aspiring writers!!

Started by Treehuggerjanie2 pages

I write a lot of poems on how i feel. Some are good, others are kind of crazy! Do you wannt a sample of one of my crazy ones? I was feeling very miserable at the time!

Bye Bye

Life has taught me many things, some so hurtful they still sting.
Friends are friends so you think.
Don't count your chickens, or it will all go down the sink.
In the real world, it doesn't pay to be the listening ear.
No one's interested when it comes for their time to hear.
Give yourself and you will find happiness... No it's not true.
Instead, put you and your family first; never will you be blue.
For all those who believed they knew me, I say, "Soon you will see,
I'm tired of caring so deeply about you all,
nothing received in return, except for feeling small."
This is not my pity trip. Don't you dare think that cause
I've got a strong upper lip, I'm going to be OK.
These thoughts I've written have enlightened me so.
I have one last thing to say,
"Bye bye, now I must go.”

I gave this poem to a website and they actually put it on! How cool is that! 😱

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i wrote this.......

Im a star

im live very far

i shine at night

im very bright

you cant take youre eyes out my sight

cuz im a star

thats pretty good! Mine is kinda weird but i had just been let down by somebody and felt really bad so i came up with that!

i like youres. it reminds me of who else me

Originally posted by total metalhead
hey thats pretty good! i used to write a bit but i dont think i had the patience to be a professional.

😄😄 thank you!!😮 ive got whole lots more i wanna send them to a magazine but i'm scared they're either too disturbing or not gd....
so i usually go ard asking ppl's opinions 1st😉 ive got 2 stories published already😄😄

no actually that story isn't very long i try to make them short,sweet n thought-provoking if possible...do you want me to post it?i'm not ready with it now but maybe tmr tho....but i still think it's too disturbing 😑 dunno where the hell that story came frm,which confines of my mind i mean...

cool. i would love to do that i just dont know where to ask ppl

cool poems!!i cld never write a poem for nuts😆too many adjectives running thru my head😉

Mine are weird cos im a weird person-im a bit of a goth so whaddya expect? Probably same as a lot of people which is weird stuff.

im not goth im just a weird person. i have split personality. well i think i do. im confuse 😕 😑

😆 well you want wierd huh...how long'll you two be on?i'll try get my 'disturbing' story up....

k fine i;m not gonna post that particular story up tonite...dun wanna rush things...ive another one tho😉

ive got to go now to phone my bf. Back tonight though!

ok i'm gonna throw in a title evry1 try think of a plot k?

title :cats.

cats. i have a story for that.

what is it then?

🙂

you go first i need to look for it

😆 i tnterpreted it in an unusual way...hold on i'm comin with the whole thing...

here it is now(i don't quite like my diction in the last para tho...cld be a li'l more descriptive...)

She crouched low, holding onto the wall for support, and tried her best to blend in with the night’s shadows. Her shirt was drenched with perspiration, and her clothes were slashed open in numerous places. Angry red gashes could be seen in these openings, and they were still fresh. The bite on the arm throbbed with pain. She tried to breathe as softly as she could, but she was pretty sure they could sniff her out with their acute sense of smell anyway.

They – the cats. She had been stuck with them in that nuclear plant for three whole, agonising days. The radiation from the plant had done something to them over the years – they had mutated, somehow. These cats were not like the adorable ones in her neighbourhood. They were vicious, with yellow eyes and razor sharp teeth. Most of their fur had dropped off then, making the girl shudder with repulsion whenever she saw them.

She knew that the cats would come for her sooner or later. There was an exit in the next room, leading out if the plant, out of the cats’ sanctuary. For some reason, they could not get out of the plant and stay alive – she figured it must have had something to do with the air.

She crawled her way to the door leading to that room, taking cover behind a desk. Then, she saw them. They prowled stealthily out from the shadows, like a pack of lionesses closing in on their prey. Their yellow eyes where gleaming menacingly, and their lips were pulled back in sneers, revealing their jagged teeth. She was trapped.

Her first instinct was to run away from the door. The sane, calm part of her told her that it would be of no use, that was what the cats where banking on. For that way, she would be back to square one – and the cats would have won once again. She was no match to these cats in terms of weapons – they had their claws and teeth, she, nothing. These cats had to be outwitted, they had to be taken by surprise. There was only one thing to do. She grit her teeth with grim determination and stood up slowly, deliberately, facing the door.

The cats stood at attention, muscles tense, backs arched, ready to drive her away from the door. Then, simultaneously, they charged. And the girl sprinted –right towards the cats.

The element of surprise was on her side –the cats staggered back, hesitating for just a few moments, giving her the opening she so desperately needed. She bolted for the door.

Some cats regained their senses and attacked her, tearing at every inch of the skin on her legs, mauling her ferociously. She kept going. The door to freedom was but a few meters away. She put on a final spurt of speed, shaking a cat off her arm. And with that final surge of energy, she flew all the way towards the door – and through it.

She was free!!! Exhilaration took over terror and determination, and she slumped heavily onto the floor with exhaustion. The cats were yowling and shrieking with indignation at their prey’s escape. The looked absolutely helpless from the other side if the door. They could not harm her in anyway anymore. She was free!!!!!