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I've had a few good stories and writings in my head, So I'll just write a little poem for you. (and some Short stories later on). So, Enjoy. This one is called 'I love her for it'. It's got a strange structure, but I've been thinking about it for a number of days now. I think we've all dealt with someone like this before

'I Love Her for it'

She caught my eye
Her wicked figure
She's a Desirable piece
I talk to her and get lost with her
She says her name is Anna
We part physically, but she doesn't part my mind

She calls me that night and we get personal
We get more serious and I enjoy it
We get together and I want to get close enough to hear her breathing
She lets me get close
When she does a shot of thunder goes through my veins
We Part once again and nothing registers until I see her again

She invites me and I desire her more than ever now
A sure shot of satisfaction that she is mine and mine only is present
She's a wicked devil and her words crack like a whip
She does everything and I praise her
She appears delicate but something is amiss
We part again, Her and I

I leave all my friends for her
They have been friends since the beginning, but who needs them now
that I have her

I don't seem myself anymore
I yell at my parents
I don't answer the phone unless I'm sure it's her
My Best friend warns me of her and calls her names
Names that I'm not proud to hear
I punch him in the face for speaking like that
"You've Changed"
He's a Liar
He's Jealous
She's mine and no one else's

She's everything I want and I can't focus on anything else
This Desirable dame

2 Weeks later and things aren't like they were before
I call her, she doesn't call me
She yells at me and blames me for everything
She flirts with other men
She threatens to hurt herself if I talk to her
But, I haven't done anything wrong
I lean to kiss her and she pulls away and ignores my presence

I can't take this torment anymore
I yell at her and say things that I regret
We aren't what we were
We were lovers

I stay at my house and I don't go to class
I drink until I pass out
I wake up with a roaring headache and I try to drink until it fades
My friend knows the news and he calls
I don't answer

Two days later my elementary girlfriend comes to visit
Sweet April
She tries to comfort me and I turn
She hugs me and a beam of light hits me in the face when she looks into my eyes
Why the kindness? I left you
She puts her finger to my lips and tells me it's okay
I hug her and forget about Anna

April and I get back together and nothing is better
I look back at Anna and I laugh at my stupidity
Anna calls me to apologize but I hang up
Never in my life have I felt so great
April and I share everything in common and it's everything
She calls me right when I want her to
We talk and laugh and share old memories
She's the one that was meant to be

Anna was a Desirable Dame and I liked her for it
April is a sweet Angel and I Love her for it.

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You write poems too.

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Originally posted by Dusty
I've had a few good stories and writings in my head, So I'll just write a little poem for you. (and some Short stories later on). So, Enjoy. This one is called 'I love her for it'. It's got a strange structure, but I've been thinking about it for a number of days now. I think we've all dealt with someone like this before...

[long ass poem goes here]


Yeah, sounds familiar.


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Yeah, sounds familiar.


Gotta fight through that stuff!

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GREEN GUY


I looked at him
He looked at me

He kicked me on the shin
I kicked him on the knee

He pulled out he sword
I pulled out my gun

We're gonna have ourselves a war
We're gonna have ourselves some fun

We throw a few fists
Blood comes from my face

He throws his sword at me
I dodge it and tie my shoe lace

I shot his armour back
It reflected and went away

Then I took out my weapon
A giant plasma Ray

He thought of a way to escape
He flipped and did a little hurtle

Damn you leonardo
You f*ckin' ninja turtle

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Nice stuff happy


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Always, and Never right.

Was I meant to live alone in this state?
Could I go on believing my life isn’t too late?

Do I sink down and fall on my Knees?
Should I shout it out or whisper it beyond the trees?

Maybe I’m a man who need not dare.
And go on believing and pretending she’s not there.

I cant LIE to myself! I can’t choose or debate!
She’ll disappear and I’ll know then, it’s just too late.

I’m talking to myself now. Why is my life a long blunder?
Is she out there, looking for me, do I dare even to wonder?

Maybe one day, just one day. She’ll find me.
That same day, I’ll put all the torment and loneliness behind me.

And as we lay down and stare up at the black night’s starlight...
I’ll know that my torment and inner thoughts were always and never right.

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Originally posted by Dusty
GREEN GUY


I looked at him
He looked at me

He kicked me on the shin
I kicked him on the knee

He pulled out he sword
I pulled out my gun

We're gonna have ourselves a war
We're gonna have ourselves some fun

We throw a few fists
Blood comes from my face

He throws his sword at me
I dodge it and tie my shoe lace

I shot his armour back
It reflected and went away

Then I took out my weapon
A giant plasma Ray

He thought of a way to escape
He flipped and did a little hurtle

Damn you leonardo
You f*ckin' ninja turtle


"I dodge it and tie my shoe lace" Oooooooooooooooh man, that is soooo funny laughing out loud


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Originally posted by Dusty
Always, and Never right.

Was I meant to live alone in this state?
Could I go on believing my life isn’t too late?

