Batman Esculation

Started by Scarecrow75654 pages

Hay Hellmaster do you think that anything is wrong with my script?

Not really... I mean, there could be improvements (no offence, very little is up to Goyer standards) but for a Year 10(?) its EXTREMELY good! Better than I'd do I should think... 😉

I know it is not up to Goyer standards. Heck not even Aliens Unleasesd is up to James Camron, Riddley Scott or even David Fincher`s standards but as you said its not bad for a Year 10 student. I appraitte the support Hellmaster.

No problemo, mate... I myself took a course in film directing/ producing and writing etc a yerar or so ago so I know how hard it can be to sound good while thinking about how people naturally look, talk etc... 😄

Hay Hellmaster I showed some of my friends at school today my Aliens Unleased script and they loved it. They are all Alien fans to.

Good fr them! 🙂 So, have you any plans to make a different fan film?

Not at the moment.

Here is a new scene from Batman Escaltion that I written last night. The last part is still due to be finshed.

Bruce Wayne wakes up to Alfred at his bedside.
Alfred: Finally awake Master Bruce, I took the liberty of rescheduling your 9.00 meeting to this afternoon.
Bruce Wayne: Thank you Alfred.
Alfred: What about the cave then.
Bruce Wayne: It is nearly finished; the big computer should be coming soon.
Alfred: Big computer????
Bruce Wayne: Yes this big computer is state of the art; it will help me track criminals more easily.

Suddenly Alfred and Bruce Wayne hear a news report about the Joker.

Newscaster: Just last night there has been another attack by a criminal now dubbed the Joker at the docks. These are the many of the attacks that the Joker has left his mark of his crimes. Normally at the scene his victims are smiling and Joker cards are left near the scene. Gotham Police Department Comminser has said no comment to this attack.

Bruce Wayne: I should keep an extra eye on the streets when I am out.
Alfred: This Joker character sounds like a tricky costumer.
Bruce Wayne: Which is why I should keep an extra eye out? So Alfred any events in the social calendar.
Alfred: I do believe you have an opera to go to tonight.
Bruce Wayne: Come on Alfred, you know I hate opera.
Alfred: I see Batman hates opera but Bruce Wayne must appear to have a love for the theatrical.
Bruce Wayne: All a part of concealing my identity.
Alfred: Quite right Master Wayne. Now how would a nice bit of English tea do?
Bruce Wayne: It would just fine, thank you Alfred.
Alfred: My Pleasure Master Bruce.

Bruce Wayne greets Harvey Dent at the entrance to the opera.

Bruce Wayne: Hay Harvey, I have not seen you since the good old Princeton days.
Harvey Dent: Hay Bruce, I see life is good with you.
Bruce Wayne: Indeed it has.
Harvey Dent: Just tell me one thing Bruce, why did you leave Princeton?
Bruce Wayne: I guess I had to clear my head.
Harvey Dent: The lose of a loved one is always hard to bear.
Bruce Wayne: So I hear you have already put most of the Mob Boss Penguin men behind bars.
Harvey Dent: I may have most of the Penguin’s men behind bars but I fear Bruce that there are more of those slimy worms nesting near the hidden parts of Gotham, some times I feel like butchering all of them.
Bruce Wayne: How can you say a thing like that specially a man in your postion who serves Justice.
Harvey Dent: Well Bruce as they say Justice is blind.
Bruce Wayne: It may be blind but you still have to enforce it.
Harvey Dent: Sorry Bruce I guess I just lost control for a moment, normally people don’t usually see my dark side.
Bruce Wayne: I have seen it plenty a time Harvey.

Suddenly Harvey Dent takes out a coin and starts playing with it.

Bruce Wayne: Why do you always play with that coin Harvey, even in Princeton when I ever I saw you, you were playing with that coin.
Harvey Dent: Lighten up Bruce, don’t you like a littlie game of chance. Shell we go in?

After the show Bruce notices a woman getting mugged.

Random Mugger: Let’s have some money lady.
Selina Kyle: I told you already I do not have any money.
Bruce Wayne: Excuse me how does this check sound to you if you leave this lady alone.
The mugger goes off into the cold night after that.
Selina Kyle: Muggers are always around this time.
Bruce Wayne: I guess the night seems to draw them.

Pretty goo. Just check a bit on the grammar, Sartaj, there are a few phrases that don't quite make sense!

Sure thing.

😉

It does sound cool!

Originally posted by smiley8
It does sound cool!

Do you mean the new scenes I have written Smiley.

Nah... he means eating cheese! You know... the quiet little chomping sounds... COOL! 😎

Originally posted by HellMaster93
Nah... he means eating cheese! You know... the quiet little chomping sounds... COOL! 😎

LOL. 😆

LOL ✅

God bless random sarcasm... 🙂

The fan film might be back on. 🤘 🤘

Rock on... with more actors? And where's Gabriekl got to? Was he gonna be in your film?

No he was not, and he stopped coming because he thought KMC was boring. I just hope we can get the fan film going, it is just the directer we need now.