Originally posted by lordzeb
okay, i've just started to read it, and you may want to check into this.tense was a slight problem but has gotten better.
numbers usually from one to twenty, (give or take a few numbers) are typed out, never like
especially when it is like that you should really type out Especially one man.
a little bit more could be done with the detail, but it's looking great. captilization was a bit of a problem, not capitlizing Imperial once, and having capitals after when someone talks. what i mean is Said. it should be said after quotation marks.
another mistake was when someone different talks, a new paragraph is started.
other than that, great job, and i'll continue to read your story.
btw, the mistakes i pointed out are in the first post, so i don't know if it has improved or not.
Meh, It's not an essay. I'm just writing what I'm imagining. Enjoy 😊