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hannah11392
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OMG!!!your story is soooo good! i love it!!!
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Regulus A Black
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Chapter 24
A Giant Mistake
The spell flew straight at Harry, not knowing that Snape was there, Snape blocked the spell for him. “Draco, I thought I told you not to come back to this house.” Snape said, “I told you to hide yourself for protection.”
“Why? Nobody can touch me now.” Draco said, “After everything you’ve taught me to do, I’m invincible.”
“Draco, who has placed you under the imperious curse?” Snape asked, “this is not the boy I trained, the boy scared to kill anybody.”
“I’m not scared anymore.” Draco said. “Now it’s time you died. AVADA KEDAV…”
Just as he was about to finish, he was hit by a stunning spell by Harry. Harry took his hat and placed it on Draco. “Professor, take Draco with you, I know Dumbledore didn’t want this for him.”
“Right.” Snape said. “Let’s make it the rest of the way out of the mazes.”
Escaping from the maze the trio ran out of the house of gaunt as quickly as they could when they ran into a familiar face, Bellatrix Lestrange. “Hand over the horcrux children, and I shall be easy on you.” They heard Snape apparate away with Draco.
“NO!” Harry said, knowing that if he gave it away too easily she would suspect it a fake, but if he let it slip in the battle she wouldn’t suspect anything, other then Harry’s weakness.
“Don’t make me use force Potter, give it to me now.” Bellatrix demanded. Just then another figure apparated to the house. It was another figure they recognized, Peter Pettigrew.
“Give us the Horcrux boy.” Peter demanded.
“No, you stupid rat.” Harry said.
“Then you three will die.” Bellatrix said.
Harry, Ginny, and Hermione prepared for battle. Bellatrix sent a disarming charm at Harry who ran and jumped out of the way. Ginny fired a disarming charm at Peter who dodged out of the way.
“CRUCIO” Bellatrix bellowed, and the spell hit Hermione in the back. She fell to the ground and screamed in pain, Harry got angry. He turned around and faced Bellatrix head on. He started toward her gathering up power as he went. “CRUCIO” Bellatrix howled again. Harry just kept on walking, it was like the spell hadn’t even hit him. He had tapped into his magical center, and was now able to do almost any spell without even thinking about it. Bellatrix kept sending spells at Harry nothing did anything to stop him. Harry raised his wand and screamed, “EXPELLIARMUS” it hit Bellatrix and she flew backwards as her wand flew out of her hand. He wand then flew right into Harry’s outstretched hand.
“I won’t kill you, or even hurt you, that is the job of a powerful friend of mine, who would like to settle a little debt.” Just then Harry got hit by an expelliarmus charm from the back which had been sent by Peter. Harry and Bellatrix’s wand flew out of his hand, and Harry fell over. He dropped the fake horcrux and it bounced away. Bellatrix got up and grabbed her wand, just as she was reaching for Harry’s it flew into Harry’s hand and Harry disappeared, and reappeared behind Bellatrix. Bellatrix could sense him and turned around. She summoned the Horcrux. Peter ran over toward Bellatrix and Harry.
“Give me back the Horcrux, Bellatrix, or face the consequences.” Harry yelled.
“Never, oh, and never trust a death eater. AVADA KEDAVRA.” She screamed. It flew right toward Harry. Peter as soon as Bellatrix started saying it began running toward Harry, and jumped in front of him at the last second. His last words were “I will finally pay my debt.” Which he said as he was running. Peter fell over dead, just as Bellatrix apparated away, knowing Harry was going to be angry.
“Harry,” Hermione said, “we should go now, before she realizes it’s a fake and comes back for us.”
“You don’t understand how close I was to killing her, actually wanting to kill her. I think I’m losing control of my emotions, of my ability to love.” Harry said, “I could only feel hate and anger when she attacked you, all I cared about was revenge. Just as I was about to kill her, I felt something, I knew I wasn’t suppose to be the one to deal with her. That was to be Neville’s job.”
“Harry,” Ginny said, “that just proves you haven’t lost your ability to love. You were able to think of your friends and know that you shouldn’t do what you were about to do due to your friends love for you, and your love for your friends.”
“Let’s go back to headquarters now.” Hermione said. They all apparated back to headquarters. They told everybody what had happened, and they were all surprised that Snape was still on their side, after killing Dumbledore. That night at dinner, they noticed somebody was missing.
