Ulic vs. Vodo

wasnt Pall the dark lord. when he died he wasnt a lord. Also couldnt he use the amazing power in his sword (double bladed i think) to kill all 40 jedi. like shoot 50000 degrees all around him through the sword? not trying to be mean just

Originally posted by Darth_Glentract
It's not supposed to be canon or anything(It would be cool if one day I was good enough to write a real SW book and make that canon 😛) . It's called an infiniti. Blasters were invented ~25,000 B.B.Y. and this takes place 9000 B.B.Y.

You actually are a pretty good writer Glentract...you just need to be a bit less jerky in your writing...like smoother and perhaps better defined.

your damn good glentract, and you have the good tendency of finishing what you start, unlike me.......

Originally posted by Veneficus
You actually are a pretty good writer Glentract...you just need to be a bit less jerky in your writing...like smoother and perhaps better defined.

Yeah, fluidity and more advanced literary style is what you lack. But other than that, it's very solid writing.

well this is what i have for Palls sword. heat concentrated, exploding, "imploding in and up avoiding the user ...^... like that. ice the same. unbreakeable, supersharp, spirit connection (guess) shield around user, stores the force of user. any other power that Palls sword can have?

descriptivness and flow are pretty much the only things missing and all that takes is effort and revision.

Originally posted by Darth_Frobo
your damn good glentract, and you have the good tendency of finishing what you start, unlike me.......

I only wish. I have a dozen of unfinished stories on my computer.

How do I improve fluidity and smoothness? I can tell I'm no good at that.

Originally posted by Darth_Glentract
I only wish. I have a dozen of unfinished stories on my computer.

How do I improve fluidity and smoothness? I can tell I'm no good at that.

The same way I did...practice...lots and lots of practice. The more you write the better you get just like if you train at a sport you will get better at it. The same goes for writing. Speaking of such I need to finish chapter 7 on my book (damn lazyiness)

Originally posted by Veneficus
Speaking of such I need to finish chapter 7 on my book (damn lazyiness)

Yes you do. I want to read it.

Fluidity really is a play by ear thing. Either read it to yourself mentally, or read it out loud. If you find it doesn't "flow" right to your ear, try rewriting the sentence and play around with it. Good writing is largely subconscious, there's not a formula.

Originally posted by Illustrious
Fluidity really is a play by ear thing. Either read it to yourself mentally, or read it out loud. If you find it doesn't "flow" right to your ear, try rewriting the sentence and play around with it. Good writing is largely subconscious, there's not formula.

What I was trying to say...yet worded much better...

Originally posted by Veneficus
What I was trying to say...yet worded much better...

haha, how ironic

My thoughts exactly.