alright the last chapter is finished, so I'm back to work on the other chapters but I figure maybe I'll give you a little bit of a Spoiler
Beware of the spoiler, and in fact, I have removed a few names and postions to keep it a little bit safer.
[SPOILER - highlight to read]: “Well Professor Binns is still teaching History of Magic since he’s a ghost. Neville is the herbology teacher, I am the transfiguration teacher. We have another new defense against the dark arts teacher whose name I don’t know yet. The charms teacher is Fleur. Care of magical creatures will be headed by Charlie, and of course dad is headmaster.” Ron replied. “Any thing else you’d like to know?”
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It's an Interesting story from what I've read, but it's a bit quick and less descriptive in some places, like you're eager to finish or something. For Example:
The only way I could see Harry saying that that quickly is if you had scenes of him thinking about it before. (Which you might have, I haven't read up to this part.)
Rowling, I'm sure, would have probably done something like:
See how much better that sounds? Not to be a backseat Critic, or to take over your Fiction, but if you were to add more description into it like that, you'd have more readers. I know I'd read more.
I had family come into town, so I'm way behind, here is chapter 21
Chapter 21
A Horrible End
After discovering that I, Lily Evans Potter was a descendant of Helga Hufflepuff, one of the founders of Hogwarts school of witchcraft and wizardry, I went to tell, my former headmaster what I had found out. After informing him I was a descendant of Hufflepuff, he informed me that James Potter, my husband, was a descendant of Godric Gryffindor, another one of the founders of Hogwarts School of witchcraft and wizardry. Meaning that my child with whom I am currently two months pregnant with would have the ability for extraordinary power, hopefully strong enough that nothing could ever happen to him. I would do anything to protect my family, they mean everything to me, and while I am alive I will never let anything happen to them.
Harry stopped reading, and thought about what he had read. He felt as though his mother knew something was going to happen to his family, that she knew he would survive Voldemort’s attack. Harry then thought about what she had written about him having the ability to wield extraordinary power, then he thought about all the things that had been happening lately, how his powers, which normally were slightly above the ability of those his age, were now destroying things with ease. He remembered how easy it had been to destroy the house of Black, with just a simple spell. Harry flipped a couple pages further in the diary, near the end and continued reading.
Dumbledore is worried about us and the Longbottom’s he won’t say exactly why; just that it is due to Voldemort. He is planning on sending us into hiding in a few months, just before our son turns one. We plan on making Sirius Black, my husbands and my best friend who is also Harry’s godfather, but as of recent he came to us requesting that we make Peter Pettigrew the secret keeper, saying that Voldemort would suspect that we had made him our secret keeper, and that Peter would be the last one to be suspected. We kindly agreed to Sirius’s request although I am a little suspicious, it just doesn’t sound like something Sirius would normally do. I trust my husband and Sirius with all my heart and I will trust in this decision.
We have made Peter our secret keeper now, and so far everything is alright, nothing has happened yet. Dumbledore tells me my eyes are special, he says they have more power behind them then I know, and that my son is lucky to have my eyes. He still won’t tell us exactly why he sent us into hiding, but I trust him, more then anyone else, he knows what is necessary for us, he even volunteered to be our secret keeper, but we choose Peter due to Sirius’s request. Somebody just broke down the door, it’s him. He found us; he has come to kill us. Not Harry, don’t kill Harry, please NO!
Harry closed the diary, that was the end, but he wondered how did it contain the attack of Voldemort on his family. What did it mean the power behind his mother’s eyes and that he was lucky to have inherited them. He had a lot to think about after reading his mother’s diary, and a lot to figure out as well. If only Dumbledore was still alive he could turn to him, and ask him for what he had meant by those phrases, he needed Dumbledore, but he had no idea how to get in touch with him, except for going to Hogwarts.
Harry grabbed Hermione, Ron, and Ginny, and they told Mad Eye they were taking off. Harry didn’t tell him where they were going, but just said it was urgent, Mad Eye excused them, and the four friends left. Harry told them where they were going and why on their way. He explained that he needed to talk to Dumbledore again.
“Harry, if death eaters took over the castle once, what’s to stop them from doing it again, especially with no teachers or students there?” Ron asked.
“Nothing, but that’s a chance we are going to have to take, I need to talk to him.” Harry said.
“But why can’t we figure it out?” Hermione asked.
“Because I would like to know as soon as possible and since Dumbledore stated it in the first place he can give us the answer right away.”
“Fine Harry, we will do this your way.” Hermione said.
“Don’t worry we will be fine, we have enough power between all of us, to stop anything that comes our way.” Harry said.
