ok, well you ended your bit by saying that louis was dreaming of cassie n lestat....soooo....i was wondering, just briefly, if u cud give me an idea of what shud happen next? shud he wake and explore? or wake and go about the night and go bak to the tavern and meets dorian?(my idea how he mentions cassie and sparks louiss interest)... or find cassie?.....
that's not it. he was thinking of them as he drifted off to sleep. not what i would call dreaming, exactly.
i've already mentioned a long time ago, that in the next section of our story, a short bit of time has passed like say a week or nearly. he has wandered and explored the town some. but not entirely. he'll mention that a bit. the wandering that is. after time passes, he wakes and goes exploring. for and where i can't remember anymore. but anyways, sometime later during his wanderings, he'll meet dorian somewhere. the convo, we'll have to plan that one out. no, he really shouldn't flat out go looking for cassie. just would seem too out of place and random. not much information in the story to back that up, his desire to find her that is. also, he hasn't really met her and also not enough has happened in the story yet.
let's discuss a little more of what exactly we want him to do as he wanders and leads up to meeting dorian. i know, the tavern meeting is not the ideal place. besides, i imagined dorian to be not much of a drinker. a rough idea i had before was like some courthouse, city hall, or something like that. i'm not quite sure. maybe a cafe or restaurant? no, that sounds too odd. hmmm...got any ideas for locations of where they could meet? keeping it in the town and all. not getting to the residential areas yet, that is.
crap, i have to be quick....ummm...crap! cant think....ideas ideas...cafe maybe? that sounds ok.....or maybe a restaurant is better.....maybe he (dorian) is trying to chat up some woman, who is at the bar? altho hes not a drinker, but since shes there....he is too....um, and louis cud come up for a drink....and, um....u no..dorian wud begin talkin to him.....etc
my next bit: (but, please do take some time to read the note i wrote to you at the end of this, cuz its important)
When I next opened my eyes, it was night again, and I noticed, after much time had passed, that I was staring up at the frame of the four poster bed I lay in, wondering if I should even bother to draw back the curtains to greet the marvellous night. For what was there worth waking to? Another lonely walk along the roads of New Orleans? Another drink to consume within a crowded tavern? I closed my eyes, breathing slowly and heavily as I listened to the sounds of the night. Yet as I did so, my mind began to drift away, focusing deeply on the new thoughts that arose. How can you pick up the threads of a life that no longer existed? A life that seemed so distant, that you had forgotten any knowledge of its normality. I had for so long dreamed of returning to my beloved New Orleans, yet so much had changed, and I felt as though I was a stranger in a new world, trying to find my place.
I sat up in bed, my hands sweating slightly as I pulled off my covers, and slowly reached for the velvet curtain surrounding me. I drew back the curtain, swinging my legs over the side of the bed, yet I paused, my eyes open wide, cutting through the abundant darkness. My head began to spin dangerously. I placed a hand on my forehead, realizing that I had not fed for quite some time, and I needed blood desperately. I dismissed any negative thoughts that lingered in my mind, instead concentrating on my hunger pains. As I showered and dressed, my hunger grew stronger, an aching feeling that tugged at my body, and a burning desire that ran through my heart, urging me to strike down the next person who came into my view. I eagerly seized the keys from a small wooden table beside the door, pulling on my jacket as I left the room, closing the door soundlessly and locking it.
My eyes quickly scanned over a mass of approaching people, yet through my swift surveillance, I caught sight of a young woman, who gradually began to drift away from the group. As I followed the woman, I kept my footsteps silent, as I did not want to rouse her suspicion. The woman quickened her pace, her figure somewhat far in view, yet still through the darkness, I could see her short brown hair, blowing gently in the breeze. The woman then turned a corner, and as I came to this corner, I realized she had so conveniently lead me down an alleyway. My pace quickened, as I knew my kill would be safe and unheard. I was now only a few inches behind the woman, yet I continued my steps, admiring the smooth, ivory skin of her neck, and the tender veins that tensed when I placed my hand on her shoulder. I turned her to me, wildly biting into her neck, her gentle gasp echoing through my ears. My eyes began to close slowly, my body overwhelmed with ecstasy, my mind recalling the familiar taste of warm blood that rushed through me. I pulled the woman tighter to me, draining her of more of her sweet blood, fulfilling my hearts’ desire.
