I definitely wouldn't make it so wordy. He often went off on these tangents about something that barely has to do with the subject, and he should have left that out. And another thing that threw me off is the overly sappy last few pages, or page, rather. You have all these pages of buildup, and then everything important he has to say, he says while dying in like two pages. That just threw me off.
well, we talked about this in class ( I read this for school) What happened was that he realized what he was been doing for his entire life was wrong, but he really couldn't accept that, but he knew he couldn't keep on going the way he was going, because he realized it was wrong. So he committed suicide.