The group apparated to Hogsmeade, where they stopped at Fred and George’s store, it wasn’t quite finished yet, but they knew one of the twins would be there, and they wanted to get the twins help before going on. They arrived in the store and didn’t see anybody.
“Fred, George” Harry called. “it’s us we’d like to talk to you.”
“We need your help.” Ron said.
Fred then emerged from the back room, carrying a box whose contents he hid when he saw the four who had entered the store. “What are you guys doing here?” he asked.
“We’ve come to get your help.” Harry said, “We know the death eaters took over Hogwarts once and we are afraid they have done it again. We would like you to fight with us if they are there.”
Fred thought about this for a minute, he knew it would put him in danger. “Why do you need to go to the school?” Fred asked with curiosity.
“I need to find something out from Dumbledore, and his portrait is the only way I can do that.” Harry stated.
Fred went back to the back room, to talk with George about it. They thought long and hard about whether this was worth risking their lives to get Harry into the castle. A few minutes later they emerged.
“The death eaters have already taken the castle. We are going to need the Marauders map to get in.” George said.
“We will go with you.” Fred said, “but, we will only stand guard of the entrance to the headmaster’s office.”
“We have improved on our invisibility hats, and now they make your whole body disappear, we can use those to keep ourselves hidden. The spell will also last for an hour on it now.” George said, while pulling out a box of the hats. “I’m going to go and get some of our other things that may help us get into the castle, wait here while Fred explains the plan.”
Fred pulled out the Marauders map, tapped it and said, “I solemnly swear that I am up to no good.” The ink began to spread out over the parchment forming a map. “Alright here is how it’s going to work, George is going to give us each a hat, we will not put in on until we reach the castle. We are going to enter through the honeydukes entrance.” Fred said.
“How are we going to get into the entrance at honeydukes?” Hermione asked.
“That’s why George went to get more things we can use to make it through the castle. One thing I’m sure he will get is our stink bombs throw one of those inside and it will clear out, and in everybody’s panic, we will run in. Then after getting into castle we will put on our hats and head to McGonagall’s office. Since we know our way through the castle well enough we won’t use the map, until we reach the office.” Fred began, “Now we can already see there is somebody in McGonagall’s office, looks like Crabbe and Goyle’s father’s. Now when we get in we will be invisible so they won’t see us, Harry and Ron you go in and take them out. Then you guys can do what you want to do, while Hermione and Ginny stand guard outside McGonagall’s office, with the map of course, George and I will be standing guard of the secret passage.”
“What do we do if more death eaters come to McGonagall’s office?” Hermione asked.
“You’ll know long before they get to you, so knock three times on the door, then place your hats back on.” Fred said, “Harry, Ron, if you hear three knocks, that’s your signal to put your hats back on as well.”
George then returned from the back room carrying a box of dungbombs. “Did Fred explain the plan to you?” George asked.
“Yep.” Ron replied.
“Then let’s go.” George said.
Everybody left Fred and George’s shop and headed for honeydukes once there, Fred threw in one of their dungbombs. Soon everybody was leaving the shop as Fred, George, Ron, Hermione, Harry, and Ginny all entered. They headed down into the basement and into the secret entrance to Hogwarts. Once at the exit Fred handed the map to Ginny as everybody else put their hats on, once everybody had their hats on they stepped out of the passage and headed toward McGonagall’s office.
They ran as fast as they could to her office, slowly creeping by anybody they saw along their way. When they finally reached McGonagall’s office, they took a look at the map, there were still people in there. They barged in and nonverbally used “STUPEFY” it hit the two death eaters square in the chest. Once the death eaters had been stunned, Harry and Ron took off their hats and addressed Dumbledore.
“Professor Dumbledore” Harry said, “I need to ask you a few questions.”
“Well, go right ahead and ask.” Dumbledore said.
“The first question is, how did my mom write in her journal during Voldemort’s attack that killed her? It had things written right up until the moment she died.”
“Ahh, I remember your mom telling me, she had come up with a spell even better then a pensieve, although she would never tell me how to do it, and since I was satisfied with the pensieve I never attempted to figure it out, your mother must have figured out a way to put all her thoughts into a diary without writing in it.” Dumbledore said.
“The next questions is, why is it so lucky that I have my mothers eyes?” Harry asked.
“Well Harry, that question will take a longer explanation, if you have the time to hear it.” Dumbledore said.
“I have all the time we will need.” Harry replied. Just then they heard three knocks on the door. “Maybe I don’t” Harry laughed, and he and Ron placed their hats back on, just before two more death eaters burst through the door, both screaming “STUPEFY”. Harry and Ron jumped out of the way of the spells.
