EARLY HOGWARTS james and lillys story

Started by paliwal_ruppal18 pages

Sorry but it is not Snape here.

And with that they both ran to the Gryffindor tower only to meet Lucius Malfoy and few Slytherins in their way.

“Oh! See who do we have here. It’s our Griffindor seeker and his girlfriend. Good morning Potty Potter,”
Lucius Malfoy a seventh year Slytherin sneered.
The slytherins standing behind him all laughed.
“Shut up Malfoy! Mind your language,” James said.
“James!” Lily said tried to control her temper. “Lucius continue your stupid things and you will have a dozen of detentions in your pocket already. If you don’t remember than for your sake I will like to tell you that we are prefects.”

“Shut your bloody mouth Mudblood.”

“How dare you say that to her, you filthy Slytherin,” James said angrily.
He had taken out his wand and had it pointed at Malfoy’s heart.

“And do I have to listen to you, do I Crabbe and Goyle?”
The two giant Slytherins who were always eating something or the other shook their ugly fat heads.

“Stupefy” Lucius yelled his wand pointed at James’ heart.
But James was too old a bird to be caught with chaff.

“Petrificus Totalus” James yelled in return.

“Stop it both of you“ came a gruffy voice.

“Oh look here is the gamekeeper of Hogwarts behaving like a lord,” one of the Slytherins said.

“You go on James, Lily,” Hagrid said.

“But,”

“Yeah come on James It is lunch time. Let Hagrid handle them,” Lily said.

But James was reluctant to leave Hagrid alone with the Slytherins.
“Come on”

And off they went hand in hand towards the Great hall with Lily talking about romantic things all the time the incident but she was failing miserably.

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Hope u like it.

this is gr8, cant wait for more

Yeah I am trying to post fast.

it doesnt make sense.

And can you please tell me what doesn't make sense?

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I'm loving it already....

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Originally posted by Waterslicer
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I'm loving it already....

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Thanks. I am very happy that u like it. 🙂

Lovey Dovey. James+Lily shipper! J'adore ta Fantaisie.

first of all Gryffindor is spelled wrong. And what does>But James was too old a bird to be caught with chaff<mean?

I don't think one spelling mistake is such a big thing. I have read yours and many other fanfictions. They also have mistakes. I am no real author. I only write this for fun. And for 'too old a bird to be caught with chaff',it is an phrase which means not stupid enough to be caught by a small trick.

There at the Gryffindor table all were confused. The ever laughing James was boiling in anger and on the other hand Lily Potter was talking to James in the most romantic way she could.

“Hey James are you okay?” Sirius finally asked the question which was in the minds of everyone.

“Of course he is, aren’t you James?” Lily said but was not able to satisfy Serius.

“Tell mate. What or shall I say who is making you so much angry? Tell me and I will go and test few of my spells and hexes on him. I am dying to get a guinea pig for my practice,” Sirius was of course going to say more when he noticed that Lily was staring at him with a look that said ‘don’t give him foolish ideas or else……’.

“Who else could it be other than a Slytherin?” Peter said.

“Yeah name him James,” Sirius was now becoming concerned as James was fuming till now and he was never angry for such a long time.

Sorry I will write more and post it soon.
Hope you liked this one.

i never said it was a problem and i never said it wasn't an accident. dont get offensive. You said you wanted people to comment on things and help you and i am. I'm saying i didn't understand that phrase because i've never heard it before. I was just trying to help you be a better writer. And editting is one thing that good writer should do after writing. I edit and sometimes I miss things and I don't care that people comment on my mistakes cuz at least they draw my attention to it and i can fix it next time.

Well I was not being offensive but defensive. I didn't want to sound rude but I had then Sorry. I had no intention of being rude. I was having my quarterly exams which finished today so before today I was in a real hurry to post. So I din't have any time to edit. Well I do appreciate comments. Please don't mind. But I think I was write about the spelling part and I hope you have understood its meaning. 🙂

Go on......
Almost there.....
Keep trying....
You can do it...
Start posting..
Again.

I promise I will post soon.

Hey Kaz I need help. Could you post for me please.

its really good, keep it up.

Thanks but you know I need some help. I am not in a mood to write for 3-4 days atleast.

i would but i havent been able to followl this story much so PM me whats been happening and when i got time i'll post some for u 😄

Originally posted by iluvhpsomuch1_7
i never said it was a problem and i never said it wasn't an accident. dont get offensive. You said you wanted people to comment on things and help you and i am. I'm saying i didn't understand that phrase because i've never heard it before. I was just trying to help you be a better writer. And editting is one thing that good writer should do after writing. I edit and sometimes I miss things and I don't care that people comment on my mistakes cuz at least they draw my attention to it and i can fix it next time.

I'm sure there are kinder ways to comment on someone's story.

You are being very brusque. However, I must agree that the 'old bird' comment was a bit obsucre. If you are planning to write from a third-person narrative, then that sort of local slang comment damages the image of the impassive narrator.