I opened my eyes, and carefully removed my teeth from the woman’s neck, just as I felt her go limp in my arms. I released my grip from the woman, letting her fall, yet I did not move. I stood still, finding myself staring at her form, as she lay lifeless on the solid ground. I bent down before the woman, staring intensely into her chocolate brown eyes, which made no movement, just gazed up at me, cold and dead. Eventually, I grew aware that my hand was running down the young woman’s face, gently closing her eyelids. I blinked cautiously, watching her porcelain face as though I had expected her eyes to open at that very moment. I got up discreetly, turning away to face the soothing night air, the taste of the woman’s blood still lingering on my lips.
When I returned to my room, I began to light many of the lamps that were placed around the room, giving me a clear view of my surroundings. I wandered over to my bed, dropping down onto it, my mind deep with pain, and my eyes aimlessly roaming over the candle lit room. I shook my head vigorously, and got up sluggishly, walking to the washing station. My feet felt heavy as I stood before the washing bowl, lifting up the water jug to fill the bowl with fresh, cool water. I soaked a cloth in the water, then lifted it up, wringing out most of the water. I looked up, finding my reflection in a mirror, and pressed the cloth to my face, wiping away any traces of blood around my mouth. I stared firmly into the mirror, until everything around me fell dark, and I no longer could hear the sounds that echoed around the room. Breathing strongly, I turned away from the mirror, choosing to leave my room once again, and wander the streets, seeking a temporary distraction for the thoughts in my mind.
Boppy: I got slightly carried away😄heh…I was going to continue this bit, and write about the meeting of Dorian and Louis, yet I wasn’t sure what to write, because I didn’t know if you had agreed to my ideas that I posted the other day. So sorry I had to sign off🙁 but my parents were getting pissed off, so I had to sign off right away, and that left me no time to see if you liked my suggestion for the meeting of Dorian. You had some good ideas🙂, I did like the one about Louis meeting dorian in the restaurant….because it is somewhere different…I just wasn’t sure bout where to go after that,(and you did say you didn’t consider dorian to be a drinker) and I could not wait to hear ur suggestions, cuz of my parents bullsh!t computer rules😖…..right now, I’m typing in word, cuz I aint allowed on the internet today😖….i don’t know what ideas you have posted, but tomorrow,(which will now be today..heh) I will check these ideas, and then I will use them to continue on with my bit, which will be about the ‘meeting’, which I’m really looking forward to writing, cuz you did create dorians description, so I think it only fair that I can create the meeting, (with suggestions from you of course🙂) which you did agree to a while back when you wrote Dorians description.
i enjoyed your new story bit very much, but it failed to mention of how much time has passed by from the first sequence/section to this new one, the second one. i guess we don't really have to specify how much time has went by. maybe only a day or so. less than week. now that i think about it, a week is way too long. maybe he just slept for a long time or we just skip two days in time in the story? i dunno. you don't have to change that. probably not necessary. no, i guess not. what do you think? as for the first meeting of dorian and louis, we need to discuss that over more before you get to that. savvy?
Originally posted by BOPRecruit 16
i enjoyed your new story bit very much, but it failed to mention of how much time has passed by from the first sequence/section to this new one, the second one. i guess we don't really have to specify how much time has went by. maybe only a day or so. less than week. now that i think about it, a week is way too long. maybe he just slept for a long time or we just skip two days in time in the story? i dunno. you don't have to change that. probably not necessary. no, i guess not. what do you think? as for the first meeting of dorian and louis, we need to discuss that over more before you get to that. savvy?
thanks🙂 taht means alot....
😱 crap! i know...so sorry...i realized after i posted my bit....*shakes fist*...
✅ he could have slept for 2 nights or so....✅...
no, why cause more bother when nothings wrong🙂..we should leave it..
✅ understood......i did think tat the convo shud be planned out more✅...soooo shud we start discussingf their convo?....
besides, since i'm going to put a "page break" between sections, that shows that time has passed anyways. is that obvious enough, do you think? i hope it is.
also, forgive me for not mentioning this sooner, i'm posting our story at this other forum, also, called Blood Ties Forums. sorry that i didn't ask you before i posted that, either. it's a cool forum really. meant to ask you sooner if you would like to join. it's a place to talk underworld, queen of the damned, and interview with the vampire. the forum is still fairly new, so there isn't a whole lot there yet. but it would be cool if you did join. let me know if you are interested and would like a link to it.
as for your bit, i will allow you to lead it up right around to the place where he meets dorian. not exactly when he's in there or when he sees and meets dorian. that will have to be discussed more. as for what they talk about and how they meet exactly in there, i have no frickin' clue right now. got any suggestions? well, resturant meeting sounds find. i also liked the thought of some town hall or what not. brush up on events and all.