Harry was getting tired of dealing with the death eaters and just wanted them gone. He pointed his wand straight at the two death eaters that had just entered the room, who were standing over the death eaters Harry and Ron had already stunned. Harry screamed “REDUCTO” it hit the death eaters in the back, and the flew down hard enough to fly through the floor. Harry walked over to the hole he had created and saw that it had taken off most of the lower part of the castle.
Harry removed his hat, and began running off through the castle ready to stop any death eaters in his path. He wanted them out of the castle and didn’t care what it took to get them out. Ron seeing him do this took of his hat and ran after him. Ginny and Hermione followed after them. Ginny pulled out the map and told Harry there were ten more death eaters in the castle.
“I want you three to go back to Fred and George at the entrance and get out of here, it’s not safe.” Harry said.
“No Harry, we won’t leave you here alone.” Hermione said.
“GO BEFORE I CURSE YOU.” Harry yelled.
The three started off to Fred and George, they knew to take Harry seriously and with how powerful he was becoming they knew not to mess with him. They turned around a corner, and making sure the other two didn’t notice, Ron slipped his hat back on and ran back to where they had left Harry. Ginny and Hermione reached Fred and George and went back to the twins shop, still without noticing Ron wasn’t there.
Ron caught up with Harry who was now dueling with two death eaters. He watched as Harry just summoned some power and screamed “CRUCIO” it hit one of the death eaters square in the chest and sent him flying backwards into the wall and destroying it, with the wall collapsing in on him. The other death eater scared screamed “AVADA KEDAVRA” just as Ron, hit him with the stunning spell.
Harry still hadn’t noticed Ron, but knew that something had just saved his life. He shrugged it off and continued on he knew there were eight more death eaters he had to deal with. He ran into another two, realizing that they were traveling in two’s, the two in Dumbledore’s office, the two that entered it later, the two he had just fought and now these two, meaning he had two left counting the four from Dumbledore’s office as part of the ten.
He sent a very powerful stunning spell at one, sending him flying back into the other and then into the wall, knocking both of them out. Continuing on he ran into one more death eater, knowing the other one would be close by. He quickly sent a disarming charm at this one and he flew backwards along with his wand. “ACCIO wand” Harry shouted, and the death eaters wand flew to Harry which he quickly snapped. “Where is the last death eater in the castle?” Harry asked.
“Why would I tell you?” the death eater replied. Ron who was still under his cap saw something moving out of the corner of his eye behind Harry. Ron slowly moved, and got in the way of the attacker and Harry. Then Harry heard screaming, he turned around and sent a disarming charm in the direction of the screaming. It hit the death eater and his wand flew out of his hand. “REDUCTO” Harry shouted, which caused part of the castle to collapse on him. Harry looked down and noticed blood. He bent down, and felt a body, he took of the hat and found out it was Ron, he was still alive, but barely.
Well, if you've noticed from the other books, Harry is willing to do just about anything to protect his friends. So I am having him prepared to do anything to protect his friends.
Harry took Ron to St. Mungo’s hospital as fast as he could. He wondered why the others hadn’t noticed he was with them. Hogwarts was pretty much destroyed after all the fights, and now Ron was hurt. There would never be a Hogwarts anymore Harry thought, and I was thinking about becoming the Defense Against the Dark Arts teacher. Once he and Ron had arrived at St. Mungo’s, he sent an owl to Order headquarters to let them know what had happened to Ron.
When the Order arrived at St. Mungo’s a healer brought them to Ron’s room where Harry was watching over him. “How’s he doing?” Molly asked Harry as she entered the room.
“He’s sleeping right now, but they say he should be fine after a few days care. He took a Sectemsempra curse straight to his chest. I did what I could to keep him alive long enough to get here.” Harry replied. “He saved my life though, if he hadn’t disobeyed me, I would’ve been captured by the death eaters if they hadn’t just let me die.”
“Well, I am thankful you repaid your debt by saving his life.” Molly said, as she hugged Harry.
Classes were cancelled until Ron had time to recover seeing as how the students were usually at St. Mungo’s with Ron. “Harry,” Hermione said, “shouldn’t we be trying to figure out where the next horcrux is? I mean being at headquarters is kind of boring without classes or doing anything.”
“Not without Ron, we are all in this one together.” Harry replied.
“You seemed to want to do things on your own last time.” Ginny said.
“We always figured out where the horcruxes were together, and depending on how dangerous I thought it was determined if I wanted you guys to accompany me.” Harry replied, “I need you guys safe for when we go up against Voldemort.”
