Here's a piece of my story.
I haven't actually looked it over, or done any editing tonight... That's tomorrow's job.
This is just a part of my 4 Page Dream that my main character is having srug
Alexei suddenly found himself standing back in the middle of the street, looking straight at the house through the black mist and crimson sky. The wind started to pick up again; his pajama bottoms and shirt had replaced the uniform he thought to have on only moments earlier. His clothes flailed in the air, until it came to a sudden stop. Alexei could see clearly now towards the house, and what he saw horrified him; his mother standing on the porch, in her bloody body staring right at him.
The screaming that was heard earlier had now resurfaced, much more agonizing then before. Alexei collapsed once again and covered his ears with his hands. He closed his eyes and kept them shut, not daring to open them.
Originally posted by Vinny Valentine
Here's a piece of my story.I haven't actually looked it over, or done any editing tonight... That's tomorrow's job.
This is just a part of my 4 Page Dream that my main character is having srug
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Alexei suddenly found himself standing back in the middle of the street, looking straight at the house through the black mist and crimson sky. The wind started to pick up again; his pajama bottoms and shirt had replaced the uniform he thought to have on only moments earlier. His clothes flailed in the air, until it came to a sudden stop. Alexei could see clearly now towards the house, and what he saw horrified him; his mother standing on the porch, in her bloody body staring right at him.
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The screaming that was heard earlier had now resurfaced, much more agonizing then before. Alexei collapsed once again and covered his ears with his hands. He closed his eyes and kept them shut, not daring to open them.
I like the paragraph Vinny just some typos but like you said you didn't edit anything yet.
What's your book about or not telling till it's done?
Originally posted by Vinny Valentinesmexxy droolio
Here's a piece of my story.I haven't actually looked it over, or done any editing tonight... That's tomorrow's job.
This is just a part of my 4 Page Dream that my main character is having srug
[b]
Alexei suddenly found himself standing back in the middle of the street, looking straight at the house through the black mist and crimson sky. The wind started to pick up again; his pajama bottoms and shirt had replaced the uniform he thought to have on only moments earlier. His clothes flailed in the air, until it came to a sudden stop. Alexei could see clearly now towards the house, and what he saw horrified him; his mother standing on the porch, in her bloody body staring right at him.
[/B]
The screaming that was heard earlier had now resurfaced, much more agonizing then before. Alexei collapsed once again and covered his ears with his hands. He closed his eyes and kept them shut, not daring to open them.
"his mother standing on the porch, in her bloody body staring right at him."
yeah, you need to edit that
Originally posted by Strangelove
smexxy droolio"his mother standing on the porch, in her bloody body staring right at him."
yeah, you need to edit that
Actually Already did.
I read the paragraph over and was like "The ****?"
Originally posted by Röland
I like the paragraph Vinny just some typos but like you said you didn't edit anything yet.What's your book about or not telling till it's done?
Its about a Guys like named Alexei Mercer, from childhood to death. And how he gets involved in a company that trains kids to become professional killers for a company called Retribution. Then eventually what happens when hes older, what happens when a Government Truce is broken, and when people break off and form a second company.
ermm Yeahh...
Originally posted by Vinny Valentine
Its about a Guys like named Alexei Mercer, from childhood to death. And how he gets involved in a company that trains kids to become professional killers for a company called Retribution. Then eventually what happens when hes older, what happens when a Government Truce is broken, and when people break off and form a second company.ermm Yeahh...
Sounds cool to me, I hope it comes out the way you want it too. thumbup
Originally posted by Vinny Valentine
Actually Already did.I read the paragraph over and was like "The ****?"
Its about a Guys like named Alexei Mercer, from childhood to death. And how he gets involved in a company that trains kids to become professional killers for a company called Retribution. Then eventually what happens when hes older, what happens when a Government Truce is broken, and when people break off and form a second company.
ermm Yeahh...
So the dream is a psychologial backlash from this training then?
Alexei Mercer, see your better at names.