“Where’s Harry?” Mad Eye asked.
Harry was sitting in the basement of order headquarters knowing nobody could find him there. He had destroyed all the horcruxes but Nagini and now it was just a matter of gathering a small army to fight Voldemort and his remaining death eaters. “I have the six members of the DA that will fight no matter what, the remaining members of the Order, that gives me about fifteen including myself. That’s not enough to fight Voldemort and his death eaters and his army. Voldemort has a few death eaters left and himself, that’s about six people, but then he has many creatures on his side. He easily has thousands at his command.” Harry said to himself.
Harry sat and thought for hours about anything he could get to fight for him, all thoughts turned up negative. He had thought of the centaurs, but they said this was the humans war, and he thought of many other creatures who were already under Voldemort’s command. “If only Hagrid was still here, he’d know what to do.” Harry thought, and then it hit him. “GRAWP” he yelled. “I can get Grawp to fight for us.”
Harry ran upstairs and realizing he had missed dinner, set out to get something from the fridge. He walked into the kitchen and was greeted by Ginny, Hermione and Ron, who were talking about what had happened at the house of Gaunt. Harry just ignored them for a while, while he got himself something to eat.
“Harry,” Hermione asked, “How did you just run through all of Bellatrix’s spells back at the house of Gaunt?”
Harry thought about what she asked for a minute, he hadn’t even realized he had just walked through the spells. He thought about it and realized he had felt something he had never felt before, a strong magical energy within himself. Harry answered her, “I’m not exactly sure how I did that, all I know is I felt a strong magical energy within myself unlike anything I have ever felt before.”
“How can you not know how you did something?” Ron asked.
“The same way I did everything before I found out I was a wizard. The magic within me reacted to my emotions I guess.” Harry said. “All I know is I’ve never done anything like that before. I felt raw power flowing through my body, and I guess it just released itself.”
“I’ve heard of something like that before.” Hermione said. “All wizards have a magical core within in them. If a wizard can tap into it, they can release the magic without a wand or saying anything, but it’s usually limited to a certain range of spells, such as defense, charms, curses, counter-curses, healing, and movement are some examples. But it’s unheard of that somebody can do more then just a few spells from one area, much less most spells from every area.”
“So you are saying I tapped into my magical core?” Harry asked, “But I don’t even know how to do that.”
“You said, you felt a strong magical energy within yourself that could be your magical core.” Hermione said. “Think about it Harry it makes sense, even if you don’t know how to do it you did it, now if only you could learn to do it whenever you wanted.”
“Yes then I would have a great weapon against Voldemort.” Harry said.
“So I say we research how to do that.” Hermione said.
“Or we could just ask Snape.” Harry suggested, “I’m sure he knows how, and we can contact him through Lupin’s codename. Oh, and I was thinking about gathering a small army to fight Voldemort’s army, I feel the final battle is getting closer. But the only creature I could think of that we can get to join us, is Grawp.”
“Grawp?!” Hermione said, “Isn’t that a bit dangerous now that Hagrid is dead?”
“Yes, but it’s a chance I’m willing to take.” Harry said. “We need all we can for the final fight against Voldemort.”
“Have you figured out how you are going to talk to him?” Hermione asked, “He barely understands us he may not know what you mean.”
“I know, but you have had luck with him before, I was hoping you could come with me and help.” Harry said.
“If it is absolutely necessary I will go with you Harry. I’ll do whatever is needed to defeat Voldemort.” Hermione said.
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Regulus A Black
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Harry and Hermione decided they would go to the Forbidden Forest that night to talk to Grawp. They told Mad Eye what they were doing, and told him it was almost time to go fight Voldemort. “Great, I’ll start preparing the Order.” Mad Eye said.
“You can start preparing but don’t go until I give word.” Harry said.
Harry and Hermione then took off for the Forbidden Forest. They apparated to hogsmeade and proceeded there way up to Hogwarts grounds and the Forbidden Forest. Once they reached the gate to the grounds Harry blew it away with a reducto spell. They ran up to the edge of the forest to where Hagrids cabin used to be then proceeded into the forest to find Grawp.
“Hagger, is that you.” They heard.
“No, it’s Harry, and Hermione, Hagrid’s dead.” Hermione said.
“Hagger’s dead?” Grawp said.
