My Manga/Anime

Originally posted by Ultimate Hulk43
Nice calls. 😉 For one, if he were like Goku, he'd be described as stupid, loving, and a competitive person. Is my character like that? No, because he'll be a serious character but won't be arrogant so don't try to say "Vegeta, check.". So you can uncheck that. Also, this is not like Naruto because they are not going there to become something or someone or whatever. It's like a real martial arts school except it's more advanced. Also, by forms I never said they'd get golden auras, green eyes, and golden hair? Also, I never recalled any of the humans getting new foms. In fact, since you want to be a prick, I won't be responding to anything you say from here on since you want to be an idiot.

Oh, and it would be wise not to call people names when they themselves have done no such thing.

Sorry for the double post but I reread what I wrote and saw that it could be taken a different way from what my intentions were...I'm not trying to make you feel stupid, dumb, bad, ignorant, etc. I'm trying to help you; I'm trying to make your writing, your story telling, and over all creativity better. If you don't want my help, fine, I'll leave and not post in your thread again, but I was truly trying to help you.

Originally posted by Ultimate Hulk43
It's not unoriginal. The fact is, if you are raised by humans & have no recollection of where you're from, of course you're going to think you're human. But, I'm going to work on it some more anyway to work out the kinks.

I've seen that sort of think in way too many anime and manga. I can't see it as anything but unoriginal anymore.

Originally posted by Darth Macabre
A) You put your "idea" out to be criticized...So if you don't want people to tell you the truth and instead want them to lie and say "oh, wow, you got yourself a wonderfully clever idea!" then you should stipulate it in your first post; or, of course, don't post your idea, and allow it to stay in the world we like to call your mind. B) THe main character doesn't know he's an alien and goes around thinking he's human; that's Goku right there. C) Are they going to school to learn how to fight or not? If they are, then it's like Naruto, so yeah... D) You lack the knowledge to understand that all of your ideas are stereotypical concepts that are found in most, if not all, shonen mangas. Face it, your story lacks originality; did I say it would be automatically bad? No, all I said was that it was trite. Simple as that.

Oh, and it would be wise not to call people names when they themselves have done no such thing.

A) That's not Goku, there are a lot of characters who wonder what they are so that's not Goku. He'd be Goku if they had the exact same personalities. B) They aren't going to the school to learn how to fight, just to increase their powers so that's not Naruto. C) My story doesn't lack originality & it's not stereotypical concepts that are found in most manga.

Originally posted by Ultimate Hulk43
Well, basically, the main character, Sadiki, is from another planet but as a kid he thinks he's a regular human. So, he & a lot other kids enlist in this special school that will help increase their powers & give them the best martial arts training in the world. As they become older, both the humans & aliens surpass each other but will also learn certain things about their race. Also, there are no golden haired warriors but there will be forms for almost everyone.

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So its DBZ, Naruto, X-Men and a random SuperSentai?

Not exactly original especially when you have to start the bildungsroman aspect to develop the characters.

It could be awsome but it's still a stock story line.

I'm getting really annoyed of people calling this a mixtured of DB/Z & Naruto when it clearly isn't. In DB/Z, Goku & crew are trying to find the dragonballs. In my story, is there a mention of any mystical objects that grant wishes? No. In Naruto, Naruto is trying to earn a ranking & become the best in his village. Is my character trying to do that? No. He's trying to enhance the skills he already has so he can be stronger, he's not trying to become the best in his village. Also, Sadiki is nothing like Goku except for the fact that they think they are humans at the beginning of the story. Does Sadiki come from a planet destroying race? No, he doesn't. Is Sadiki uneducated like Goku yet loving & caring? No, he isn't. You all are determined to say it's a mixture of this & that yet you haven't even bothered to question me to actually learn what this is truly about.

Originally posted by Ultimate Hulk43
In Naruto, Naruto is trying to earn a ranking & become the best in his village. Is my character trying to do that? No. He's trying to enhance the skills he already has so he can be stronger, he's not trying to become the best in his village.

Still makes him like any Shonen hero.

Originally posted by Ultimate Hulk43
Also, Sadiki is nothing like Goku except for the fact that they think they are humans at the beginning of the story.

Various forms.

Originally posted by Ultimate Hulk43
You all are determined to say it's a mixture of this & that yet you haven't even bothered to question me to actually learn what this is truly about.

What is it truly about.

Originally posted by D_A_R_E

If you ask me, your idea lacks orginality. This type of storyline has been used multiple times in manga and anime history. If you're intending to break free from that sterotypical type of storyline common in Shonen styles, you have got to have one hell of a twist up your sleeve!

ok yes most of what uve told us sounds like u found all your favorite things in animes and slapped them into one big mess, which usually turns out to be shit, since your idea hasnt been taken to hmm enywhere yet, u have to show us whats different than other animes, alot of times animes take a similar idea as another, but then twist it in a whole new direction, show us how your twisting all these things, what makes them different than any other, and the fact is how can americna people make anime, i never truly understood that, how is it considered anime, but enyways your writing a story line, not drawing correct?..........
right now your ideas sound too much like so many animes that i dont know where your even going to take this, it sounds like yu yu hakasho, and bleach, and dbz, and so many different animes/mangas, that its making my interest rate go to about 0

come up with something original and mind blowing that will make us get into it, maybe the twist will be great, but not just one twist in a story can make it completly different than other mangas, u still need more

Originally posted by Ultimate Hulk43
A) That's not Goku, there are a lot of characters who wonder what they are so that's not Goku. He'd be Goku if they had the exact same personalities. B) They aren't going to the school to learn how to fight, just to increase their powers so that's not Naruto. C) My story doesn't lack originality & it's not stereotypical concepts that are found in most manga.

Originally posted by Symmetric Chaos
Still makes him like any Shonen hero.

Various forms.

What is it truly about.

It's about him learning about who he is which is more like Smallville so to speak. The twist is something that I want to put a lot of work into but he's basically trying to learn about his people & what happened, especially after he learns that there is one other survivor.

Ask me specific questions so I can share more information.

Okay, how about this, something tragic happens to Sadiki's adopted father & his father tells him of this academy that could train & take care of him. It's like an orphanage of sorts except they keep them & train them until they are in their teens & are able to fully defend themselves. So, this is where our heroes meet up & eventually they just leave the academy. After having a few battles, they decide to stick together but after one big epic battle before they become adults, they break up. Years later, they meet up again to reminisce & have to end up saving the world. Along the way, Sadiki learns that he's not from Earth & that his homeworld has already been destroyed but there is one other survivor than him (who will become a hero as well).

How's that?

Originally posted by Ultimate Hulk43
Okay, how about this, something tragic happens to Sadiki's adopted father & his father tells him of this academy that could train & take care of him. It's like an orphanage of sorts except they keep them & train them until they are in their teens & are able to fully defend themselves. So, this is where our heroes meet up & eventually they just leave the academy. After having a few battles, they decide to stick together but after one big epic battle before they become adults, they break up. Years later, they meet up again to reminisce & have to end up saving the world. Along the way, Sadiki learns that he's not from Earth & that his homeworld has already been destroyed but there is one other survivor than him (who will become a hero as well).

How's that?

That could work very well if written properly.

See, I'm a natural born writer. 😉

Any questions about the characters?

I have some ideas I'm going to be working on but they will be kind of close to some things that occured in DBZ.