Willo, the pirates never got around to branding James. That was the next part I was going to post, remember? The pirates were in the middle of a party, not sleeping. 😛
When did Swann get shot? I had him go off with Barbossa, Gibbs and Marty. So where did he get shot and killed? And I think that Elizabeth's reaction to his death needs to be written out. It's too big to just gloss over.
At least, that's my opinion. 😄 Since I have the branding scene and such written out, maybe we can insert it later, right? 😛 Since I spent so long on the darn thing, I'd hate for it to go to waste.
Hey Mina, if it's ok with you, I was going to post next, but I have a throbbing headache so I'll have to wait until morning. I'll get everyone back onto the ships and on their way, and then we can have tons of fun character interaction.
I hope that's ok with you, and I'll even make up a new summary. 😄
hello everyone!!! WOW this story is going GREAT!
fav line so far probably "scot free" no, english free!" hahahaha so funny.
i'm sorry i havent been on at all--- in the middle of traveling. hopefully i'll get back in time to contribute some!!! you guys are doing amazing. im loving the story. please take your time. i want to get in on some jack/liz action when poor will goes. lol. XOXOXO!
Originally posted by Surreal_44
Hey Mina, if it's ok with you, I was going to post next, but I have a throbbing headache so I'll have to wait until morning. I'll get everyone back onto the ships and on their way, and then we can have tons of fun character interaction.I hope that's ok with you, and I'll even make up a new summary. 😄
You go ahead. It's quiet alright. It would be a great deal of help. I'm a bit lost.
Originally posted by katelovespiratecant wait till you add some! your a genius too!
hello everyone!!! WOW this story is going GREAT!
fav line so far probably "scot free" no, english free!" hahahaha so funny.
i'm sorry i havent been on at all--- in the middle of traveling. hopefully i'll get back in time to contribute some!!! you guys are doing amazing. im loving the story. please take your time. i want to get in on some jack/liz action when poor will goes. lol. XOXOXO!
Here is the next part, and later I will write up the summary, but I need sleep. 😄
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SAO’S PALACE – INSIDE
(The inside of Sao’s palace is a disaster now after two huge battles have taken place. Bodies litter the floor, although not everyone is dead. Elizabeth is looking at the piece of eight that Sao has given her while Barbossa looks on with interest.)
Elizabeth: Is this what I think it is?
Barbossa: It appears to be so, missy.
(James approaches Elizabeth, supported by Will and Anne.)
Will: What is it? What was Sao telling you to share?
Barbossa: (to James) You look dreadful.
James: (makes a face and turns back to Elizabeth) You know what this is?
(Jack and Gibbs come over. Jack is scowling slightly, Gibbs seems to be thrilled with how things are turning out.)
Gibbs: That there is a piece of eight.
(At the confused expressions on Will and James’ faces, Gibbs explains.)
Gibbs: Pirate lords pass these on to their heirs when the time comes for them to retire, or if they have time, when they die. Whoever receives it inherits the property of the one who gave it to them.
Elizabeth: (uncertainly) Sao handed it to me, but he said he wanted James and I to share it.
Barbossa: Aye, it’s never been done before.
James: (sarcastic, but he sounds weak) So kind of him to think of me at his dying moment.
Barbossa: It was. He must have seen something in you that he liked to pass this onto you. To both of you.
Anne: I hate to break up this joyous moment, but the commodore here is about to fall over.
James: (tries to stand up straighter) I am not!
Anne: (pokes him gently and watches him sway) Of course not. How silly of me.
(James scowls but has no response. He leans a bit more heavily against Will and presses a hand to his aching head.)
James: We need to decide what to do.
Swann: First you’re going to sit down.
(Swann pushes James onto a cushion. The commodore doesn’t even bother struggling, a sure sign of how weak and exhausted he really is.)
Swann: Now, I suggest you find someone who can tell you what exactly it is that you have inherited so that we may move on. There is no telling when Beckett might return.
(A small elegant man comes racing out of the shadows. He stands before Elizabeth and bows to her, then he turns to James and bows to him as well.)
Ming: I am Ming. I am the keeper of all of Sao Feng’s accounts. I would be delighted to be of service to you.
James: (dryly) I’m so sure. Tell us then, Ming. What all have we gained?
Ming: Very good, sir. You and the lady have inherited quite the estate. There is his home, of course, and –
James: Pardon me, but what about ships?
