[]Huon, Im not trying to run you down but give you advice. An example is.
Huon:*finishes off the attacking force and closes the door then goes through a emergency hatch with is actually a small passage that leads outside and then he keeps running out into the forest until he comes to a cave and goes on his comm*
That is something that we all could have done in more than twenty posts, but you did it in one sentence. Your moving way too fast and I am running out of ways to try and keep us all together so we all have fun. A better way to write the first few words in one post would be:
Huon placed a clip into his pistol and risked a glance around the corner. He spotted four grunts and an Elite that looked as though it was dead, very much like a zombie. Unloading the entire clip he sent three of the grunts backwards into bloody heaps on the ground. Ducking back through the door he pressed a fresh clip into the pistol, by now the Elite and last remaining grunt were moving toward him. He again looked around the corner and dispatched the last grunt, scrambling back into the room as the elite slammed a fist into the wall before entering in after him. Huon backpedalled to keep the elite at bay while he unloaded the entire clip into its chest before it fell lifeless. He switched on his comm, "Hello? This is Huon, the pilot. I've found some more flood down here, I was wondering if I could get some backup, or should I try to regroup with the rest of you?"
Writing like that makes more sense and gives more detail making a post easier to follow. While that takes up just as much space, i find it more enjoyable to read and assume others do as well, also it keeps in tandem with the others so we are all in the same time, plus with that response it leaves an opening for another player to respond and in turn give you an opening to continue the story. I'm not saying change right away but would appreciate if you made an effort. If you don't agree please tell me, if you do you can voice an opinion but I don't want to see other people verbally bash Huon after this post, it is not fair and will make him feel even worse than he does after reading my two posts. I am just trying to give advice here, not offend other people.[]
[]And hey, schools starting soon! 😱 NOOO!! Writing takes practice.[]