“Sorry.” Hermione said, “we came to ask for your help.”
“HAGGER”S DEAD.” Grawp said, as large tears began to escape from his eyes. “What Grawp gonna do without Hagger.”
“Grawp, will you help us defeat Voldemort, he is the reason Hagrid’s dead.” Hermione said.
“Hermy say Voldymore reason Hagger’s dead?” Grawp said, “Voldymore will pay.” Grawp started picking up trees and throwing them around. He was tearing up the entire forest do to his anger the whole time saying “Voldymore pay.” Grawp then picked up one last tree and threw it, it hit Hermione before landed on the ground. Hermione was knocked out and Grawp was still flailing around and was headed straight for Hermione. Harry summoned as much power as he could and screamed, “REDUCTO.” It sent Grawp flying back away from Hermione and through the trees tearing up more of the forest then Grawp had done. He figured Grawp was dead just as many other’s were when he had done that to them.
Harry ran over to Hermione, she was barely breathing. He had to get her to St. Mungo’s. He made sure he did all he could to make sure that she stayed alive until they arrived at St. Mungo’s, just as he had done from Ron.
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Jul 21st, 2006 05:47 PM |
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Brit531
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That was awsome. Post more soon. I can't wait, but do not rush.
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Jul 21st, 2006 06:52 PM |
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SolidSnake85
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Too good to be ture!
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Jul 21st, 2006 09:53 PM |
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hplver4life
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dude that was great u need to post more soon lol
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Jul 22nd, 2006 05:36 AM |
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Sirius_Rulez
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that was so awsome. bloody outstanding. plz post again soon. but theres no rush
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Jul 22nd, 2006 07:20 AM |
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Regulus A Black
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umm, yeah ok I didn't think it was that good, expect the next chapter up in a couple days
RIP RAB
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Jul 22nd, 2006 09:05 AM |
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Brit531
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It was good
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Jul 22nd, 2006 04:50 PM |
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Regulus A Black
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Sorry this is taking so long i'm just not exactly sure what to put in the chapter with it getting so close to the end, i just kinda want to get it over with, so tomorrow is when it should be up.
RIP RAB
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Jul 27th, 2006 07:48 PM |
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Regulus A Black
Elder Mormon
Gender: Male
Location: United States |
Chapter 25
The Phoenix Falls
Harry got Hermione to St. Mungo’s and let the Order know what had happened. The order then realized just how much trouble it was going to be to get this army to fight against the death eaters, but they knew they couldn’t do it alone. They only had about fifteen people who could fight in the order, and only five now in the DA.
“We still need an army.” Mad Eye said, “how are we going to to get them?”
“I’m going to stay with Hermione until she gets better, after all it is my fault she is like this.” Harry said. “I think you should go.”
“Agreed Potter, I’ll go along with Bill and Charlie to gather as large of an army as we can.” Mad Eye said. “We shall leave immediately.”
Mad Eye grabbed Bill and Charlie and they left to gather the army while the DA stayed with Hermione. “We need to plan out how to get Nagini away from Voldemort long enough to kill her so we can finally destroy Voldemort.” Harry said.
“Well, what do we know about her?” Ginny asked.
“She is always with Voldemort.” Harry said.
“She can’t always be with Voldemort, think Harry, think.” Ginny said.
A vision of an old man walking up the stairs flashed in Harry’s mind. He looked at everything around the man, there was nothing but an open door at the end of the hall at the top of the stairs. Then as the man arrived at the top of the stairs, a snake slithered past him after coming up the stairs as well. “That’s it.” Harry exclaimed, “during my fourth year when I saw the vision of Frank Bryce being murdered, before he reached the room, Nagini slithered up the stairs and right past him. Well I don’t know if she slithered up the stairs but she came from behind him after he had gone up the stairs.”
“Well, let’s assume she did come from downstairs, do you think maybe she stays down there at times when her and Voldemort are in the Riddle house?” Ginny asked.
“It’s possible, but I did see the downstairs as well in the vision and don’t remember seeing a place she would stay.” Harry said, “but, it is a huge house, so I’m sure I didn’t see all of it. There could be a place for her to stay somewhere in the house.”
“We have to figure it out for sure.” Ginny said, “It’s the last puzzle to destroying the horcruxes.”
“We’ll think about it, but for now let’s get some rest.” Harry said.
