I don't want to seem like the sour apple here but I think your poetry lacks...I don't...that little something something that lets the reader know what the poems about.
The first poem left me with a nagging of a girl getting ready for a date. I wasn't so sure the imagery painted something, that though was a stretch.
The second poem reminded me of articles in papers and magazines. Now for this I am positive was not the intention of the poem. The stanza's don't seem to flow to form one coherent image and/or story, which makes it very confusing to determine what it is your trying to say. Maybe a title will make it easier to see what it is you are trying to write.
That's my two cents.
Originally posted by Punkyhermy
I didn’t hear the wind
That threw to the worn
Out parquet white
Sheets faced down.Blank rectangles of
Whiteness at my
Chilled feet
Lay threatened
To forever stay.But I was looking
at the distance
as Murkyness
dubbed it unseen.
the subject seems so very simple and random 😄