Do I sink down and fall on my Knees?
Should I shout it out or whisper it beyond the trees?

Maybe I’m a man who need not dare.
And go on believing and pretending she’s not there.

I cant LIE to myself! I can’t choose or debate!
She’ll disappear and I’ll know then, it’s just too late.

I’m talking to myself now. Why is my life a long blunder?
Is she out there, looking for me, do I dare even to wonder?

Maybe one day, just one day. She’ll find me.
That same day, I’ll put all the torment and loneliness behind me.

And as we lay down and stare up at the black night’s starlight...
I’ll know that my torment and inner thoughts were always and never right.


touching little poem there. Its cute, and made me think smile


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Old Post Jul 27th, 2006 02:00 PM
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Originally posted by Dusty
I've had a few good stories and writings in my head, So I'll just write a little poem for you. (and some Short stories later on). So, Enjoy. This one is called 'I love her for it'. It's got a strange structure, but I've been thinking about it for a number of days now. I think we've all dealt with someone like this before

'I Love Her for it'

She caught my eye
Her wicked figure
She's a Desirable piece
I talk to her and get lost with her
She says her name is Anna
We part physically, but she doesn't part my mind

She calls me that night and we get personal
We get more serious and I enjoy it
We get together and I want to get close enough to hear her breathing
She lets me get close
When she does a shot of thunder goes through my veins
We Part once again and nothing registers until I see her again

She invites me and I desire her more than ever now
A sure shot of satisfaction that she is mine and mine only is present
She's a wicked devil and her words crack like a whip
She does everything and I praise her
She appears delicate but something is amiss
We part again, Her and I

I leave all my friends for her
They have been friends since the beginning, but who needs them now
that I have her

I don't seem myself anymore
I yell at my parents
I don't answer the phone unless I'm sure it's her
My Best friend warns me of her and calls her names
Names that I'm not proud to hear
I punch him in the face for speaking like that
"You've Changed"
He's a Liar
He's Jealous
She's mine and no one else's

She's everything I want and I can't focus on anything else
This Desirable dame

2 Weeks later and things aren't like they were before
I call her, she doesn't call me
She yells at me and blames me for everything
She flirts with other men
She threatens to hurt herself if I talk to her
But, I haven't done anything wrong
I lean to kiss her and she pulls away and ignores my presence

I can't take this torment anymore
I yell at her and say things that I regret
We aren't what we were
We were lovers

I stay at my house and I don't go to class
I drink until I pass out
I wake up with a roaring headache and I try to drink until it fades
My friend knows the news and he calls
I don't answer

Two days later my elementary girlfriend comes to visit
Sweet April
She tries to comfort me and I turn
She hugs me and a beam of light hits me in the face when she looks into my eyes
Why the kindness? I left you
She puts her finger to my lips and tells me it's okay
I hug her and forget about Anna

April and I get back together and nothing is better
I look back at Anna and I laugh at my stupidity
Anna calls me to apologize but I hang up
Never in my life have I felt so great
April and I share everything in common and it's everything
She calls me right when I want her to
We talk and laugh and share old memories
She's the one that was meant to be

Anna was a Desirable Dame and I liked her for it
April is a sweet Angel and I Love her for it.


Dusty, that's bloody fantastic! I really, really like it... and you're right, I think everyone can relate to the concept. Also, I think it could be used well as song lyrics, it has that kind of structure and flow thumb up


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Thanks guys. big grin

Compliments are always welcome in this house.

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As they are anywhere wink

I may just dig up my poetry thread and give it a little bump, I haven't had half the appreciation I deserve


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I'm here at the concrete lot
Rain falls, and the sun dries it away
Rain repeats itself
Rain repeats itself like life
Rain repeats itself like love

She says she'd meet me here
Love is what we had
Love is what makes thoughts
Love is what makes life contain worth

Her beauty appears and her blonde hair shines like gold thread
She makes me feel love
She makes life feel like love
She makes love feel like life

Her words bring tears to my eyes
Life has a meaning
Life looks like her golden hair
Life looks like love.

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It's lovely dustin, very lovely.

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laughing

Old Post Aug 9th, 2006 05:14 AM
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Dusty, do you write song lyrics at all?


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Nope. But, i'm starting up a band here soon. So hopefully I can. big grin

New poem coming soon.

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The Ronin

My Sword is my only friend
Mistake it not, for an object
For you may meet your life's end
A blade of samurai steel is cold
But so are the intension's of a samurai built for business
If forever truth be told
A Yojimbo, or a mercenary, it matters not
No words can describe my patience and loyalty
along with the skill I've shown in the battles I've fought
A Ronin has no definite lord
Only works for food when his gut begins to roar
And that is the way of the samurai sword

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Nope. But, i'm starting up a band here soon. So hopefully I can. big grin

New poem coming soon.


Whaddaya mean, hopefully you can?? These submissions are song lyric worthy already wink


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