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bordom
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Trapped
Okay well ummm... my friend told me to post my poem on here sooo..... here it is... it's not really that good but o well....
Trapped
Why must you look at me?
Must your eyes stare at the body that encloses my internal and emotional insecurities?
Am I the one who you feel needs this punishment after I abandon my life just for your perfect 30" waist and cleavedged breasts to judge.
I gave up everything I had..... my love from my family which was taken for granted, my long lasting health, and most of all my self esteem.
All this was captured from me, all for you.
Do you not see my body deterriating infront of my deceiving eyes?
Can you not fell my pain and frustration?
What have you done to me and why?
You can't see this can you? You're only a mirage, a figment of all teenagers' minds.
Do you beleive I deserve this... this... this horror?
The horror th not know if I'm going to make it to my next birthday.
Must I relive a nightmare most would only need to open their eyes in order for you to disappear.
Why am I the one to be tortured of your presence?
But I am the only one aren't I?
I'm your main target, a target that can't save itself from your claws of illusion.
I'm trapped.
Ya so there it is... tell me what you think and please be honest
Last edited by bordom on Apr 12th, 2005 at 08:02 PM
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RockandLove
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WOW. That was really good. I wrote a poem but it was about a dog. Urs sounded professional.
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Apr 12th, 2005 08:10 PM |
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bordom
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HA! it's not professional! It's totally ME lol Thanks Kelly 
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Apr 12th, 2005 08:11 PM |
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RockandLove
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well I consider it professional. it's better then mine.
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Apr 12th, 2005 08:14 PM |
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bordom
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Well thank you! And I bet you could write WONDERS!
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Apr 12th, 2005 08:16 PM |
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Elessea
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i like it  keep writing!
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Apr 12th, 2005 08:53 PM |
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bordom
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Thanks  I'll try... but I gotta be in the mood ya know lol 
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Apr 12th, 2005 08:57 PM |
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Trickster
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I like it too.
But I getcha - gotta be in the mood to write, or it feels crap.
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Death only gives another set of choices.
He who dies with the most toys. Still dies.
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Apr 12th, 2005 09:21 PM |
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bordom
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*nod*
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Apr 12th, 2005 09:31 PM |
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Coldfire
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Good one bordom!! Hopefully you can do some more for us!!
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Apr 13th, 2005 02:57 AM |
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bordom
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Thanks... I'll try.....
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Apr 13th, 2005 03:12 PM |
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peterKSL
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HOLY CRAP... This is awesome... damn you made me feel guilty...  lol just joking...
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Apr 13th, 2005 06:50 PM |
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bordom
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Wow.. thanks... never thought anyone would like it...
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Apr 13th, 2005 10:49 PM |
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Dwarfdude
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Very nice, very deep. Not quite sure who the audience is, though I think I have a general idea. Good tone, good writing.
But I speak in analyzation.
In short, very nice.
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Apr 14th, 2005 01:59 AM |
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bordom
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Well thank you very much
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Apr 14th, 2005 04:33 AM |
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Coldfire
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You'll have to post the ones we're doing for English, eh? I'm gonna put mine up when they're done
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Apr 16th, 2005 10:25 PM |
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Tassie
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That's really good, bordom.  I want more!
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Apr 17th, 2005 12:01 AM |
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bordom
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Thanks Tassie!
NO WAY AM I PUTTIN UP THE ENGLISH ONES!!!!
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Apr 17th, 2005 12:19 AM |
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Tassie
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Pleeeease 
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Apr 17th, 2005 01:35 AM |
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bordom
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they will be REALLY bad, pluse I haven't done them yet lol
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