Sinner By:Mas
Hey, This is not one of my good storys from what I Think, But My good onse are all over 40-60 pages long so Its too much To post Im thinking. But Anyway a school prject came up and I hadd to write a Short Story...I Don't Care for short stories cause there short...😛 Anyway This is my Second Last draft Of my Story, So ther may be a few errors in spelling, But its a straight forward story. So Enkoy and Leave feedback.
Thanks
~Mas
Sinner
By: Neil Green
It had been a very stormy Thursday; Mitch was going to his grandmother’s house for the weekend. Along the way he saw a man standing on the side of the road getting pounded with rain. Feeling sorry for him he stopped and picked him up. The man thanked him for the drive, gave him his name and jumped in. They talked for awhile about different things. After an hour of driving, a car ahead of them spun out of control and came in contact with them. The road was covered in pieces of metal and glass. The driver, Mitch was not wearing his seatbelt and was thrown out through the window onto the roof of the other vehicle. Andrew had a piece of rigid metal stuck up through his throat. Both men were dead.
The light was intense; Mitch couldn’t see anything at all. The ground was very soft and fluffy, hard to walk on. He rubbed his eyes and looked around, he saw Andrew who was driving with him a few feet away. He thought of screaming but a force seemed to tell him it’s alright, so he kept quiet. Andrew was looking at him and he was looking back, then a voice was heard by both of them…
“Mitchell White and Andrew Haden you both must have lot’s of questions to ask, I will explain what I can. You are both dead, and at the gates of heaven. You cannot be accepted into heaven until completing a task. You both have sinned over your life span and there is only one way to have them forgiven…”
“Are you going to send us to hell?” Andrew blurted out.
“Possibly, but you must complete the task.”
“What task?” Mitch asked still a bit timid.
“You will be sent to earth for 24 hours, in those hours you must just act like it’s another normal day. If you can go without committing one of the “Seven Deadly Sins” you will be allowed to walk through the gates of heaven. If you commit one or more of them, you will face the consequences in the depths of Hell.”
“I am sorry, but can you inform us about what these seven deadly sins are?”
“Of course:
The Seven Deadly Sins Are:
Pride: To think you are so much better then someone, to think you’re so amazing.
Envy: To resent another person for what they have.
Wrath: To be overly angry all the time, get very angry for small reasons.
Sloth: To be lazy and cause someone else to have to work harder because of your slacking.
Greed: To want to have everything.
Gluttony: To eat even when you are not hungry.
And finally
Lust: Unlawful sexual desire, to be perverted.”
“Those are the teven deadly sins, wow this might be hard,” mitch sighed as St. Peter finished stating the list.
“I’m sure I can do it,” andrew stated.
“Keep your mind clear and pure and you will always succeed. Good luck.”
As he finished that sentence, both Andrew and Mitch started getting a sick feeling in there stomach, then the both disappeared into a thick mist and were transferred back to earth. They both awoke by each other in there houses…
Mitch’s day started out like it usually would have; since St. Peter had made it so no one realized he had died. Mitch got up and had a shower, after his shower he had a bowl of cereal and went to work. On the way to work there was a traffic jam but it didn’t bother him that much, he was a bit worried he would be late for work. Mitch worked at a computer technology centre and had just got a position there a few weeks earlier. Even though he was technically Dead Mitch still believed it was all just a dream.
Mitch got to work before it was time to be there and got to his desk fast. He started all his work and had a head start. His boss walked in about ten minutes after him and saw him working. Mitch waved to his boss and he waved back. By around twelve o’clock Mitch had finished all his work for the day and his boss let him go home early. Mitch was very pleased. He made his way out to his car and drove home. The rest of the day he had to himself. On the way home Mitch was a bit hungry so he decided to stop in at MacDonald’s…
Andrew slept in a deep sleep for a few hours eventually waking at11:30, hours late for work.
“What a good sleep, I am ready to have a pure mind and make it into heaven!” Andrew said standing up and stretching.
Andrew made his way to the bathroom. He was still tired after sleeping for over nine hours. He turned on the shower and hopped in but quickly jumped out when the heat wasn’t working and the water was ice cold. Andrew hadn’t got oil for his home for awhile and it had just died out.
