Originally posted by MrMind
to be fair there is no scat hooker, it's just a special request thing, you gotta find a girl who's willing to shit on your dick (many do they don't care as long as you are not the one pooping on them) and I prefer their poop on me so it's actually not that hard to doobviously you gotta pay extra but it's worth it, dirty anal is the only way to live
The conversations who have with the prostitutes must be hilarious.
Anybody want to discuss the Attack on Titan anime finale? I've browsed some Reddit threads but there are things that nobody is discussing. Happy to discuss with spoiler tags.
Spoiler:
Seriously, why is nobody discussing the scene showing that the founder Ymir never actually saved King Fritz from the assassination attempt? That King Fritz died and she just kept his legacy moving forward because she couldn't let go of the love she had for the family that resulted? An obvious parallel with Mikasa's uncompromising love for Eren for the family she enjoyed despite all of his later horrible deeds???
I don't get why nobody talks about this. It recontextualizes a sh1t ton.
I thought #0 issues were usually setup. This one is a semi-separate story that sort of kicks off the premise of the story, with a tease of the actual main character.
Here:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Aw7fi909M5b-oNbEqCwoHZfmXiCsfBw8/view?usp=drive_link
Originally posted by ODGIs it not similar to God Emperor of Dune where Leto Atredes II realized he basically needed to become the bad guy in order to unite the universe?
Anybody want to discuss the Attack on Titan anime finale? I've browsed some Reddit threads but there are things that nobody is discussing. Happy to discuss with spoiler tags.Spoiler:
Seriously, why is nobody discussing the scene showing that the founder Ymir never actually saved King Fritz from the assassination attempt? That King Fritz died and she just kept his legacy moving forward because she couldn't let go of the love she had for the family that resulted? An obvious parallel with Mikasa's uncompromising love for Eren for the family she enjoyed despite all of his later horrible deeds???I don't get why nobody talks about this. It recontextualizes a sh1t ton.
Originally posted by StiltmanFTW
Men's room attendant, most likely.
Originally posted by BlightI think there are disagreements over it but the way I viewed it was that
Is it not similar to God Emperor of Dune where Leto Atredes II realized he basically needed to become the bad guy in order to unite the universe?
Spoiler:
Eren just honestly hated what he saw of the world beyond Paradis' shores. He was so excited to escape the "cage" of Paradis because he expected wonder and freedom due to Armin's unabashed hope via his book when they were kids.Instead, Eren discovered that what lay beyond Paradis' shores were just more enemies and even more of humanity's uglinesss. IMHO, Eren carried out the Rumbling not to establish a common enemy to save humanity like King Fritz & the Tybur family but to legitimately destroy the world.
Look at Armin's conversation with Eren in the Paths. Armin is describing the whole common enemy to humanity excuse for Eren post hoc. If you follow the conversation and their reactions, it's what Armin wishes was the case. And Eren was so guilty he couldn't bring himself to disagree with that tragically heroic notion.
But both Armin and Eren knew the truth. Eren wasn't special. He wasn't a tragic hero. He was an angry fool who was given power and did the absolute worst with it. It's why Armin tells him that he'll be with Eren forever in Hell together. It's because they both deserve it. Eren for what he did in rage. And Armin for inspiring Eren's hope, seeing that hope dashed, and being incapable of pulling Eren back from his rage.
Anyway, I've only read summaries of God Emperor of Dune. Struck me as pretentious. But maybe I should give it a legitimate chance and read the actual book. Attack on Titan though? Easily in my top 3 anime. Probably will be my favorite anime once I've had enough time processing the ending.
Originally posted by Blight
I thought #0 issues were usually setup. This one is a semi-separate story that sort of kicks off the premise of the story, with a tease of the actual main character.
Originally posted by Blight
Here:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Aw7fi909M5b-oNbEqCwoHZfmXiCsfBw8/view?usp=drive_link
In terms of the art. I understand that this is AI-generated, but I'm still going to critique it as if it wasn't. The paneling is done poorly, the scenes are too cluttered, and it's far too volatile.
