Looks great to me! Just a few tweaks if I may.
Could I swap ‘Street Fighting’ for ‘Whirling Strike’?
Could I also swap ‘Balanced Guard’ for ‘Orthodox Guard’?
And…could I buy ‘Reflection’ for 12XP, leaving me 2 in the bank I believe?
And - Iffa's bio
Name Iffa N’Aworru
Age 25
Race Human
Home world Dehlitica
Height 5’7’’
Weight 85kg
Hair Black
Eyes Brown
Noticeable Features Beard, Turban-like head piece
Brief Description Iffa is of a calm, unassuming disposition. Preferring to stay in the background, observing and listening, he will not always be so forthcoming in matters of mass debating, preferring instead to contemplate situations stroking his beard. This does not mean, however, that he lacks opinion. He often listens to the force in order to make the correct choices.
Physically, Iffa is a fine, athletic specimen. His body is his temple and since a young age he has found it easy to partake in physical activities that others would struggle to complete. This is a racial trait of Dehlitican humans.
Age Event
Birth Mother dies in childbirth. Dehlitican custom states that when this happens the child is abandoned in the jungle. Only the will of the force enables Iffa to survive. He has only the haziest of memories from this time.
2 years Jedi Master Kit Fisto, on a diplomatic mission to Dehlitica, develops engine trouble and is forced to land in the jungle to make technical repairs. He notices a small child foraging for food and senses powerful force potential. He takes Iffa back to the jedi council to be trained as a jedi.
3-22 years Iffa trains as the padawan of Kit Fisto.
15 years During his time in training, Iffa develops a rival by the name of Khamir Sarin, who is jealous of Iffa’s physical prowess. He is another padawan who is banished at this time after trying to kill Iffa during a practise e light sabre duel. “Filled with anger is he,” states Master Yoda, “To the Dark Side will he go.” Sarin blames Iffa for his expulsion and promises revenge. The jedi council keep tabs on Sarins whereabouts.
22 years Iffa passes the trials and is declared jedi knight. The Jedi Council lose Sarin’s position, last seen on the planet of Muunilinst, home to the Intergalactic banking clan.
Dehlitica is hot, tropical planet, home to the dehlitican humans. This particular race of humans has a very distinctive culture based on the survival of the fittest. Arguments are solved through one of three trials: Combat, Endurance, or Strength. As a result of this, illness, especially in children, is seen as a weakness. Any children orphaned or born with illness are left to their own devices in the jungle. The vast majority of these poor youngsters die, but the very few who survive are welcomed back into Dehlitican culture as heroes, having passed the ultimate test of endurance. The Dehlitican culture therefore has produced through extreme natural selection a race of people who are far stronger, quicker and athletic than the average human. Many Dehliticans leave their planet to work as mercenaries, bounty hunters or miners, where their physical attributes are highly sought after.
As he was one of these children who were abandoned, Iffa was never subjected to the Dehlitican culture. He has however inherited the physical racial tendencies of Dehlitican humans.
Gender: Unspecified Location: With Cinderella and the 9 Dwarves
Looks good at first glance, no contradictions I can see. You missed writing down your lightsabre skill, which is 3 I believe. Looking forward to playing with you.
Gender: Unspecified Location: The Gingerbread cottage!
Hey who you calling a waitch? Oh yeah me - that right! Was that an accurate calculation Ush or a temporary rough guess? I'll have to go back to reading posts now to work out what on earth to do with them... grumble, grumble grumble...
You grumble yet you persevere, so I suspect the good bits here outweigh the bad...
I am going on roughly 10 xp per story, and I think you more or less completed two. Simplest to round off like that. If you are nice I'll make it 21, as that divides better for force powers.
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Jan 25th, 2011 08:08 PM
this amuses me greatly.