“Yeah, but we are useless without you Harry, if you die, Voldemort wins.” Hermione said.
“Fine you guys may accompany me everywhere else I go, I have no need to go anywhere alone anymore, everybody that was teaching me, just me anything is dead. Those few people that knew my parents and knew me are all dead.” Harry said.
“All but three.” Came a voice from the door way. Harry turned around to see who it was, it was Mad Eye Moody.
“Three?” Harry said, “Who? You are one I guess, but the Weasley’s weren’t in the order the first time so they didn’t know them.”
“Well, I never said they were on our side.” Mad Eye replied, “Voldemort of course knew them, and knows you, and your former potions master, Severus Snape.”
“Yeah, I guess they did, but I can never talk to them, they would kill me first chance they got.” Harry replied.
“Well Potter, you can always talk to me if you need to.” Mad Eye said as he limped out of the room.
Harry thought about what Mad Eye said really considering it but then something happened to distract him. There was a knock on the window from a snowy owl Harry didn’t recognize. Harry opened the window and the owl flew in and right past everybody it searched the house and then not finding the person it was looking for flew back to the room where Harry had let it in. Harry had closed the window so it couldn’t escape; they got the owl down and took the letter at a cost of a few pecks and scratches. The letter was addressed to somebody by the name of Flow.
“We probably shouldn’t look at that Harry.” Hermione said.
“The owl came here, I could tell it was looking for somebody here, what if somebody is working for Voldemort had has the codename so they could receive messages from death eaters while at headquarters.” Harry said, “I say we open it and see if we can figure out whom it was suppose to go to.”
“I’ll compromise with you Harry, if we can figure out who it was suppose to go to, I’ll let you open it.” Hermione said.
“How are we supposed to figure it out without any information?” Harry asked.
“But we do have information Harry? We have a codename, and the knowledge that the owl couldn’t find who it was looking for.” Hermione stated.
“Fine I’ll agree to that.” Harry said. Harry handed the letter over to Hermione. Hermione took the letter and placed it in her robes.
“Now let’s think who could it be?” Hermione said.
“It’s somebody in the Order who isn’t here.” Harry said. “and there codename is Flow.”
“Well, the only Order members not here are either dead or work for the ministry.” Ginny said.
“Well if they sent the letter here the person who it is meant for would still be alive.” Harry said.
“But owls don’t go to a certain location; they go to a certain person, so what if it is somebody dead.” Hermione said.
“I’d like it a lot better if it was someone from the ministry, there’s a lot less of them.” Harry said, “but if it is, it has to be somebody that died recently.”
“That leaves us the teachers, and Lupin.” Ginny said.
“And it’s been all over the papers and about the Hogwarts situation that news got around quickly so everybody would know they were dead so it couldn’t be one of them.” Harry said.
“Which leaves Lupin.” Ginny said.
“But there is no way it was him,” Harry said, “Lupin would never be a spy, so we are back to square one. I say we look at the members that aren’t here that are still alive.”
“That’s Kingsley Shacklebolt, Mr. Weasley, and a couple other ministry workers.” Hermione said.
“Well, it’s definitely not dad.” Ginny said.
“And it’s more then likely not Kingsley, and none of the other members ever come to headquarters.” Harry said.
“So let’s consider the codename, and let’s not rule out Kingsley or Lupin.” Hermione said.
“Flow” Harry thought, “What could it mean? Well flow means constantly moving, who is always on the move?”
“Kingsley and any of the other order members that work in the ministry. They are really busy these days so they are always moving.” Hermione said.
Harry thought hard about any other possibilities, he was sure he encountered something like this before. He just didn’t know when, and then a phrase appeared in his head, he hadn’t understood it until he looked at it in the mirror, the phrase on the mirror of erised during his first year. “Hermione give me the letter.” Harry demanded. Hermione handed him the letter, and Harry ran over to the mirror, he held the letter up to the mirror. Everybody looked at it “Wolf” Harry said, “who do we know that’s a wolf?”
“Just one, Lupin.” Hermione said.
“But Lupin can’t be a spy, so it must be something else, only one way to find out. Let’s open it.” Harry said. Harry opened the letter and he read:
Flow, I have news to give you about the secret you are helping the children with. I am guarding the last one, so they will have to go through me. The thing they are looking for is deep under the House of Gaunt through ten mazes below the house is the thing they seek. Help them figure it out in anyway you can as quickly as you can. I will place creatures on the correct path to the thing they are seeking. I will not hurt them, but I will have to fight for I am being watched. I have been doing as Dumbledore asked me too, and taking care of Draco, I have finally gotten through to him that he is choosing the wrong side, sometimes I think he was under his father’s imperious curse. Then at other times I think he is like that moron Peter Pettigrew and is just doing it out of fear now. I can control him well enough to stay away, but he will be with me while I protect him from the dark lord. The sooner you help the children figure this out the sooner we can defeat the dark lord and get back to our lives.
