Field of Prose
Hmm. I dunno if this has already been done, but this is a forum for all those out there who want to have an oppinion about their poetry said to them. You can post whatever you want- I promise not to steal it, and I hope others hold true to that also. Then we will post useful- not harmful- criticism, or compliments. So I hope you enjoy. 🤣
Just to get us started, here is a poem of mine that I wrote. Not the best out there, but oh well.
Phrases of Truth
Apart from the pain,
In addition to the guilt,
In my friend’s case,
Because of my pride,
By means of restlessness,
Beneath my happy mask,
Underneath my evil cloak,
Along with my greed,
Against my judgement
Concerning us both,
Without my knowing
Like breaking of the bread
I broke his heart.
We already have a poetry discussion thread for constructive criticism about member poetry... and should you wish to discuss more renowned poetry, individual threads are to be made about each famous poet.
Feel free to use this thread as your own, to post your work in and people will comment as they deem fit 😊
Ok people here is another poem of mine. Enjoy.
Incineration
The flames flicker around my body,
Scorching the once beautiful cream
That you used to brush softly
With your loving fingertips.
The smell of my flesh is hideous,
I see you wrinkling your nose,
See you grimacing at the stench
Of my burning flesh upon the pole.
You glance in my eyes and I see
My fearful eyes reflected in yours,
My beautiful loving eyes nor fearful,
Yet still holding the love for you.
My hair catches the sparks of the flames,
Crackling and melting at the touch,
Wonderful hair which you once loved,
Hair you used to brush lovingly aside.
I burn on the stake of love I hold
In my heart for you, my love,
Hoping that you will forgive me, save me
From the misery I put myself through.
Originally posted by bemusedmuseBump...
Just to get us started, here is a poem of mine that I wrote. Not the best out there, but oh well.Phrases of Truth
Apart from the pain,
In addition to the guilt,
In my friend’s case,
Because of my pride,
By means of restlessness,
Beneath my happy mask,
Underneath my evil cloak,
Along with my greed,
Against my judgement
Concerning us both,
Without my knowing
Like breaking of the bread
I broke his heart.
... nice...? 😈
Originally posted by bemusedmuseVERY GOOD
Ok people here is another poem of mine. Enjoy.Incineration
The flames flicker around my body,
Scorching the once beautiful cream
That you used to brush softly
With your loving fingertips.
The smell of my flesh is hideous,
I see you wrinkling your nose,
See you grimacing at the stench
Of my burning flesh upon the pole.
You glance in my eyes and I see
My fearful eyes reflected in yours,
My beautiful loving eyes nor fearful,
Yet still holding the love for you.
My hair catches the sparks of the flames,
Crackling and melting at the touch,
Wonderful hair which you once loved,
Hair you used to brush lovingly aside.
I burn on the stake of love I hold
In my heart for you, my love,
Hoping that you will forgive me, save me
From the misery I put myself through.
oh and spead the word
The sydycate have arived 😈
Originally posted by bemusedmuse
Ok people here is another poem of mine. Enjoy.Incineration
The flames flicker around my body,
Scorching the once beautiful cream
That you used to brush softly
With your loving fingertips.
The smell of my flesh is hideous,
I see you wrinkling your nose,
See you grimacing at the stench
Of my burning flesh upon the pole.
You glance in my eyes and I see
My fearful eyes reflected in yours,
My beautiful loving eyes nor fearful,
Yet still holding the love for you.
My hair catches the sparks of the flames,
Crackling and melting at the touch,
Wonderful hair which you once loved,
Hair you used to brush lovingly aside.
I burn on the stake of love I hold
In my heart for you, my love,
Hoping that you will forgive me, save me
From the misery I put myself through.