete loose tonight, these will come round to our way of thinking,enervate." Voldemort soflty whispered at the red headed girl that floated unconcious in fornt of him, slowly she bagn to wake up. She tried to move but to no avail, "I will leave you here with your brother. I wouldn't say anything to offend him though he seems to like killing red heads, two brothers and a father to date!" Voldmeort turned and walked off laughing to himself, as he passed Ron he looked down at him, "Do what you please but she must live, understand me?!" Ron gave a nod before getting to his feet with his wand raised and ready.
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Jan 24th, 2006 04:04 PM |
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cole2005
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I cant believe it i had spent about an hour writing loads, id writtne the bit with Snape and Harry fiunally coming to terms with each other! Then i deleted it, im such a damn idiot!thats just depressing coz it was really good!
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Jan 25th, 2006 05:00 PM |
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i really like those last two entry's they are amazing. You are a very aspired writer
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Jan 25th, 2006 06:48 PM |
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With a crack Harry reappeard at the gates to Hogwarts, the wind almost knocking him to the floor. He could only see a few metres in front of him, so struggled to make out the figure of Dumbledore struggling through the deep snow. Harry found the trail Dumbledore had created and quickly caught up with him, "It's amazing Harry, this place hasn't changed at all, I thought at least something would be different!" Dumbledores voice just about carried onto Harrys ears, "Where are we going sir?" Harry shouted back in Dumbledores direction, the wind was blowing snow and rain into Harrys face making it extremely difficult to talk, "Room of Requirement there are several people in the Order room, " Dumbledores almost inaudible voice shouted back at him. It took them a considerably long time to reach the front door of the school. But getting into the warmth was like a blessing. Harry was a few steps behind Dumbledore so when he got inside Dumbledore was no where to be seen. The entrance hall was so dark, even with the flickering candles on the walls there was no penetration into the dark. "Professor?" Harry gently called out into the darkness, no answer came back. Harry started to breath deeply as the darkness began to take him over. He felt like all the lights in the world had been turned off, all he could see was Hemrione, almost as if she was imprinted on his mind. Then slowly her face turned into Voldemort. Harry snapped back to reality as he felt cold sweat dripping off of his face. Fumbling for his wand he lit the tip, letting out a deep breath as the initial area around him lit up. Taking in a deep breath Harry stepped forward, slowly he got into a pattern and before he knew it a door had appeared on the wall. Harry pushed it slowly open, the room let out a cold breeze, Harry extinguished his lighted wand. "Ahh Harry sorry I rushed off but I needed to get here!" Dumbledore spun round at the sound of the door opening,, Harry descended into the sunken pit that held a large oak table which had several people surrounding it at one end, there was Dumbledore, Snape and McGonagell, along with two others who Harry did not know. "Harry may I introduce you to head Auror at the ministry, Micheal Ravanskot," Dumbledore tilte dhis head towards a young physically well built wizard, Ravanskot simply nodded at Harry, "also I'd like you to meet my brother, Aberforth." Harry wouldn't have guessed in a million years this was Dumbledores estranged brother, he was quite short with no hair at all, and his face had no similarities to Dumbledore at all. Again all Harry got in way of acknowledgement was a simple nod, "If we could go back to what was being said before Potter arrived!" Snapes uncanny ability to make Harry feel small once again kicked in.
"Of course as I was saying, we have intelligence reporting that He has managed to get an army of around 100 werewolves, with more to come. Asyou will probably remember he has giants, about a dozen we think, to add to this a convoy of vampires are coming over from Romania. They will provide immense stealth to his operations." Ravanskot rolled up the parchment he had been reading from, "So are they all he has, along with the Dementors, in way of creatures?" Dumbledore asked an exhausted looking Ravanskot, "Well, no. As you know he has thousands of wizards from all over the world on his side. We are led to believe that wizards from Australia will be bringing several Bunyip with them!" At these words Dumbledore bowed his head, Harry just stood there with a look of complete confusion on his face, "Sir whats a Bunyip?" Snape gave a slight choking sound which greatly sounded like a laugh, "Well Harry, Bunyip are found in Australia, they can live in water or on land. They are horribly fierce creatures, they enjoy the taste of human flesh, mainly women and children." Dumbledore turned back to the table as Harry let out a small 'Oh,'
"So what about our side what do we have?" Dumbledore asked still with his head bowed, obviously distressed by the revelation of the Bunyip! "Well we have attained the services of the elves of Norway. They will provide us with many numbers and also there power over nature is unmatchable! Then we have the house elfs, huge magical power they possess! We are currently in talks with the Scorpionions from Babylon. The will provide huge physical power, countering the threat of the werewolves." Dumbledore seemed impressed by Ravanskot's entourage of creatures, "But I have saved the best till last! I trust you have heard of Elementals?" a smile broke across the faces of eveyrone in the room, "Of course but they only are beings of legend!" Aberforth said in a astounded voice, Ravanskot simply laughed, "Yes so we thought, they have simply been in hiding, we have managed to coax the air elementals, the Sylphians. There stealth ability is second to none! That professor is what we have managed to get onto our side so far!" Ravanskot picked up the remaining roles of parchment, feeling very good about himself, "Very good Micheal, but I am led to believe that Harry has found an even more important weapon in this war!" All heads turned in Harrys direction, "Lead us on Harry, I am veyr much looking forward to seeing Salazars chamber!" Harry turned and moved up the steps without a word, although he was treasuring the greedy look on Snapes face. They silently moved down to Myrtles bathroom, somehow the journey was far quicker then when Harry had gone alone! The group stood in silence as Harry opened up the pipe to the entrance of the Chamber, each member slid down into the dank sewers below. The 3 wizards that hadn't been there before were fascinated by the architechture, there were sculptures and inscriptions Harry hadn't seen before. As a result it took almost an hour to walk the 100 metre tunnel to the doors that led into the main Chamber. The large doors swung open, immediatley the Chambers lamps lit.
