Poems and more

Hey guys! I've posted some poems in here in general before...I just don't know where so I thought I would start this thread. This thread is welcome to anybody who wants to post poems, thoughts, quotes, and criticism. I really just wanted to know what people think about my poems, people besides my friends, and with the fact that none of you know me I would love it if you could give me some criticism, pointers, and whatever...so here goes nuthin'......

You haunt me in my everyday life
You and that stupid bloody knife
The knife that you used to break my heart
I'm still feelin' the pain while you get your fresh start
You moved on fast 'cuz when you said you loved me, you lied
You moved on fast while I practically died
'Cuz when I said I loved you, baby it was true
When I said I loved you, I said it and meant it too

That was one of my not-so-good...okay...bad...ones...here's another..

Is life here to enjoy?
Is life here to love?
Is life happiness?
Or is it all of the above?

Is it an adventure?
Ready for you to explore
Filled with challenges of all kinds
Life is never a bore

It’s like clouds
Not all designed in the same way
When you look at them
They are different each and every day

Life is here for you to love and enjoy
Each and every second counts, remember
Seize the moment now for
It will never come back, it won’t ever!

and another......

Every time I see you, my heart soars
This feeling opens so many doors
Closing them all one by one
Afraid of what my actions would have done
If I followed my heart and not my brain
My life would go down the drain
If I followed my heart that led to you
That led to a love so unknown and new
It would be a major risk for me
One that would end in my misery
I make my choices with my brain and not my heart
To give my life a promising start

and this one I did for personification thing in school...I thought it was bad but others said it was good....topic was assigned to me I did not choose it willingly....

The door was left ajar
It was just there
No one seemed to notice
No one seemed to care
The door ajar felt so lonely
She felt like she would cry
As the wind went through the open crack
She thought that she would rather die
Than go through her life
So ignored and forgotten
Like a dead plant
Just sitting there feeling rotten
Her life was partly open
For everyone to see
What was on the other side?
Why would it always close so carefully?
Why wasn’t the door kept ajar all her life
She speaks out to tell you all
“I am always closed to keep out the unwanted intruders
So then we can have a safe life and believe me we shall!”

Okay...so I think I shouldn't have posted this all in one but I'm too lazy to go and delete them...lol! So I leave you with a quote that spoke to me...this will be one of many...so just please tell me what you think of all of this....yes I would totally LOVE the COLD HARD TRUTH!!! lol! bye....

'Your emotions betray your being, your eyes are windows to your soul, keep them open and vulnerable for too long, and you and up hurt....JUST LIKE THAT!'

So do you agree/disagree....I'll tell you my thoughts if you'll tell me yours..lol! (That sounds sooo childish!) bye....oh and Happy Late Thanksgiving to all of you....

I made a mistake...oooops....in the quote it's supposed to be 'and you END up hurt....JUST LIKE THAT!' sorry!

like 'em hate 'em?

Hey, umm, I'm gonna post another poem of mine that I just wrote after one of my rare random bursts of urges to write...I've been in writer's block for awhile but sometimes I amaze myself...lol....well my friend's liek it, but I don't know if I should trust their opinion y'know, I don't want them to just say it so they won't hurt my feelings....that's why I would reaaaally appreciate your thoughts on them...

WARNING: Those who may have a problem with cursing, there are a couple of curses in these poems, only two if my count is right, please do not be offended, they were added as an emphasis on my point.

This is the one I wrote last night, I'm not sure if it's a song or a poem or what it is---

“If This Is A Safe Bet, Then Darling, You’re Definitely Gonna Be In Debt”

You never know what’s gonna go down
Cuz it’s like karma, what comes around, goes around
You never assume or jump the gun
Cuz then it’d be like pulling the trigger on an innocent one
Baby, don’t you understand….
What you see, isn’t what you always get
So step away from the bookie, its shaky land
You say for the people with no rep, it’s a safe bet
But baby, don’t you know, you do have a rep to protect
All in all, now I must say, who you truly are, no one would suspect
Cuz if you, that reckless rebel of the class,
And that cautious guy with a stick up his ass…
Are the same, help me God, my mind’s gone insane
I guess this means that the…
Sluttiest whore is the biggest prude
Bible girl is demonic and rude
Either intellectual geek or overachieving freak
Girl, can I hear you say…?
The QB’s next flavor-of-the-week
Brainless jock is equivalent to straight-A nerd
Sweetie, haven’t you figured it out yet, haven’t you heard?
What you see, isn’t what you always get
So step away from the bookie, it isn’t a safe bet
You never know what people hide
Who they could truly be inside
Really it’s their choice who they should be
Someone who’s fake, or someone’s who’s there “me”
It’s a difficult decision, but it could be any easy one
Just leave the stereotyping behind and have some fun!

and here's one I wrote a couple weeks ago...it's not one of my best, but my friends actually love it---

I wonder why does this happen to me
and I try to figure out what could it be
why do I act this strange and peculiar way
cuz every time I see them I want to fade away

but that’s just the way things were in my wonderful life
I was the forgotten one just left aside
but it all changed that day when he came to talk to me
cuz for the first time in a long time he had an apology
and so I asked him what’s up and how come and why now
so suddenly
and he said well....she just dumped me....

*cue loud music*

so I told him to **** off and leave me the hell alone
I don't wanna do this anymore
why don’t you just go away...
get a life and leave me and mine behind
cuz baby...maybe...I just don’t wanna fade away

I hope you don't think you wasted your time reading them, an opinion, good or bad, would be greatly apperciated....please and thanks!

Toodles...Mana...<333

It's weird....like I'm on a roll or something....better not get my hope's up...it'll be over soon....and here it is...something I wrote exactly 20 minutes ago...yay me?

Honest Opinions Please! =)

Here it is--

“If I Wait For A Sign, Then Sweetie, You May Never Be Mine”

My mind feels so restless
I’m feelin so senseless
My heart’s on overdrive…

My stomach’s flipping
My breath’s slipping
I’ve never felt so alive…

And oooohhh, every time I see you, I don’t know what to do
My thoughts are overloading, filled with memories of you
You’re just so close, and yet you’re light years away
You have me going crazy every moment of every day
I don’t know what I’m waiting for, like you’d ever give me a sign
I’ll have to take the risk or have you stay close but never be mine

I guess I should take the chance and give it a shot
What I’m lookin for might end up being all I’ve got
Cuz…ooooohhh….you never know….
So I’m gonna suck it up and take the plunge and just wait and see
You may just end up as the best thing that’s ever happened to me

the "you" in "you may just end up" should be an "I"

"You may just end up as the best thing that’s ever happened to me"

should be

"You may just end up being the best thing that's ever happened to me"

come on people...do I have to beg? I would REALLY REALLY appreciate if I got some criticism....good OR bad....

no dear, plz dont beg lol. Ur poems are flippin awesome!! They're all really good, but i really like “If This Is A Safe Bet, Then Darling, You’re Definitely Gonna Be In Debt”, but like i said b4, its all good. 😄