carnages bars

aww yeah here he is!

the fire burns and burns
reflecting life as it turns
like broken glass it shatters
deeper into the battle
running with the wolves
and sliding thru dreams
charging down the behemoth
facing our fears
cold hands surround you
knee deep in the dirt
chilling you to the bone
dragging you down
dig your way out
into the sun
for the time has come to step back
AND TAKE WHAT YOU ROBBED FROM ME!!!

Thats cool, but I think you need to add some punctuation, its a very quick tempo kinda makes it rather irratic to read as your too involved in the pace rather than the subject.

other than that I like it. 😄 its good to see some one new in here.

Originally posted by Lara
Thats cool, but I think you need to add some punctuation, its a very quick tempo kinda makes it rather irratic to read as your too involved in the pace rather than the subject.

other than that I like it. 😄 its good to see some one new in here.

I like to check out the new stuff in here. It used to ba alot busier its a shame its so quiet.

I'm just checking it out. I read alot more into things than some people would like and others think I'm psychic or some thing 😂

Carnagie's.