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Jan 26th, 2006 10:11 PM |
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cole2005
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i realy want to write about the battle and the lead up, its going to be amazing!
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Jan 27th, 2006 07:49 PM |
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forsaken6669
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can't wait for that.....when u posting it?amazing the way u write....
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Jan 28th, 2006 01:51 PM |
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cole2005
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the battle wo't appear for a while, theres alot to happen before that, plus am still undecided on where to hold the battle, any suggestions?
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Jan 28th, 2006 07:25 PM |
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forsaken6669
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i think diagon alley would be a good place...
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Jan 29th, 2006 03:10 AM |
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forsaken6669
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when the next post man?
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Jan 31st, 2006 10:02 AM |
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The Chamber lay exactly how Harry had last left it. The footsteps of the 4 wizards echoed of the cold walls. Snapes greedy eyes grew even larger at the site of the throne like chair at the head of the room. Ravenskot simply stood staring around the chamber in amazement. Dumbledore did not stop or make any sort of indication the room he was in wasn't meant to exist. "Harry, the book?" his words were like a knife through butter, slicing into the cold air. Harry gestured into the corner of the room. Dumbledore moved in front of the group and quickened his pace reaching the bookshelves before the others had even moved. He bent down and kept his ran his fingers by the book, obviously he didnt touch it otherwise he would've been thrown backwards. Harry heard several curious noises from where Dumbledore crouched. Then he straightened up, "Harry, you and Severus are to remain here. Ravenskot would you kindly join me, I need to visit the Ministry archives. I am confident I know what has been done here, I just need to find the proof." Dumbledore didn't even wait for a reply he turned and walked out of the Chamber, looking quite shocked Ravenskot followed him leaving Harry and Snape alone in the Chamber of Secrets.
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Feb 3rd, 2006 02:16 PM |
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"You are leaving them alone?" Ravenskot's voice followed Dumbledore as they sped through the halls of Hogwarts, "Yes I am, you may think I'm being stupid doing that but they need to settle their differences!" With that Dumbledore simply ignored every other comment thrown his way by the Auror.
"So Potter I guess you've been spending alot of time down here, judging by the way you have carelessly thrown these books aobut." He bent down and picked up the book entitled, 'A Hundred ways to torture your enemy.' Harry threw Snape a dirty look, "Why didn't you tell anyone what had happened?" Harrys voice sounded so cold not like he usually sounded, "I couldn't Harry, if i had said anything it would have leaked out and then we would have lost our advantage!" Snape looked at Harry as if he was nothing more than an infant. "You betrayed our side once before, why not again?!" Harrys voice began to rise and more agrression was held, "You don't know anything aobut whats happened apart from what you've overheard." Snapes voice seemed to falter, a tone of shame could be heard wavering in his voice. "I know you told Voldemort about the first part of the prophecy!" Harrys voice rose to almost shouting point, "I didn't think he would kill your mother!" Snape almost screamed this back at Harry, Harrys face changed from one of anger to a face filled with confusion, "What do you mean?!" Harrys words came out at almost a whisper, Snape hung his head, a low shameful voice came out of his mouth, "That night, I left the Dark Lord and was sent to tail Dumbledore, it led me to the Hogs Head. You know about me overhearing Trelawney, and then Aberforth chucked me out. Well I immediately went back to him and told him what happened! I got information about where the Potters were in hiding, I made a deal with him, I told him where you were hiding, but in return he was not to kill your mother!" Snapes head rose up and looked into Harrys eyes, "I loved your mother Harry, she was the only person who made me feel like I wasn't a waste of space. I went with him, I would be there to console your mother when you and your father died! I tried to stop him killing your mother but couldn't she died in front of me. The person I loved died in front of me! I couldn't remain on his side, ever since that day I've wanted him dead! That is what happened, yes i killed your father, but it wasnt my fault your mother died!" Harry stood looking at the sickly looking figure of his old potions master. For a split second Harry felt sorry for him, but this quickly disappeared and was replaced by a felling of sickness. "Why would you think my mother would ever love you?! Your scum, your evil and twisted! My mother hated you I saw that she did!" Harry went to turn to walk out of the room, his stomach full of disgust! "Potter, don't turn your back on me! Your mother did love me! I know she did, Potter get back here!" Snapes voice fell lower and lower into despair, as he sank onto the floor of the Chamber.
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Kacey736
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WAHOO! It is very good. I like it. It rocks more than this band.
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Feb 5th, 2006 06:21 PM |
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Kovacs86
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Dude, what the hell? Your charcterisation is WAY wrong... draco was unwillig to kill Dumbledore, he's not a cold blood killer like Voldemort. That's like having Harry as a rapist or Hermione as a whore... no, no... YOU are the rapist! You totally raped this story and characters to death! OMG... and dont type so fast, you keep making it really hard to read with billions of errors!
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Feb 6th, 2006 04:14 PM |
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bringing Dumbledore back? That's EVIL! Rapist... I only read to like chapter 3 though!
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Feb 6th, 2006 04:15 PM |
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cole2005
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well if you don't like it stop spoiling it for everyone else and don't bother posting or reading anymore! These are my ideas they don't have to be exactly to what you want!
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Feb 6th, 2006 08:45 PM |
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