Originally posted by The Phantom
PUT IN THE PART WITHSpoiler:
MCGONAGAL RIDING THE DESKS YELLING "CHARGE!"Also the part when Mrs Weasley jumped into the fight with Bella yelling "NOT MY DAUGHTER, YOU *****!"
Put those two things in the movie and I'd give it two thumbs up.
Deffinately two things that shouldnt be cut.
Scene one:
Two men appear on a deserted street. For a second they point their wands at one another and, realizing they know eachother, hastily stow them.They walk up to the door of Malfoy Manor, and knock.
Voldemort: Enter
Both men enter the house to find a group of death eaters sitting in a circle. Snape sits next to Voldemort.
What news do you have for me?
Snape: My lord, the Order intend to move Potter to a safehouse this Saturday night. It is unlikely that they will have help from the ministry, which they suspect we have infiltrated.
Some of the death eater laugh (not loud, just...chuckles)
Voldemort: And you, Macnair*, did you complete your task?
Macnair: I have succeeded in placing the imperius curse on Thicknesse, he is now in our complete control.
Voldemort: This is a good start. Soon enough the minister will be unkowingly surrounded by our people and I will be able to set the plan in motion.
Snape: As for our connections in the Department of Magical Transport, we will be able to kn-
Voldemort: The Order will not use a traceable way of transportation. They are aware that portkeys and the Floo network are being closely watched. He will be forced to move in the open. He is a sitting duck.
A person unconcious floating in the center of the circle stirs.
I shall need a new wand for when I face Potter. Lucius, I see no need for you to have a wand any longer.
Lucius is shocked
Lucius- My lor-
Voldemort: Your wand Lucius. I have noticed you are very hesitant lately and do not seem to be ready to devote yourself fully to our cause. Does my presence displease you? Perhaps, it disturbs you?
Lucius hands his wand to Voldemort.
Lucius: I am fully devoted my lord. I would nev-
Voldemort: Liesss.
He continues to hiss until a giant snake comes and rests on the corner of his chair.
Bellatrix: We live to serve you. We are all pleased that you have chosen to reside in Malfoy Manor.
Voldemort gives a slight, appreciative smile.
Voldemort: Severus, do you recognize our guest?
Snape gives an affirmative nod
Draco?
Draco looks at Voldemort but remains silent.
For those of you who do not know, this is Charity Burbage, who recently taught muggle studies at Hogwarts. She has
*Changed from Yaxley to Macnair so as to not have to introduce new characters
Originally posted by allofyousuckkk
Scene one:
Two men appear on a deserted street. For a second they point their wands at one another and, realizing they know eachother, hastily stow them.They walk up to the door of Malfoy Manor, and knock.Voldemort: Enter
Both men enter the house to find a group of death eaters sitting in a circle. Snape sits next to Voldemort.
What news do you have for me?Snape: My lord, the Order intend to move Potter to a safehouse this Saturday night. It is unlikely that they will have help from the ministry, which they suspect we have infiltrated.
Some of the death eater laugh (not loud, just...chuckles)Voldemort: And you, Macnair*, did you complete your task?
Macnair: I have succeeded in placing the imperius curse on Thicknesse, he is now in our complete control.
Voldemort: This is a good start. Soon enough the minister will be unkowingly surrounded by our people and I will be able to set the plan in motion.
Snape: As for our connections in the Department of Magical Transport, we will be able to kn-
Voldemort: The Order will not use a traceable way of transportation. They are aware that portkeys and the Floo network are being closely watched. He will be forced to move in the open. He is a sitting duck.
A person unconcious floating in the center of the circle stirs.
I shall need a new wand for when I face Potter. Lucius, I see no need for you to have a wand any longer.
Lucius is shockedLucius- My lor-
Voldemort: Your wand Lucius. I have noticed you are very hesitant lately and do not seem to be ready to devote yourself fully to our cause. Does my presence displease you? Perhaps, it disturbs you?
Lucius hands his wand to Voldemort.Lucius: I am fully devoted my lord. I would nev-
Voldemort: Liesss.
He continues to hiss until a giant snake comes and rests on the corner of his chair.Bellatrix: We live to serve you. We are all pleased that you have chosen to reside in Malfoy Manor.
Voldemort gives a slight, appreciative smile.Voldemort: Severus, do you recognize our guest?
Snape gives an affirmative nod
Draco?
Draco looks at Voldemort but remains silent.
For those of you who do not know, this is Charity Burbage, who recently taught muggle studies at Hogwarts. She has*Changed from Yaxley to Macnair so as to not have to introduce new characters
That's not a screenplay. If you plan on writing a screenplay, good luck to you, but you need to look at a hell of a lot of them before you attempt your own. Judging by this effort, you have never seen a screenplay before and try not to entertain the delusion that it may be read. But as I said, good luck to you.
Originally posted by Arianna644 doesn't exist? The book is 759 pages long.... what, did they skip one?
page 644 doesn't exist... I think it's cool idea to write the script because I think the warner brother ones are pants! JKR lives like a five min walk from my house, I can PM you her address if you ask nicley.