✅ if page breaks are not obvious...i dont know what is🙂.....heh
🙂no, no...its ok✅...actualy, i like that idea🙂...i will ask you for taht link at a more convienient time.....right now, too many things are happening😖...lol...sorry
and where shud he meet him? i was going for a tavern....but, cud be too repetitive....louis has already gone their a couple of times...i wanted a change....
ok, i did write the meeting of them....i will post it to see if u like it....altho i warn u...it is kinda corny😖
but, let me no what u think of it.....
I walked to the bar, pulling out a brown, wooden chair, sitting down upon it, just as I heard a voice speak close behind me. “You will not let me buy you a simple drink?” asked a deep, almost sulky voice. The gentle laugh of a woman followed his words. Then, the woman spoke. “I am married, sir.” “Oh, I understand. That is a shame then,” the man replied in a dull tone. The woman laughed again, and quietly mumbled a goodbye to the man. Soft footsteps began to fade away slowly, and I knew that this was the departure of the woman. To the right of me, a barstool was pulled out, and upon the stool sat a strange, who was most certainly the man who owned the first voice I had heard.
“No luck either?” Came a voice beside me. I turned my head, in realization that the question was directed at me. “Excuse me?” I asked, my eyebrows raised slightly. I studied the man. I noticed his eyes, silver in color, with flecks of blue scattered through them, the midnight blue color flecks catching most of my attention, as their color seemed somewhat familiar to me. The man tilted his head back slightly, the lights above shining upon his handsome face. He motioned his head towards a group of women behind us. Again, he spoke. “You have had no luck trying to find a young woman?” He turned his head back to me, his black shoulder length hair moving gently as he did so. I smiled, somewhat amused. “That is not my reason for being here.” “Yes, of course, the bar.” The man laughed softly. “Among other things, yes…..” I mumbled.
I turned away, ignoring the mans’ effort for a conversation as he asked me something about New Orleans. The man gave up trying to gain my replies, yet this only lasted for a short time, because I soon found myself drumming my fingers on the counter, trying to drown out his voice. He laid question after question upon me, many of which were simple yes or no questions, to which I would merely shake or nod my head in reply. Three drinks later on my part, the man was still talking, yet I did notice that he had not had one drink. I politely offered him the next drink I had purchased. “Oh, no thankyou. Cassie has kept me off that,” he mumbled, smiling warmly. “Cassie?” I asked, in a weary tone, rubbing my eyelids. “My sister,” he replied. I turned to the man, once again my eyes focusing on his. ‘His eyes…..’ “Do you know her?” he asked, noticing that I was looking at him. “Perhaps.” I smiled, taking a sip of my drink.
I don't have it. I like that bar meeting. Amusing and nicely worded. Just the way Dorian said Cassandra's name as Cassie, was the only time I found it cheesy. Perfectly understanble for him to use her name that way though. So, in short, I liked it and wouldn't mind you playing out most or some of their conversation. It would've been nice to read just a few more sentences or a paragraph more on that mock bit. ^.^ You don't have to do that extra mile, just thought your idea was cool. Besides, I think it will be easier and nicer if we just share their meeting scene. Then again, I don't know. I guess I'll leave most of it to you, their conversation. As to how I'm going to write their convo, I'm not so sure. We'll debate this at a later time. So sorry that I wasn't online here at the time you came back. I went off to read a fanfiction at FictionAlley.Org. Anyways, see you soon!
Alright, I just posted your new story bit. Sadly, I found out that I can't do the alleged "page break" like I wanted to, so I had to use and center those "*" symbols to represent the page break. Sucks, but the stars look fine.
