before i logged on to kmc, i read your story bit. you did a great job for a fairly first time writer. of stories that is. there were a few detials that i should've mentioned to you, but that's okay. the bit still came out really good. i'm not sure how strong and emotionally tough we should make gabriel there. but that's okay. he needs to seem human. even though he knows how to control his emotions for so many years. blah blah. listen to me ramble on! lmao nice on the convo! got any input for me before i start my bit? like, just in case you had more ideas for your bit but didn't add them on. that sort of thing is what i mean when i ask for your input before i start my bit.
yeah, you had his emotions come through and surface so easily. in my bit, i was portraying him as having a strong hold on masking his inner tormiol and emotions. leave emotions at the door and business before people he works with. but your way was perfectly understandle. so don't worry if it sounded bad. your are still adjusting to the story world and i don't blame you. you'll soon get used to it. after a page or so of the story. i believe in you. ^.^
yeah, dracula can be left for discussion later on in the story. since gabriel left the council so abruptly like he did.
sorry, i have to take my leave now. my mom is making me get off the comp. so that i can get some sleep and wake in time for this sleepoever thing at a friend's house later today. (it's only 2:20 am right now!) so far for the story, i got one paragraph accomplished. i'm not done with my bit, so sadly i have to stop there until my return. i'll be back on thursday.
as i write my story bits, to aide my mind to find the correct words to say, i listen to evanesense on my boombox. the gothic rock music matches the story well. as in the vampire sense and all. yah dig? anyways, as i was typing up and rereading my bit as "my immortal" was playing over the speakers, i get a bit teary and a few lone tears fell from my ears. from such real seeming memories of that particularly painful and emotional scene from the movie.
Concept Story Illustrations (Memories)
here are some van helsing icons that depic anna valerious's death and funeral scene that i thought would help you and to somewhat illustrate the paragraph i typed up for the story thread before i left a day or so ago...
Source (Van Helsing Icons): http://www.livejournal.com/community/vanhelsingicons/27819.html#cutid1
...this is the scene after gabriel defeated dracula in his werewolf form and anna injects the cure into him just as he crushes her to death from werewolf rage. doesn't realize what he's done until he's too late...*sniff*
Source (Van Helsing Icons): http://www.livejournal.com/community/vanhelsingicons/29759.html#cutid1
...after the battle, gabriel and carl took anna's body to be prepared for a somewhat proper funeral outside near the sea. Lay her body on a bed of straw and use a torch to burn what's left of her. Her soul ascends to heaven along with the rest of her family. also, saying one last goodbye and thank you to gabriel. *sniff*
Van Helsing Icons (homepage/mainpage): http://www.livejournal.com/community/vanhelsingicons/
i'm not sure if gabriel should continue his angst about illyria and/or anna...for after he sees the moon, i want him to go back inside. for the moon brings too much pain back to mind. but not to get to bed. continue wandering. maybe check out the labs where the scientists/monks are working? we didn't have carl go to bed yet right?