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Snape was in Spinner’s end with Draco. Snape was yelling at Draco for not listening to him. “Why did you not just go into hiding Draco?” Snape asked. “Did somebody place you under the imperius curse?”
“Yes sir, Bellatrix Lestrange as I was going into hiding, she knows you aren’t as loyal as you claim to be.” Draco said.
“Draco, listen to me, you must go into hiding, somewhere were nobody will ever find you, not even me. I will let you know when it is time to come out.” Snape said. “Don’t tell anybody where you are, if you have too, stay constantly on the move.”
“Right Professor I will.” Draco said, “but don’t you need to go into hiding as well?”
“Yes I do, but I know exactly where I can go that nobody can find me.” Snape said. “Let’s leave now before they come looking for us.”
Draco and Snape disapparated away, Draco apparated into a tropical rainforest while Snape apparated to Order headquarters, Harry had told him where it was. Snape went in to make sure no death eaters could ever find him.
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Voldemort was sitting in his house with Nagini, “You are the last of my precious horcruxes.” Voldemort hissed to Nagini, “I want you to protect yourself at all costs, and hide down in your lair. I will be up here ready to protect you.”
Nagini listened to her master and slithered down to her lair. Voldemort summoned his death eaters. They all quickly apparated to his side, “My loyal servants, you may notice three of us are missing. Two are traitors.” Voldemort said. “if you see them, kill them. Now as a matter of more business, Potter has destroyed all but one of my horcruxes after all, the one that Bellatrix claimed to have saved was a fake. We must protect my precious snake she is my last and the only thing keeping me alive if I were to die again.”
“As you wish master.” The death eaters murmured in unison.
“Now I figure the best way to protect her will be to cause a distraction.” Voldemort hissed with anger. “You will go to the ministry tonight and attack, while I stay and protect Nagini.”
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Regulus A Black
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Mad Eye, Bill, and Charlie arrived back at order headquarters after gathering a small army. They had convinced a couple of the centaurs to fight with them, and a few other creatures but not many. They only had the remaining order members, the DA, and that small army.
The Order sat down to dinner when Snape came in. “Just as a warning, I know the Dark Lord was planning an attack on the ministry to distract everybody while he did a better job of hiding and protecting his last horcrux.” Snape said, “you guys may want to go now to be ready to stop them.”
“Do you know where he will be hiding Nagini?” Harry asked.
“In his fathers house.” Snape said, “there is a lair deep under the house where Nagini sometimes stays. Voldemort visits her down there sometimes but usually he calls her to him. I figure now he himself will be protecting her and creating lots of protection for her. You need to learn to tap into your magical core in order to even stand a chance of getting to Nagini without him knowing. I can teach you if you’d like.”
“That would be great, we can start after we return from the ministry.” Harry said, “Let’s go guys.” The Order and the DA left for the ministry so they could warn them. They were able to get the ministry out before the death eaters arrived, and got the other Order members to join them.
Deep inside the ministry of magic the Order of the Phoenix, the DA, and the small army they assembled stand their ground as the death eaters begin their attack on the ministry. Voldemort knowing he was down to his last horcrux was not going to take any chances he was going to finish this war now while he still had Nagini.
The death eaters started their way through the ministry destroying everything in their path. Mad Eye stood at the lead of the order waiting to attack, he looked over at Harry, Harry nodded. “Let’s go guys.” Mad Eye shouted.
Mad Eye, Kingsley, and the older Weasley’s went off in the first run as Harry waited back with the DA and the rest of the Order. Harry watched as the Order took down many of the death eaters but it seemed for every one they took down three more came, and their were all sorts of dark creatures in the fight.
“Ready,” Harry said, “Let’s go.” The rest of the order and the DA and the small army of creatures Mad Eye had assembled charged into the battle. Harry went after the creatures knowing he could take down a lot of them in a short amount of time. Harry went straight after the dementors, “EXPECTO PATRONUM” Harry shouted. The beautiful silvery-gray stag erupted from his wand and charged at the dementors, this time it was more then the dementors could handle. Harry watched as the dementors seemed to absorb too much good energy and they seemed to just disappear, while others just ran away. Harry called the patronus back, he then began to focus on the giants, he would take care of them just as he had done to Grawp.
