My Poetry

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
I enjoy your poems, but I have a question that kinda goes out to all those ladies that are kinda young. "How do you fill up with so much hurt so young???" Just kinda reviewing the poems from the posters, and from the folks I know. Kinda strange to see such pain in the youth. Sorry, tangent.... Write more soon, oK?

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
Ok, now ya get me started! 😂 I hope you are still hangin onto virginity. I am, barely. (kinda fell in with a bad girlfriend a while ago, not with her now.) Too many folks don't know what it means. Lotta friends ended up with STD's and pregnancy, even when "protected". That is most definitely the best gift you could ever give anyone, and it is better saved for a husband or wife. Trust me.

Originally posted by jlee17xoxo412
Thanks for the encouragement. I never really encountered a guy who was in his twenty's, and is a virgin. I think there should be more guys following the same thing your doing. Some of the guys I know think they have to do it and then brag about it but i just ignore what they have to say most of the time.

And for your second question,yes, the is more to come 🙂

Originally posted by jlee17xoxo412
Thanks. I like writing poems that have to do with real life;makes things more interesting and people may pay alittle more attention to it. I'll write alittle tommorow but only one because of school, my soccer game, homework, and lord knows what else. It seems like there's never enough time in a day when you reach high school.

Sheesh I quoted all that stuff and forgot to say anything bout your poem! doh It was very good ✅

thanks coldfire, glad you like my poem and you agree with me. i'm only in 9th grade but i'm sure i'll figure out that the higher the grades are, the much harder it is by next year. i just can't wait to get it over with. i already have a whole bunch of homework.

oh yea, i'll but a poem out sometime later

Originally posted by jlee17xoxo412
Thanks. I like writing poems that have to do with real life;makes things more interesting and people may pay alittle more attention to it. I'll write alittle tommorow but only one because of school, my soccer game, homework, and lord knows what else. It seems like there's never enough time in a day when you reach high school.

Originally posted by jlee17xoxo412
thanks coldfire, glad you like my poem and you agree with me. i'm only in 9th grade but i'm sure i'll figure out that the higher the grades are, the much harder it is by next year. i just can't wait to get it over with. i already have a whole bunch of homework.

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
Haha... yeah, 9th is ok. 11th is the best.

I always thought that 12th would be the best. I still have 3 more years to figure that out though. Any way here is that poem i promised.

I just got back from a pool party man
you should take a look at my dark new tan
i can't even walk in a line that is strait
i feel bad cause' i just got dropped from my date
oh wait, i can't feel
I'm head over a heal

when i walk i feel dizzy
i tried calling my house but the phone line's to busy
hold on, where did i park
i can't see in the dark
oh yea, there's my car
why does it seem so far
wait i don't remember buyin two red cars

i looked to my my left, i looked to my right
then i crossed sayin to myself that party was tight
i go up to my car door and open it
then i just hop in and sit in it
what happened i can't think
then i look at myself through the view mirror
hey my face is turning pink
oh no, here it comes, i try to open the door
but oh great i couldn't, it's all over my floor

i can't remember anything after that
i think i passed out after i sat
and today man, i think I'm out of my lucks
because this hangover, yea dude, it really sucks

It's differnent then the rest of the poem so what do you think. Any thing i need to fix?

Originally posted by jlee17xoxo412
thanks coldfire, glad you like my poem and you agree with me. i'm only in 9th grade but i'm sure i'll figure out that the higher the grades are, the much harder it is by next year. i just can't wait to get it over with. i already have a whole bunch of homework.

Ahhh I remember my 9th grade year... it was pretty interesting 😛 Good times, good times... 😄

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
Haha... yeah, 9th is ok. 11th is the best.

Originally posted by jlee17xoxo412
I always thought that 12th would be the best. I still have 3 more years to figure that out though. Any way here is that poem i promised.

I just got back from a pool party man
you should take a look at my dark new tan
i can't even walk in a line that is strait
i feel bad cause' i just got dropped from my date
oh wait, i can't feel
I'm head over a heal

when i walk i feel dizzy
i tried calling my house but the phone line's to busy
hold on, where did i park
i can't see in the dark
oh yea, there's my car
why does it seem so far
wait i don't remember buyin two red cars

i looked to my my left, i looked to my right
then i crossed sayin to myself that party was tight
i go up to my car door and open it
then i just hop in and sit in it
what happened i can't think
then i look at myself through the view mirror
hey my face is turning pink
oh no, here it comes, i try to open the door
but oh great i couldn't, it's all over my floor

i can't remember anything after that
i think i passed out after i sat
and today man, i think I'm out of my lucks
because this hangover, yea dude, it really sucks

It's differnent then the rest of the poem so what do you think. Any thing i need to fix?

Originally posted by Coldfire
You're welcome 😊

Ahhh I remember my 9th grade year... it was pretty interesting 😛 Good times, good times... 😄

Yeah except for the homework! LOL. But it's good cuz I'm finally a senior hehehehe

Sissy..hahahaha!

hmmm.... hopefully seen from outside the poem, and not a personal experience. but, yeah, that describes some of my old highschool buds.... and their idiotic habit.

Originally posted by Coldfire
hmm yeah it's definitely different... it's interesting 🙂

Yea I know. I just felt like writing it because a friend of mine got drunk and almost passed out before. She almost barfed all over her car too. Yea I know, kinda gross but thats usually what happens if you drink 2 much. Anyway, she woke up with this huge hangover the next morning.....Not cool. I'm not the person to say I told you so, so I just let her learn by herself. Then again it's not very new when people get wasted at parties.

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
Sissy..hahahaha!

hmmm.... hopefully seen from outside the poem, and not a personal experience. but, yeah, that describes some of my old highschool buds.... and their idiotic habit.

😆 yea right, I can't even lie 2 my mom and dad about a simple bad quiz grade. So no to answer your question, I've never got wasted. i might have tried like a sip of something here in there, like a little wine but never a whole row of drinks. I'm kind of 2 Innocent for that stuff. I couldn't do it if I tried.

Originally posted by jlee17xoxo412
😆 yea right, I can't even lie 2 my mom and dad about a simple bad quiz grade. So no to answer your question, I've never got wasted. i might have tried like a sip of something here in there, like a little wine but never a whole row of drinks. I'm kind of 2 Innocent for that stuff. I couldn't do it if I tried.

true, i never really liked the taste of it anyway. It's kind of disgusting to me. but some of my friends don't think so. One is 15 and shes already been high and drunk at parties. i'ts a shame but she doesn't want to listen to me.

oh, and i should have another poem coming up later tonight maybe. if i have time

sweet. haha.

Originally posted by jlee17xoxo412
😆 yea right, I can't even lie 2 my mom and dad about a simple bad quiz grade. So no to answer your question, I've never got wasted. i might have tried like a sip of something here in there, like a little wine but never a whole row of drinks. I'm kind of 2 Innocent for that stuff. I couldn't do it if I tried.

Originally posted by Coldfire
I'm the same way... hell I don't even LIKE alcohol 😛

good thing.

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
good thing.

Originally posted by Coldfire
✅ That way I can look out for my friends that do

indeed. now more poems, eh wot wot? 😂

Originally posted by DreamingWarrior
indeed. now more poems, eh wot wot? 😂