i never said u sucked at script writing, but generally when people dont take the time to do something, they're either not good at it, or wouldn't enjoy doing it...all i meant was that you shouldn't say something negative about something if you cant, or wouldn't bother to, do better yourself, and even then you shouldn't
and yes, we are nice😄
kk woah hold ya horses peeps i didnt wanna start a fite kk barker - thankyou 4 da constructive criticism - although im not a script writer just a beginner id luv it if u could tell me how 2 improve or wat i did wrong tho
n savvychik thats soooooooooooo kind of u 2 stick up 4 me like u have just now u dont even know me thats really nice of u have a hug hug lol but i dont want u in a fite cuz of me dont get urself in trouble i wouldnt want that 4 u
anyhow sorry guys guys im the cause of this problem ill go now ... sadwalk
Re: :laugh: OMG OMG OMG!!! LEAKED SCENE!!! CHECK IT OUT!!! :dance:
Originally posted by surfchikpir8fan
OMG!!! LOOK AT WAT I FOUND!!! OMG OMG OMG OMG!!! I DON’T KNOW WHAT 2 THINK IS THIS A SPOILER AND REAL??? SOMEBODY HELP ME!!!EXT – BLACK PEARL MAIN DECK – MIDNIGHT
Moonlight is falling on the Pearl, illuminating it. A figure can be seen sitting on the rail. She is humming to herself, and then gulps the rest of a rum bottle down her throat before throwing it into the ocean. Another person approaches her. He is smiling.
JACK: ‘Tis a beautiful night, is it not, Miss Swann? It seems to mirror your image.
ELIZABETH: Haha, very funny. So now you’re talking to me, after all these distant days. What more could I have possibly of done wrong for you to come to me and make me feel worse?
JACK: Tut tut – there’s no need for anymore coldness between us now, is there love? Besides, I couldn’t pass up the opportunity, to talk too you could I?
There is a long uncomfortable pause, until Elizabeth sighs and then gazes down at the ocean.
ELIZABETH: I can’t pretend anymore Jack. I can’t lie. I’m not as strong as I thought I was. I used to be afraid of death, what comes after life. Especially after losing some many that were close … but now … it doesn’t seem to hard at all – to just let go. To sink down through the waves, into the peaceful darkness. I want it to end … I’ve betrayed and hurt too many …
JACK: (Moves closer to her, and braces himself to grab her if she goes to jump) Why would you want that love? I’ve been dead; it’s nothing I care for. It doesn’t float my boat. (Laughs). You’ve had fears and doubts. I thought of all people you would of come too, it would’ve been me. You only had to ask, Miss Swann.
ELIZABETH: Call me Elizabeth, and thankyou Jack … for not hating me after all my sins … Jack?
JACK: Hmmmm. (To show his listening) What is it Elizabeth?
ELIZABETH: Can I ask you something?
JACK: You just did, but – aye, I see no harm in you asking another.
ELIZABETH: If I were to jump into the sea right now, what would you do? I can give you two options; One – you alert the crew to anchor ship then go in after me or two – do a very stupid, brave and heroic thing and jump in after me. To even risk never catching back up to the Pearl again, and been lost in the middle of the ocean. Just for saving the ‘damsel in distress’, yet again.
JACK: (Doesn’t even wait a heartbeat to answer) Neither, I would leave you to drown. That is my answer. (Starts heading back to his cabin).
ELIZABETH: Jack! Please – wait …
JACK: You are not a bloody ‘damsel in distress’. You have never been, never will and you are not now! You’re a pirate, and pirates live up to their name, I suggest you start doing the same again. (His eyes twinkle, and the corners of his mouth twitch as if he is about to smile, either remembering something or trying to hint something. He then walks away).
ELIZABETH: (Softly to herself) There you go Elizabeth, you have your answer. (Smiles happily again to herself, before she hops of the rail and heads after Jack).OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG OMG AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH SOME1 PLZ TELL ME IF THIS IS TRUE!!! I DON’T KNOW WHAT 2 THINK!!! (SOZ ABOUT THE CAPS BUT I’M SO EXCITED) WHAT DOES THIS LEAKED SCENE MEAN? I FOUND ON ANOTHER FORUM SITE, THEY REKON IT’S REAL!!! WHAT 2 DO WHAT 2 DO! WHAT DO YOU GUYS THINK??? This suggests so many about Elizabeth and Jack. Maybe it is going to work … I dunno some give me advice!!! Or ideas … AH HECK WAT DO U GUYS THINK!!! Lol I’ll calm down now …
damnI thouht it was real! You did really good there!
Based on your normal writing, ie chatspeak, I wouldn't brand you a good writer. I'm not an awesome writer, but it's true, she asked for crisizism. And I didn't really like it, I'm sorry.
It's too detailed for a script for one, what too detailed when their actions are described. The dialog is alittle long for this kind of movie, going back and forth alittle. And I am alittle angry at you not titling it as a fanfiction, I"m tierd of rumours and spoilers so please don't EVER do that again. It doesn't matter if it's all in good fun, you can get into alot of trouble for spreading rumours like that.
Secondly, dont' blame that dude that said it could've been better. She did ask for comments and he gave it to her. It doesn't matter if he could do better or not, I don't think he's really comparing. I didn't like it much either.
I'm sorry for this, but it's the truth, I don't wanna lie to you.
I'm gonna wait for the bashing now.