Anyways, going over your story bit once more, I just might go through with continueing from your bit. I might have Louis stroll around and then find the bar where he meets Dorian. I'll have him go in, get settled, sit down, get drinks. Something like that. Then, where Dorian, comes in, I guess you can take it over from there. I guess, you can write up the entire conversation up until the point where Louis has to leave and says good bye. Maybe where he leaves, I can write that part, where he gets back to his apartment. Or...maybe that's not truely necessary. Just brief his return to his room. I'll just take over the next night or so. Hmm...ah hell....we'll just talk this over when you get back! >,<
Blood Ties Forums
Here's the link to the forum that I mentioned earlier: Blood Ties Forums - http://bloodtiesvamps.*********29.com/index.cgi - the part of the URL that is *'ed, replace that with "p r o b o a r d s" - but, without the spaces in between the letters like I just did. I don't know why the KMC Forums does that with certain URL's...
Originally posted by BOPRecruit 16
I don't have it. I like that bar meeting. Amusing and nicely worded. Just the way Dorian said Cassandra's name as Cassie, was the only time I found it cheesy. Perfectly understanble for him to use her name that way though. So, in short, I liked it and wouldn't mind you playing out most or some of their conversation. It would've been nice to read just a few more sentences or a paragraph more on that mock bit. ^.^ You don't have to do that extra mile, just thought your idea was cool. Besides, I think it will be easier and nicer if we just share their meeting scene. Then again, I don't know. I guess I'll leave most of it to you, their conversation. As to how I'm going to write their convo, I'm not so sure. We'll debate this at a later time. So sorry that I wasn't online here at the time you came back. I went off to read a fanfiction at FictionAlley.Org. Anyways, see you soon!
😱 you did?..sh!t.....i thought it was pretty crap😖......HAH..yeh, that was cheesy😄...but, that can be changed to cassandra✅....
im glad u liked it then🙂...
uhhh mock bit?😕....
ok, so what i was thinking of doing, was to write a lil bit extra inbetween part one of my bit, and the meeting,......so, there will be a lil more info leading up to when louis gets to the bar to talk to dorian🙂
i was going to leave the meeting part as it was, (except for the change of cassandras name, which i was change, and repost) and then u can continue on from when louis says 'perhaps'....and drinks his drink🙂...
if you agree to this, just say so next time, and, in the meantime, i wil type up that extra bit that i want inbetween🙂...
talk to u soon boppy🙂...
Originally posted by BOPRecruit 16
Alright, I just posted your new story bit. Sadly, I found out that I can't do the alleged "page break" like I wanted to, so I had to use and center those "*" symbols to represent the page break. Sucks, but the stars look fine.Anyways, going over your story bit once more, I just might go through with continueing from your bit. I might have Louis stroll around and then find the bar where he meets Dorian. I'll have him go in, get settled, sit down, get drinks. Something like that. Then, where Dorian, comes in, I guess you can take it over from there. I guess, you can write up the entire conversation up until the point where Louis has to leave and says good bye. Maybe where he leaves, I can write that part, where he gets back to his apartment. Or...maybe that's not truely necessary. Just brief his return to his room. I'll just take over the next night or so. Hmm...ah hell....we'll just talk this over when you get back! >,<
cool😄...
annnnd not so cool🙁...heh....
well, at least you have that, i think that's great🙂....
soooo basically, after the bit where louis says 'perhaps' and sips his drink, you want to continue?.....sorry, ima gettin a lil confused, cuz i was gunna write a lil bit inbetween part one of my bit, and the meeting, soooo.....basically, there will be info leading up to when louis meets dorian, instead of louis saying he'll go out, and then magically appearing at the bar,w hich i think is crap...lol..unless, you like it that way, and i can leave it🙂....
so, tell me your plans exactly?....were these your plans for future writings on the story?...of did u want to write that inbetween bit i was talking about?....
Originally posted by RagingSilent
thanks for the link to that site boppy, much appreciated👆🙂
when you do join that forum, please let me know what your username there is! 😱 btw, mine is: Illyria. got that name from amy acker's character, fred who turned into illyria towards the end of the season, more or less.
Illyria (Amy Acker, WB's Angel)
(Image Source: Angel Itailian World - http://www.buffyitalianworld.com/angel/guida5_2.html)
this is the same character that i based cassandra's hair off of, but maybe with a bit less blue.
since angel isn't on tv anymore, or well no new seasons and episodes anyways, hard to find pictures of her on google and all...
as for your previous two posts that were about the story, i'll try to respond to them sometime after school on friday or ever the weekend. better to discuss it when you're here too.