Rate my poem plz

plz rate my poem

Endless Tormet

Lost forever at the seas
The ocean of death
Filled with blood
And the bloated corpses
Drown in the pain you caused
The happenings of your torment
Your victims all slit their wrists
Some hang by the rope
The only hope they knew
For your words made them feel worthless
But they are worth more then you know
So now go taste your hurt
Taste the blood you spilt
Kiss the corpses
Tell them your sorry
Now I take the blade
And cut your throat
Gasp you're sorry
As I throw you
Into the waves of torment
You're swollowed by the sea
Dragged down by the lives you ruined

rate it plz

rate from 1-10, 1 being the lowest

😐

anyone at all?

Sorry bout that. I just think this poem is soooo ... heavy? 😛 But cool.

o ok.. lol

wow I know this style all too well lol. It needs some punctuation though, else it could be a bit hard to read. I would give it an... 8.6/10 😊

I'm gonna go for a 6/10. It's good, but as Cold said, you need some punctuation. Good effort!

In my opinion, poem needs to rhyme:

I´m eating fish,
which is my fetish.

Next I eat some cat,
they say it´s low-fat...

Okay, that was awful!! 😂

But I guess that your poem is ok in it´s genre. I give 7,5/10

My lord, that is very.... graphic.... violent.... dark.... um.... I'm kinda scared

Originally posted by SamIel
plz rate my poem

Endless Tormet

Lost forever at the seas
The ocean of death
Filled with blood
And the bloated corpses
Drown in the pain you caused
The happenings of your torment
Your victims all slit their wrists
Some hang by the rope
The only hope they knew
For your words made them feel worthless
But they are worth more then you know
So now go taste your hurt
Taste the blood you spilt
Kiss the corpses
Tell them your sorry
Now I take the blade
And cut your throat
Gasp you're sorry
As I throw you
Into the waves of torment
You're swollowed by the sea
Dragged down by the lives you ruined

rate it plz

Originally posted by Otus
In my opinion, poem needs to rhyme:

I´m eating fish,
which is my fetish.

Next I eat some cat,
they say it´s low-fat...

Okay, that was awful!! 😂

But I guess that your poem is ok in it´s genre. I give 7,5/10

Originally posted by justjakk
you painted a picture of heartbreak and hurt with blood and gore..no matter the punctuation..was pretty good..the only thing i dont like about it is that it seemed to jump all over the idea and was kinda confusing...however, i knew what you were getting at...i would go along with sy and give it a 6/10

Originally posted by Otus
In my opinion, poem needs to rhyme:

I´m eating fish,
which is my fetish.

Next I eat some cat,
they say it´s low-fat...

Okay, that was awful!! 😂

But I guess that your poem is ok in it´s genre. I give 7,5/10

Poems don't need to rhyme, but as that's your opinion, why do you think so? 🙂

i have several other poems too.. do u think i should type them up on here as well?

Originally posted by SamIel
i have several other poems too.. do u think i should type them up on here as well?

ok then... i will type my next poem...

Reflection of Deceit

Anger fills the mind
Rage torments the soul
Forever bound by the hatred love
Bleeding by the blade
Of which is in your hand
I grasp my arm
Trying to hold the flesh together
I look up
Only to see
The one thing I feared
The one holding the blade
I look up and see
The only thing in my sight
Is my reflection
In the mirror of deceit

soo.. what does everyone think?

You've got a strange, dark personality, and your poetry is an outlet for your fustration and anger. that's my opinion. But good poem! 👆 yah.... ✅

thx... it is an outlet for my anger and rage.. but i can't seem to write any happy poems.. it kinda sux, but i like the darker poems better anyways.. lol