Paneling is a science in itself. The idea is to subconsciously guide the reader through the comic.
As someone who reads both comics and manga I'm used to reading panels in both directions (left to right, and right to left) and there was one point in this comic where I started reading from right to left before I caught myself (it was in the hallway with the old men on the floor). The right panel just pops out so much more than he left. It knocks you out of the reading experience. Also, you want to avoid characters looking at the reader. There's a reason why movie actors are trained not to look directly into the camera. Like most animals, we're very sensitive to eyes and it can similarly take us out of the experience.
The scenes being too cluttered is the next point. Our eyes are used to focus on one thing at a time, when there's a lot of unnecessary details it just ends up feeling like a directionless cluster-****. This is why details tend to be less prevalent in backgrounds. Panels are not supposed to be paintings.
The next point is probably the most notable so I'm not going to speak too much about it, but it's the change in art style, character design, clothing, coloring, lighting, number of fingers, etc. I mean the mom was fairly young-looking in some pages but in one she's a grey-haired and aged. Luckily there were only two notable characters so it wasn't too difficult to figure out who was who. Then there was the bloodshot eyes ranging from being bloodshot to glowing bright red. Also, the stair-case scenes have to go.
As far as the writing was concerned, the main critique would be explaino. Explaino is a term used in comics to refer to excessive narration that explains what what's can be inferred from the visuals and dialogue. It's a visual medium, so you want to rely on the visuals. There's also the rule of "25 words per panel, preferably half."
As for the title. It feels a bit too close to The Omega Men, which is a DC trademark. Now, I'm no lawyer, but I would intuitively stay away from it. The logo doesn't really pop either. You should be able to recognize it with bad eyesight on a newstand 10 paces away.
I'm hoping with an artist a lot of this will be rectified so that there will be a back-and-forth on what will work for the page. As stated before this was a rough estimate and storyboarding using an altogether flawed source of art (every action scene is inaccurate to my actual script so an artist would need the script more than the storyboard).
I agree with most of this, though. I should probably cut down on the wordage (even though I actually like the Chris Claremont styled description in comics, it probably doesn't present itself well to modern comics. I thnk I actually need to have panels within the first hallway scene just with a slightly "zoomed in" for the moments that matter. I think when it's actually done in that way it will lead the reader more correctly through the page.
Disagree on the eye contact. I'm going off of memory but the only times I recall there being eye contact is during the incredibly uncomfortable scenes where Damon is being attacked. I want the reader to be uncomfortable at that point. I think there's one where Damon is looking at the reader from his doorway afraid, one where Mr Gesualdi is looking directly at us/him, and one where his mom is looking directly at us/him. Are there any in the non-confrontational scenes? If there are that's a mistake that is easily corrected when there's an artist.
The different styles is obviously going to be corrected when there is an actual artist.
The title is a holdover from a treatment I had created about a zombie apocalypse back in 2004, so I'm not particularly married to the name but haven't come up with a better one yet. I doubt there would be any trademark infringement or confusion, or else another book titled "The Omega Children" (not trademarked) would have been attacked. DC doesn't have the rights to "Omega x". It'd be an incredibly hard fought battle to claim otherwise, and there is no trademark for Omega Children outside of Adjustable chairs and an abandoned trademark for Dietary supplements called "Omega Child".
Thank you so much for reading it and giving me notes! I very much appreciate the feedback and will take it heavily into consideration when I finally am able to lock down an artist. I definitely am a novice when it comes to specific panelling. A lot of the time I was just throwing things down, and it was especially infuriating to make AI art that didn't at all match what I wanted, which made panelling all the harder.
[EDIT] If that's what a #0 issue is then this is probably more like a 1st issue. I'm just kind of uncomfortable with a first issue having almost no true introduction of the main character. This is more like a prologue chapter of a book where it's tangential to the main plot and serves as lore building to the world.
