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The Infekted
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Helping hand
I know I suck at poems but I've strived to try my best on this one. Give me your feedback!
Helping Hand
I am the hand
I came to replenish your land
I notice you are weak and meek
And I am the help you seek
Your willing to go on your own
You try to make do with the path you have sewn
But you don't understand
I am the angel sent to give you another chance
Enjoy the fancy life I blessed you with
This just might be the only life you'll get
Don't forget I did you a favor
Im not only a angel
But I am your one and only savior. JESUS CHRIST.
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Apr 1st, 2007 02:52 AM |
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The Infekted
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Has anyone read this poem yet? I want your honest feedback!!
THANK YOU. 
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Apr 2nd, 2007 06:02 AM |
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danielle marie.
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My only problem with it is the rhythem is a little off. I love the meaning behind the words and the words themself, but yeah.
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Apr 2nd, 2007 08:43 PM |
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King of Blades
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The poem is good. [borat]Very Nice[/borat]  
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