Harry ran straight after the giants who were on the front line as a shield for the death eaters. “REDUCTO” Harry screamed pointing his wand at the largest of the giants, and it flew backwards taking a few of the other giants and the trolls with him, as they crashed into the back wall. Harry looked around at what was happening in the battle, it seemed the order wasn’t fairing well. Harry went over to help and watched as a death eater sent a killing spell right at Mad Eye. Mad Eye fell over dead. “Alright guys lets finish this” Harry shouted. The order charged after the death eaters with Harry in the lead, Harry was taking down the dark creatures left and right while the order and the DA took on the death eaters.
“Harry,” Ginny shouted, “don’t you think you should be going to the Riddle house to find Nagini. If you go now you’ll have more time to do what you need to do.”
“Right” Harry said, “you guys be careful, I’m going back to headquarters then.” Harry started off to headquarters but before he left he made sure all the creatures were incapacitated. Harry arrived back at headquarters and found Snape. “I need you to teach me how to tap into my magical core.”
“Then let’s get started, the sooner the better.” Snape said. “Now I assume that Regulus taught you how to sense magical energies outside your body then?”
“Yes he did, but what does that have to do with anything?”
“It has everything to do with it. The same level of concentration is needed for this, except this time you must find a way to search inside yourself.” Snape said. “Once you can find it quickly you will be able to do it without even thinking really.”
“Ok I’ll do it.” Harry said.
“Not yet, Potter, the best way to do it is to be in danger and without a wand, seeing as how this is supposed to be a source of protection.” Snape said, “so hand me your wand.”
Harry hesitated a bit, but knew that Snape knew better then he did, he handed over his wand to Snape as Snape summoned a dragon in front of Harry. “Concentrate, then go inside yourself and feel the magic that is within you.”
Harry concentrated as hard as he could, he sensed Snape and the dragon around him. Then after concentrating a little bit harder was able to find a way to focus on just himself, he felt a magical energy that was extremely stronger then the others. He searched and finally found were the magic was the strongest. He then released what he could. The dragon disappeared and seemed to Snape that it had blown up into millions of little pieces.
“Potter, come here.” Snape demanded. Harry snapped out of his concentration, and walked over to Snape. “Potter, do you realize what you just did?” Snape asked.
“No sir,” Harry said, “I guess I made the Dragon disappear.”
“Not exactly Potter.” Snape said, “You dematerialized it.”
Harry looked confused, “Professor, what exactly does that mean?” he asked.
“It means,” Snape spat, “That you can kill any creature just by thinking about it now. You made it lose its body, you turned it into a million small little pieces which would normally take thousands of years for nature to do.”
Just then Ginny came running into headquarters. “Harry, we fought off the death eaters, but at major casualties, all the death eaters are either dead or in Azkaban, but we lost Moody, Kingsley, and Bill to the death eaters, and many other Order members are seriously injured and in St. Mungo’s.” Ginny said.
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cassiebee4
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this is amazing please post more soon! 
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Jul 28th, 2006 04:14 AM |
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Regulus A Black
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ok here's the deal, I'm combining the chapters The Serpants Lair and The Traitors demise, seeing as I found this the best place to actually ahve the traitor meet his demise, and I am also combining the chapters Dumbledores Weapon and the Stag Returns just for the fact I want to get this over with
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Jul 28th, 2006 05:09 AM |
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hplver4life
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that was good
or should i say a GGGGGGGGRRRRRRRRRRREEEEEAAAAAAAAAATTTTTTTTTTTTTT!!
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story lol
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Jul 28th, 2006 05:17 AM |
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Sirius_Rulez
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that was soooooooooooooooooooooooooooo goooooooooooood. plz post again soon.
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Jul 28th, 2006 06:05 AM |
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Regulus A Black
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you know what i don't get, why everybody likes my story when i'm killing off almost every character
RIP RAB
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Jul 28th, 2006 06:23 AM |
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Brit531
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It is a really good story that is why we might not care if you are killing off almost everyone. Post more soon
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Jul 28th, 2006 01:29 PM |
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cassiebee4
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the only person that i was actaully mad about you killing off was hagrid but other than that i mean i care for the other characters but their deaths fit so well into such a great story so i dont really care lol
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Jul 28th, 2006 10:46 PM |
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Regulus A Black
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just a warning Hagrid is probably going to deie in the real 7th book
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Jul 29th, 2006 01:17 AM |
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