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DarkSwordsLady
Huggable so hug me
 Gender: Female
Location: UK
hidden in a corner
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 Ok or not????
Anyone think this is ok or not. I don't know, I just wrote it
Upon the fallen dream I cry.
Until that time I learn to fly.
I’ll fight with all the strength I know.
No sword, no string, no knife or bow.
Alone I stand, forever and more.
Always alone, no more to sore.
In the end, I guess I’ll see.
The one who I am meant to be.
But first I must fine in me.
The beast lost with in a dream.
That dream no more I’ll fight to see.
For if it’s lost, I’ll let it be.
Unlike those who live with me.
Those who no longer wish to see.
The truth that lies lost in me.
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drunk_nazgul
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Aw! That was good! Very tragic...
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May 3rd, 2004 09:46 PM |
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Jack Diavolo
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brilliant! absolutely brilliant! but sad very sad but i think your a good poet i have a few freinds that write poetry i think ill get them to post here
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May 4th, 2004 10:47 PM |
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Darth Revan
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 Keep writing, keep posting your work here! It could use a little improvement but I like your style. One thing to keep in mind is that poetry doesn't have to rhyme... There're just two lines that don't really make sense, I think because you were trying to come up with a good rhyme:
"Alone I stand, forever and more.
Always alone, no more to sore."
Other than that, I liked it a lot. Keep up the good work. 
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having nothing but a hyphen under my name makes me look so xhardxcorex. like a felon.
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drunk_nazgul
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Yeah, it was so awesome!
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