Your friend
The HBP
“SNAPE? Lupin was in contact with Snape this whole time and never told me, if he weren’t already dead I’d kill him.” Harry shouted.
“Harry, calm down now we see that Snape really is on our side.” Ginny said.
“But I saw him kill Dumbledore, I was there I watched as the spell hit him and he flew over the tower while I could do nothing.” Harry said.
“We also know where the horcrux is, and what the challenge is we have to go through to get to it. We also know that Snape has made it easier for us to get to the horcrux.” Hermione said.
“Fine we wait for Ron to get better and then we go, we’ll take a couple of Fred and George’s hat’s.” Harry said, “but I get Snape.”
Draco was pacing back and forth in the House of Gaunt. He noticed Snape was acting a little suspicious like he was preparing himself mentally for something coming up. Snape had been spending more and more time down with the horcrux then teaching Draco.
Snape returned upstairs and said to Draco, “You have one last thing you need to learn.”
“What is it Professor?”
“You need to learn to rely on your powers without a wand.” Snape said.
“Perform spells without a wand? How is that possible?” Draco said.
“I didn’t say spells, I said powers.” Snape spat at him. “Every wizard has powers where they can perform magic without their wand. Each wizards is unique to themselves, but learning to do it requires the same abilities. I for one am very gifted with defenses without a wand.”
“We will discover yours as you learn, but don’t forget you can already do simple spells without a wand, as all wizards can.” Snape said. “This will be the last part of your protection, being able to use your powers without your wand will catch others by surprise. After you learn this I will ask you to leave, I can’t protect you anymore or make your choices for you, but I believe you will know what to do.”
“If I must Professor I will leave. Teach me what I need to know.” Draco said.
“First off, to learn to do things without a wand, you must be in danger and without your wand. Hand me your wand.” Snape said. Draco did as he was told and handed over his wand. “Now you will need to concentrate hard reach deep inside you to where your magical power lies, and tap into it.”
“How do I do that?” Draco asked.
“It is very similar to sensing magical presences, but instead of feeling things around you, feel them inside you, as you search you’ll feel the magical presence get stronger and stronger until you have reached it’s core, then release part of the energy.” Snape said, “Now you need to learn to reach it before you can release it, and the fastest way to learn to release it is in order to protect yourself.”
“I’ll do my best.” Draco said. He closed his eyes began concentrating as hard as he could, he could sense Snape moving around the room, then he focused even more until he was sensing the power within himself. It was stronger then he thought it was, no wizard has ever released this much power he thought to himself. He finally reached the point where it was its strongest. He just stayed there for a while letting himself feel the magic.
“Well, Draco have you reached it yet?” Snape asked. Draco snapped out of his trance.
“Yes, and I allowed myself to feel the magic within me for a while.” Draco said.
“Good, now protect yourself.” Snape muttered something and a dragon appeared out of thin air. Draco concentrated as the dragon came closer to him, he could feel the magic deep inside him, he reached it and then something happened he opened his eyes, and the dragon was staring right at him but couldn’t see him. He began walking around, the dragon was still staring at that one spot.
“Professor, I did it.” Draco yelled. “Professor?” Draco walked over right in front of Snape he wasn’t moving either, nor could he hear him. Draco began to concentrate again, found the magic and then something happened again.
“How did you get in front of me, I just summoned that dragon in between us two seconds ago.” Snape said.
“I did what you told me to do, I tapped into my magical power and used it. I think it stopped time.” Draco said.
“Impossible, no wizard can stop time, we can travel through it, but we cannot stop it, if anything you were moving at an incredibly fast speed.” Snape said. “Good job Draco.”
“Professor, I had a lot of magic, more magic then I have ever sensed in anybody.” Draco said, “how is that possible.”
“You can only ever sense your full magical ability, everybody’s core is masked by the bits of magic it sends throughout your entire body, if anybody were ever able to release their entire core of magic they could destroy anything.” Snape said, “but at a cost, it would practically kill them. So in answer to the question I think you are asking, you are not the most powerful wizard in the world, but you do have the potential to be more powerful then your father was.”
“Thank you Professor.” Draco said.
“Now do as I asked you earlier Draco, you must leave now.” Snape said. Draco did as he was told, walked outside and apparated home.
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