"Why You're Gone"

here is my poem that I wrote...

It feels like you've slowly drifted away
Ever since you walked out that door
My heart still aches for you each day
But I know you're coming back no more

Oh! How I miss seeing your face
And the way you used to look at me
You did not leave a trace
Or even say good-bye to me

Now I cannot sit around all day
I really should move on
But I just wish you'd come back today
And tell me why you're gone

I sent that poem to www.poetry.com and they are publishing it in a book 😱

👆

Good poem, and congrats on the book deal.

Originally posted by CrazyInLove
here is my poem that I wrote...

It feels like you've slowly drifted away
Ever since you walked out that door
My heart still aches for you each day
But I know you're coming back no more

Oh! How I miss seeing your face
And the way you used to look at me
You did not leave a trace
Or even say good-bye to me

Now I cannot sit around all day
I really should move on
But I just wish you'd come back today
And tell me why you're gone

I sent that poem to www.poetry.com and they are publishing it in a book 😱

nice work on the book deal 👆

That's a great poem! So close to my heart as well ✅ And congrats on the book deal hun hug

Thanks guys!! Glad u like it😉

Are you gonna post some more for us? 😱

Well, I don't really have anymore.

Aww well if you don't have any, you don't have any 🙂

Yup🙂 But, if I write anymore, then I will definately post them😉

Becca

kk sounds good 😄

Okay, I just wrote this recently.. don't really know if it's good, but I figured i'd post it anyway! I mean what's it gonna hurt? lol..

I don’t know why you’ve left me here
You’ve left me speechless once again, my dear
I wish to understand the choices that you make
I wish to be beside you every breath you take

I’ve never wanted to hurt your feelings
It’s something that should not be done
I think about you every day,
Every night - and in every way.

But somethings are just meant to happen
For why I do not know!
I guess it’s better to not love at all
For when you find someone you love - they go.

awww... I like it 🙂

Originally posted by CrazyInLove
here is my poem that I wrote...

It feels like you've slowly drifted away
Ever since you walked out that door
My heart still aches for you each day
But I know you're coming back no more

Oh! How I miss seeing your face
And the way you used to look at me
You did not leave a trace
Or even say good-bye to me

Now I cannot sit around all day
I really should move on
But I just wish you'd come back today
And tell me why you're gone

I sent that poem to www.poetry.com and they are publishing it in a book 😱

It's a great poem, but (and I hate to be the bringer of bad news), poetry.com is a sham. They 'published' a poem of mine, sent me mountains of correspondence about conventions, readings, award ceremonies... it's all lies. DO NOT send any money to them, you'll never see it again and you certainly won't see your work published. I didn't send the money they asked for and I didn't go to the ceremonies etc... please don't fall foul to their promises.

Originally posted by CrazyInLove
Okay, I just wrote this recently.. don't really know if it's good, but I figured i'd post it anyway! I mean what's it gonna hurt? lol..

I don’t know why you’ve left me here
You’ve left me speechless once again, my dear
I wish to understand the choices that you make
I wish to be beside you every breath you take

I’ve never wanted to hurt your feelings
It’s something that should not be done
I think about you every day,
Every night - and in every way.

But somethings are just meant to happen
For why I do not know!
I guess it’s better to not love at all
For when you find someone you love - they go.

Write what you feel in your heart, but don't let the mind wander off its course. Your first was better.

Originally posted by NunYahBidness
It's obvious that when you wrote the 2nd and 3rd parts, you're mind had wandered a bit, as it does not follow the 1st. The overall thought remained, but the format and rhythm do not. I suppose it's hard to concentrate when one is inundated with mixed emotions and fleeting thoughts of...oh who knows!!!

Write what you feel in your heart, but don't let the mind wander off its course. Your first was better.

yeah, lol, I didn't really like it, but for some strange reason I still posted it 🙄 I wrote my first poem about a dear thing that I lost last May.

Originally posted by CrazyInLove
Okay, I just wrote this recently.. don't really know if it's good, but I figured i'd post it anyway! I mean what's it gonna hurt? lol..

I don’t know why you’ve left me here
You’ve left me speechless once again, my dear
I wish to understand the choices that you make
I wish to be beside you every breath you take

I’ve never wanted to hurt your feelings
It’s something that should not be done
I think about you every day,
Every night - and in every way.

But somethings are just meant to happen
For why I do not know!
I guess it’s better to not love at all
For when you find someone you love - they go.

hug

nice stuff, agree some with nun... course, he'll get on me now bout my wandering style... please, write some more! 😆 welcome to will's boring sunday.