(Elizabeth looks sharply at James and sees that he is rapidly losing all color in his face. Ming also notices and hastens to speak up.)
Ming: Oh, of course. Sao Feng has a fleet of five ships. (a weighted pause before he continues) There would have been more, but as you are the renowned pirate hunter, I’m sure you –
Norrington: Yes, yes. Let’s not revisit that topic again, shall we?
Ming: As you wish. There is also the matter of his other investments and businesses.
Swann: (surprised) Sao Feng had businesses?
Ming: Oh yes. Sao Feng was a firm believer in investing the money that he stole. He has funded a growing acupuncture business, as well as investing in bath houses…
(Ming continues to list Sao Feng’s other numerous investments, including candle making and, oddly enough, noodles.)
SAO’S PALACE – OUTSIDE
(Cho, Sao Feng’s recently rescued brother, is glowering at the gathered pirates inside. He is surrounded by his own men but for the moment he holds them back, realizing that another battle with these people would be futile at the moment.)
Cho: I am his brother, yet he passed me over to give his inheritance to that pathetic man and that woman. (to his second in command) Come, we must make plans.
(Cho and his men quietly leave the estate.)
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SAO’S PALACE – INSIDE
Barbossa: It be nearly dawn. When is your ship returning, commodore?
(Norrington jerks slightly, and looks surprised to realize that he’d nearly dozed off.)
Norrington: I’m sorry…what did you say?
Barbossa: When’s yer ship coming in, Norrington?
Norrington: Dawn.
(Elizabeth and Will both offer to help Norrington stand. It takes a bit of effort, but finally they manage to help him to his feet. James wobbles slightly and ends up putting most of his weight on Elizabeth. Anne, who had been tending to one of the injured Chinese pirates, looks James over with a critical eye.)
Anne: Where are his things? He cannot go outside like this.
(A servant girl rushes out of the room and hastily returns a few moments later with James shirt and coat. Anne takes it from her and helps James put them on. It obviously is a painful process, and it seems to wear him out even further.)
Elizabeth: We’ll discuss what needs to be done as we go to the docks.
James: (tired voice) Agreed.
(The group exits the estate as well, unaware that Cho is still alive and remains a threat to them.)
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THE DOCKS – DAWN
(The group arrives at the docks. There is a spirited discussion going on between James, Will, Elizabeth and Jack about who goes on which ship.)
James: I say that we all remain on the same ship, at least for now. We don’t know these crews at all, and until we can sort out which ones to trust, we can’t risk any of the people we actually can trust.
Jack: We need to go after Beckett, to get my Pearl back.
Barbossa: That be my ship you’re referring to.
Jack: No, it’s my ship.
Barbossa: But I captained it for longer.
Jack: Ah, but I was captain first.
James: It’s a lovely ship; perhaps Elizabeth and I will just have to commandeer it from you gentlemen.
(He tries to laugh at the expressions on both the men’s faces, and instead ends up coughing.)
Anne: The ship is getting ready to dock, I see. Just in time. We must get the commodore on board and get him warmed up.
Elizabeth: (suspiciously) You seem anxious to help him suddenly. Do you know what you’re really doing?
Anne: (coolly) My father is a doctor, and I was a student of his for many years. I believe that yes, I can be of service to him.
James: (slumps a little more in Will and Elizabeth’s grasp) No more arguing. We all remain on the same ship for now, but we can have the others follow. Elizabeth…I trust you and Will to act in my stead both on the Intrepid and…and the other ships.
Elizabeth: (alarmed) James!
(James doesn’t respond, but instead his eyes roll up into the back of his head and he starts to fall. Will manages to catch him a bit awkwardly, and with Elizabeth’s help, the stretch him onto the wooden dock.)
Anne: (kneels beside James) He’s burning up. Send for a litter and make sure that the ship is well stocked with fresh water and linens.
(Barbossa calls out orders to the men who are standing on the deck of the Intrepid, and a flurry of activity explodes on the ship as the men realize their leader is injured.)
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Ok, I leave it up to someone else to get everyone on the ship. Remember, James is injured and is unconscious, so he can't do too much. Also, Anne is the daughter of a doctor, so she is going to attempt to help him.
The five ships Elizabeth and James inherited will be asked to follow the Intrepid. This may seem odd since the crews might not be trustworthy, but the Intrepid is a full battle-ship, much like the Dauntless, so she could probably take on a few of them -- and win. James also has two other naval ships out on the high seas somewhere (at least I thought he did), so he has them as back-up.