“Damn Oil! Why can’t we have free heat in our houses?” He yelled as he dried off the cold water.
After he was dry he put his clothes back on and went and brushed his teeth. As he was brushing him blood started coming out of one of his gums.
“Ouch!” He cried as he dropped his tooth brush into the sink and took some Kleenex and wiped the blood away from the cut he had caused.
He walked into the kitchen where he took an old banana, peeled it and started eating it as he walked to his little Volkswagen. He was a mess, his clothes where wrinkled, his hair was a mess and there was a piece of old banana on his jeans. It took him a few tried to start the car because it was so low on gas but it eventually got going and he made his way down to the MacDonald’s he worked at. When he arrived and came inside the manager was there to meet him.
“Andrew look how late you are for work, for the third time. You’re not even ready! Look at you you’re a mess. Go home and don’t bother coming back,” his manager yelled at him in front of everyone who was working there and ordering food.
“Fine! You can’t fire me I quit!” He yelled extremely loud as he walked out the doors back to his car. If I was manager I would show him a thing or two!
Mitch pulled into the MacDonald’s and slammed on the breaks as a man walked out in front of him. The man looked at him and gave him a dirty look and then just continued walked towards his car. Mitch was a bit mad that the man had given him a dirty look when he walked out in front of the car. He couldn’t remember exactly but the mans face seemed awfully familiar.
Mitch walked into the MacDonald’s and waited in line, once he got to the counter he ordered a Double Big Mac with no Cheese. When he got his food,made his way back to his car and drove home.
Once Mitch was home He sat down at his kitchen table and ate his burger as he started writing a new code for a cool new program he had been working on for a computer. After that he went and sat down, and watched some golf…
Andrew was in a bad mood; he was fired and almost ran over. He didn’t get a good look at the guy’s face that was driving but he seemed oddly familiar. Andrew made his way into his car and tried to get it to start; all that was heard was a BUZZ that would last as long as he held the key down.
“Just friggen great,” andrew said hitting the steering wheel with both of his hands.
Andrew got out of the car and started walking home. Along the way he saw a women walk by him, he turned and looked at her and thought about her shape. Nice Buns Lady.
He eventually made it home and just made his way in. He looked on the floor where his mail was and picked it up. One letter stood out the most, on the front was the word IMPORTANT.
“Screw it, I’ll read it later,” he mutterd as he sat down on his chair and watched a football game on his small televison.
The clock stroke eight and both Mitch and Andrew got a sick feeling in there stomach. Suddenly, they could hardly see again, they where both very light headed. Mitch stood up and so did Andrew. The looked at each other and then pointed and said “You!”
“You Stepped out in front of my car and then gave me a bad look!”
“You almost ran...” Andrew was cut off by the sound of St. Peters voice.
“Mitchell White and Andrew Haden, walk forward.”
Both of them obeyed and walked forward, they both came out of the foggy mist and into a nice field where a man with long White hair stood, St. Peter. They approached him.
“Mitchell White, you have gone the day without doing any of the Deadly Sins. You did your best to be helpful and nice. God is accepting you into his Kingdom of Heaven to live in peace and harmony for eternity. As for you, Andrew Haden, You have committed more then one of the Deadly sins, you must spend eternity in the Depth of Hell.”
“No! I didn’t do anything wrong, I was good all day,” he screamed.
“I shall name your sins then:
1) Sloth, you slept in and were late for work causing someone else to fill in for you.
2) Wrath, you got mad about everything, your car, being fired and when you walked out in front of a car, you made it seem like it was the drivers fault.
3) Envy, you wanted to be the manager of MacDonald’s so you could fire him instead of the other way around.
4) Pride, before you even made it to earth you thought you would do this so easy and be able to pass no problem. You think to highly of yourself.”
“But I…”
“Goodbye Mr. Haden”
As St. Peter said that, a hole appeared below Andrew, hundreds of burning hands came up and started dragging him down into the Depth of Hell. He screamed, kicked and fought to stay up but it was too late. The demons had pulled him under and the hole had covered up.
Mitch made his way into heaven and the gates closed behind him. What he saw was more beautiful then anything he ever imagined. He was greeted by a few angels who put a pair of wings on his back and let him out into the meadows of Heaven…
The End