my words

my words

my words are strong
a gentle breeze
it blows along
they break with ease.

my words are deep
a soul so pure
will it keep
them safe and sure?

my words are more, than words i say,
they are my heart,
my love,
my shame.

my words are strong
a gentle breeze
it blows along
they break.................

im not feeling too happy today and this is what came from my heart. feel free to say something and or write your own poem. thankx

silver tears fall to the ground
an ocean deep
the world around

they grow they shrink
can it be
silver tears are thundering.

silver tears are all around
an ocean full
no more sound
silver tears filled so deep
surrond my heart
make me free.

Very nice. I like the powerful imagery.

this may sound really lame and stupid of me but uh what is imagery?? 😮
and thankyou.

Originally posted by natashia
this may sound really lame and stupid of me but uh what is imagery?? 😮
and thankyou.

Its the way you describe the colours and the things that are happening, so that the person reading the poem cna almost see what you're describing.
You give very clear images in your poems.

thnks doubly

Originally posted by natashia
my words

my words are strong
a gentle breeze
it blows along
they break with ease.

my words are deep
a soul so pure
will it keep
them safe and sure?

my words are more, than words i say,
they are my heart,
my love,
my shame.

my words are strong
a gentle breeze
it blows along
they break.................

im not feeling too happy today and this is what came from my heart. feel free to say something and or write your own poem. thankx

"they break.........." at the ending was pretty powerful. I liked that ending.

thanks
what about the other one

forgotten

today i lost the sun
bring it back to me
the warmth
i sought; had won
bring it back to me
today i lost the trees
bring them back to me
the shelter
of their leaves
bring it back to me
today i lost waves
bring them back to me
life giving
that they gave
bring it back to me
today i lost my soul
give it back to me
two halves
the same whole
give it back to me
today i lost my dream
give it back to me
the sun the waves
my soul the trees
give it back to me

wow, I liked how it rhymed. very nice 🙂

it talks about a man
the sun in her eyes that warms her up, that she had fought for and won
how he is the trees, strong, protective sheltering her from well any thing
how he is the waves, -passion, fighter, how he gives and is her life
how he is a part of her the other half of her soul she is not whole or complete without him
how he is her dream- the only thing she wants the only thing she has wanted
he is all of theese and more.
the last line should read:
bring ye back to me
telling no begging him to come back to her.
(wherever he is) 😄

i love all ur peoms sooo much! awesome job! plz keep them comin' 😉

breakdown

to be or not to be that is what i am
for which one i cannot see
is that the life of man?
looking in the mirror blank
my eyes watching me
inside my soul will rant and rave
outside i am falling.
to be or not to be that is what i am
to see or not to see
the soul
of a lost
man.

yet again i love it!

thankyou very much
i don't get many compliments so...
thankyou

Originally posted by natashia
my words

my words are strong
a gentle breeze
it blows along
they break with ease.

my words are deep
a soul so pure
will it keep
them safe and sure?

my words are more, than words i say,
they are my heart,
my love,
my shame.

my words are strong
a gentle breeze
it blows along
they break.................

im not feeling too happy today and this is what came from my heart. feel free to say something and or write your own poem. thankx

yeah and i do
i just lost my work in the move from louisiana.

Originally posted by natashia
yeah and i do
i just lost my work in the move from louisiana.

yeah

good! then get on it and start writing some of them word play 😄