My Poetry
Tell me if you like it, I write about 2 a week
Futility
I try to tell you
but you don’t listen
you don’t understand
what is going on
you never give up
even when you’re wrong
making no sense
raising your voice
I simply want to
scream. I want it to
stop, but you keep
going, never stopping
you say things
that with never be true
I have no clue what I
can do to make
the whole thing stop
You never let go
Originally posted by Darth RevanYeah, I know, I write short lines. But my Creative Writing teacher likes it, and it works for me. I guess it's just my style. Once (when doing a critique on Lonely Refuge), she said that I "said so much with so little." 😛
You're pretty good SothIf I had to make a constructive criticism, I'd say the lines are too short... But that's ok if it's just you're style... It's just that I'm not used to it.
Originally posted by Be@stYeah.......as most of you might know, I'm really a peppy, very happy guy. I'm always that way, in fact. You'd be hard-prssed to find me at a time when I'm not in a good mood. I suppose that means I had issues in my childhood, but whatever.
I wish I had your teacher; I am her favourite student because of my writing but she wants me to write happy things all the time 🙁 it sux
Anyway, despite my always-happy mood, my poems are so serious. And I know I could write hilarious poems if I wanted to. But when I right, it's like all of the pain, or hatred, or whatever unhappy things I'm feeling flows from my hand onto the paper. It's a great experience.
Here's a haiku I wrote a few months ago:
The raven soars overhead
crystal clear azure sky
frames shadowy wings