More of a summary will follow later, after I've gotten some sleep.
Same scene
(Jack starts eyeing the other ships. He begins to walk towards one of them.)
Will: Where are you going?
Jack: I'm taking Mr. Gibbs and am captaining this one. You can take the Intrepid and our new pirate lords can take the Pearl before Barbossa does. (hesitates) Oh, yeah. (throws something to him)
Will: (catches it. It is the compass) Fine time for you to give this to me now! (starts talking like Jack) William, I shall give you my compass in exchange that you battle Davy Jones for me! (ends impression) Do you expect me to give this to Beckett now?
Jack: First of all, I speak more from the diaphram than the throat. Second of all, I don't expect you to take it to Beckett. I expect you to use it if you need.
Will: It doesn't point north. It's useless.
Jack: Yes to the second, but not so much anything else.
Will: What?
Jack: Open it.
(Will opens it. The arrow points towards the Intrepid.)
Jack: It points simply to what you want. You will want to find Beckett since Beckett has the heart of Davy Jones, and your ship there will lead us to him.
Will: I don't want a ship. It doesn't work.
Jack: Think of who's inside the ship, mate. It's all about imagination.
Will: You'll want it back?
Jack: Take as long as you need with it. Mr. Gibbs!
Gibbs: Aye, captain.
Jack: The one looks like a beauty does it not? Not one to equal the Pearl in any respect...
Gibbs: She'll do fine, Jack. If you don't mind me sayin,' though, I feel t'would be better to all stay together. The Commodore's going to have to make a quick recovery as it is and Miss Elizabeth's never captained a ship before.
Will: Maybe we should all stay together.
Jack: So no one wants to try this lovely lady on for size with me? Is that what I'm hearing? (taps the ship) Solid.
Mr. Gibbs: Captain's orders, Will. (pats him on the back and boards with Jack right behind him. Will is left alone on the dock to board his own ship. He pockets the compass.)
CUT TO...the PEARL
(In a few chaotic moments, Will switches captainage of the Intrepid and the Pearl. He gives Elizabeth a brief kiss as she runs down, turning to assist in helping James onto the Pearl. Swann is close behind them. Groves runs up behind them.)
Groves: Commodore Norrington's not going anywhere without me.
James: Bloody hell, always moving. What's wrong with Turner?
Anne: Methinks it wasn't his full idea.
(Elizabeth turns back to look at Will and sees a familiar object attached to his belt.)
Elizabeth: Will?
(But they're too far away. They board the Pearl and Anne immediately takes James below decks. She sets him down and he passes out almost as soon as he hits the floor.)
CUT TO DECK OF THE PEARL
(Elizabeth sees her new crew all lined up, knowing she won't be able to trust at least some of them.)
Elizabeth: We'll be leading the other three ships along with the Intrepid to Lord Cutler Beckett himself. (is glad to hear grunts of disdain at the mention of Beckett) Our mission is to recover the heart of Davy Jones.
Pirate: It's a dangerous object to crave, Captain.
Elizabeth: I thought it best to be honest with all of you. (sees them nod in agreement. Maybe she can trust them) Cast off! (they cheer)
(Elizabeth gazes out at her other ships when she sees several approaching. Getting out a spyglass, she sees they are the remainder of Sao's men, faithful to Cho.)
Elizabeth: You there.
Li: Me?
Elizabeth: Who was first mate of this ship?
Li: I was, captain.
Elizabeth: Go down and wake the Commodore. It doesn't matter how. Go.
(Li rushes below decks)
Fun post, Surreal. Now you or Kate or whoever can give James some fun and create a great battle scene. As for who's captaining each ship, about everyone has switched which probably wasted their time and allowed Cho to catch up to them.
Will: The Intrepid
Elizabeth and James: The Pearl These two ships are in front
Barbossa: His own, Marty, Cotton, Pintel, and Ragetti are with Barbossa
Jack: His own. Gibbs is with him
Someone else can captain the remainder.
Oh, I'm sorry. I forgot the Pearl got dragged off. Okay, just substitute. Jack doesn't want to be on the same ship as Barbossa anyway, so he's still on his regular ship and Liz and James are still on theirs The Empress. How's that? Sorry. I keep forgetting the tiny details of this story. The dialogue still fits if you sub things. The one on fanfiction.net will be edited and make tons more sense.