My new poem....(opinions please)

With You

You are the only person
The one that I hold true
The one who's always by my side
To whom I say "I love you"

Every time we share
Seems endless, swept away
Yet it goes on forever, love
In every single day

Whenever I have left you
You're the one I truely miss
But when I have returned to you
We share loves sweet kiss

You are the one and only
The one that I hold true
For love is ever with us both
Because I am with you

no offense, but when i read this it reminds me for some reason of a hallmark card - i gather that was not your intention

otherwise, your poems are a work in progress...but on the right track

Originally posted by Fëanor
no offense, but when i read this it reminds me for some reason of a hallmark card - i gather that was not your intention

otherwise, your poems are a work in progress...but on the right track

hahhaha mebbe a card, but a better one than most i have seen. which brings up a great topic, send it to hallmark and profit from your talent! haha! nice work overall.

too true.....if i weren't so prosaic i may just do that as well

Originally posted by Fëanor
no offense, but when i read this it reminds me for some reason of a hallmark card - i gather that was not your intention

otherwise, your poems are a work in progress...but on the right track

I kinda thought it did too, though it is good ✅

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
hahhaha mebbe a card, but a better one than most i have seen. which brings up a great topic, send it to hallmark and profit from your talent! haha! nice work overall.