Originally posted by steverules
Yeah I think thats really good...so how would Vulture and Electro come together...would they like team up or just...work individually
Thanks man. At first they would be work individually then they would be teaming up against Spider-Man at the end. Here is my other treatment of Spider-Man 4 personally I prefer the Vulture and Electro version I have written but here is the other version.
Synopsis Of Spider-Man 4
One year after the events of Spider-Man 3, Peter faces an awkward life as the web slinger. His relationship with MJ has reached its all time low with the girl of his dreams leaving New York for a better future. However a new evil that will threaten all that he loves has risen and to fight this evil he must appeal to the humanity of his arc nemesis Venom. Who has been biding his time after near death in order to destroy Spider-Man once and for all
Movie opens up with credits like the last three movies. Switch to shot in a park. It is a bright sunny afternoon. You can see couples hold hands and smile at each other and children playing.
Voice Over: I learned long ago that I could never be like a normal human being I was given a gift to use for the good of all people and had always lived by my Uncle’s words that With Great Power comes Great Responsibility. But in these years of having these powers I have had to give up the life I so longed for and give up the girl of my dreams.
A darkness took over me some months ago that drove all the people I loved away from me including her. I eventually fought it but my life was never the same again I lost my best friend. I still live with the consequences of being Spider-Man for the better hood of New York oh why did she have to leave.
Switch to a scene when Peter is clearing away some stuff in his apartment. He hears a knock on his door and goes over to open it. In his doorway stands Mary Jane Watson.
MJ: I hope I’m not disturbing you, Pete.
Peter Parker: No its okay MJ, I was just clearing some stuff out…. its moving day tomorrow!
MJ: Uh huh… I came here to talk about something important.
Peter Parker: What’s up? Is everything alright?
MJ: Sit down, Peter, this is… hard…
Then Peter pulls up a chair for MJ and sits down on his bed. MJ then puts her hand on Peters’ hand and starts talking.
MJ: Listen Peter we need to talk about us I just feel we need a break with everything that has happened in the last year.
Peter Parker: I know I have done some terrible things MJ but I’m sure we can just talk this through.
Then MJ starts crying.
MJ: No Peter I just need some time to clear my head a lot of stuff has happened to me recently my mum has passed away and I want to forget about the scars of the past.
Peter Parker: Listen what I have always told you I be here for you always.
MJ: But you have not Pete do you know what’s its like for you to always be away and be in near death incidents.
Peter Parker: It’s what I do MJ I thought you understood that?
MJ: I don’t understand you anymore Pete I just need time to clear my head.
Then she gets up and walks out of Pete’s apartment. Peter follows her and starts trying to persuade her not to go.
Peter Parker: Where will you go?
MJ: I’m moving away from New York to start a new life away from all this pain.
Peter Parker: But MJ I love you snap out of this I’m here for you.
MJ: I just don’t know what to think anymore Peter.
She takes one last look at Peter and walks out of his apartment building. Peter stares on into the lonely street.
Originally posted by steverules
Thats good, I thought that was a good way to open up and having Venom still alive is a nice touch too...whats with all the weird symbols and stuff?
I have no idea that sometimes happens when I copy and paste my work over to this forum which version of Spidey 4 did you like better and why Steve??
Originally posted by steverules
It's really hard to choose cause both are really good 😂 In the MJ/Pete argument MJ should say that they both need a break due to the fact that Harry who was best friend to both of them has just died which causes problems on the relationship
Thanks for the feedback man greatly appreciated. By the way did you ever check out my new Batman script Batman Vengeance in the Batman forum??? And by the way nice sig. 😂
Originally posted by steverules
Thanks 😂 I got the idea from a game my friend let me borrow where the object of the game is to have sex with all the sheep to get to the next level, it's a german game it's really crazy😂 I never really go on the batman forum so chances are I haven't seen it, is it new?
It is pretty new yeh. I can PM it to you if you want to read it??? And did you ever read Batman Escalation the first ever Batman script I have written???
Originally posted by Darkhalen
Oh I did
Oh cool what did you think of it??? And thank you for your kind comments. 🙂 I am in the rare minority that actually thought that Spider-Man 3 was the best out of the three. Even though I think that there should be no Spider-Man 4. I would like the filmmakers to write the next one like either of my treatments that would be a dream come true and I do think they are faithful enough to the comics.
Well that's the thing my friend not only do you make the phrase's and words interlock and grip you but they stay true to the comics the only reason I disliked 3 was because of how they treated Venom the film itself was fine but I was disappointed with Venom who was the star villain of the film, May you keep writing you have a certain way with words that create a scene and atmosphere, I am a writer to and my friend you know how to make a story, oh and you never know maybe one day you will write for some of the biggest films of them all.
Oh I almost forgot your Batman piece was great. you set the scene and the mood well
Originally posted by Darkhalen
Well that's the thing my friend not only do you make the phrase's and words interlock and grip you but they stay true to the comics the only reason I disliked 3 was because of how they treated Venom the film itself was fine but I was disappointed with Venom who was the star villain of the film, May you keep writing you have a certain way with words that create a scene and atmosphere, I am a writer to and my friend you know how to make a story, oh and you never know maybe one day you will write for some of the biggest films of them all.
Thanks my friend you are too kind. 😄 I personally thought that Venom was done okay but I just wished he was given more screen time thats the thing at least another fight between him and Spider-Man would have been good. I also thought that there should have been more screen time for Eddy and Gwen Stacy but apart from that the film was amazing imo. 😎
True my friend True I never understood why Gwen was in it since she can't die and there was never anything there to suggest that he was actually dating her but I found him to Slim, he never spoke with the mask, he did not have a long tongue there was no single battle head on,
He had a few minutes then he died, and he did not speak in second person and did not have white spider symbol or white patches on his hands, and he had black webbing, all he seemed to do was scream* a lot.
Scream*
But I digress great stories my friend